My attempt at comic making - Garry's Mod

Hey there, I always thought making comics would be cool so here's my little attempt at some random action scene (if you can call it that). Any idea how I should edit my images into one image with grids like in comic books? Well, till then I decided to just post them all separately. Without further due, here is my little test for a comic. I am aware the ragdolls look a little strange at parts and my editing's not top notch, I would love cc. [img]http://puu.sh/31STo[/img] [img]http://puu.sh/31SU0[/img] [img]http://puu.sh/31SUT[/img] [img]http://puu.sh/31SVD[/img] [img]http://puu.sh/31SWw[/img] [img]http://puu.sh/31SXo[/img] [img]http://puu.sh/31SYb[/img] [img]http://puu.sh/31SYU[/img] [img]http://puu.sh/31SZD[/img] [img]http://puu.sh/31T0F[/img] [img]http://puu.sh/31T1B[/img] [img]http://puu.sh/31T2t[/img]

Work on the posing for the people in the background

I liked it.

Then terrorists come and take hostages.

you actually did a wonderful job conveying motion from panel to panel, which is not easy, but the panel layout (or lack thereof) + some posing + lack of editing + + + kinda ruin it :(

Wow, that was very excellent work :)

the picture are kind of big for my screen so it was hard to read. i personally found this comic to be a little offensive becuz of the racist joeks but otherwise it's p good if this is your first attempt. sowrd fights are p cool and u dont see them very often in comix!

The posing was actually done really well for this. Sweet beans man

Your posing is very good, which I find personally can be what makes or breaks a comic (Or any picture really, but when you have multiple images of bad posing, it really drags it down). Your framing is good, but not brilliant, because you've opted to focus on the [I]entire[/I] scene in [B]every[/B] panel, which is unnecessary (And distracts the reader from the action). You would have benefited more from some tigher, close-up shots of the fighting. I can tell a running theme is seeing the reaction from the guys in the background throughout the fight, but as you mentioned in the original paragraph you're looking to come up with a more typical comic layout and that would have helped switch the perspective back and forth better. The biggest letdown for me here is the writing. Using racial slurs and swearing in huge red lettering hits the credibility of your comic hard. It's a silly, goofy setup I know and you're obviously not going for anything serious, but you're alienating your audience every time you do it. In the future, seriously question if that kind of thing is necessary - "Does the character on the sofa [I]have to[/I] refer to the Asian guy like that? Can I say the same thing, but more subtle?", etc. Overall the quality of the comic is decent and your posing is what sells it. The storyline is obviously an afterthought here, so I won't criticise that. You were going for something quick and silly and it worked. I think with some editing practice and better camera angles you're gonna be pretty damn good at this.

Yeah, it's... it's a start. [QUOTE=MaikkiBoi;40795184]Any idea how I should edit my images into one image with grids like in comic books?[/QUOTE] Feel free to check [url=http://efmonline.wordpress.com/tutorials/comic-layout-tutorial/]my old tutorial for comic editing[/url]. If you want some examples of comics, [url=http://metrocop.net/]see here[/url]. Mine is The Adventures of Hercule Cubbage.

[QUOTE=Dactrius;40799694]Your posing is very good, which I find personally can be what makes or breaks a comic (Or any picture really, but when you have multiple images of bad posing, it really drags it down). Your framing is good, but not brilliant, because you've opted to focus on the [I]entire[/I] scene in [B]every[/B] panel, which is unnecessary (And distracts the reader from the action). You would have benefited more from some tigher, close-up shots of the fighting. I can tell a running theme is seeing the reaction from the guys in the background throughout the fight, but as you mentioned in the original paragraph you're looking to come up with a more typical comic layout and that would have helped switch the perspective back and forth better. The biggest letdown for me here is the writing. Using racial slurs and swearing in huge red lettering hits the credibility of your comic hard. It's a silly, goofy setup I know and you're obviously not going for anything serious, but you're alienating your audience every time you do it. In the future, seriously question if that kind of thing is necessary - "Does the character on the sofa [I]have to[/I] refer to the Asian guy like that? Can I say the same thing, but more subtle?", etc. Overall the quality of the comic is decent and your posing is what sells it. The storyline is obviously an afterthought here, so I won't criticise that. You were going for something quick and silly and it worked. I think with some editing practice and better camera angles you're gonna be pretty damn good at this.[/QUOTE]I apologize if anyone was offended, I guess I should have taken a second glance at the dialogue. When I was editing the speech in I thought it was funny at the time, sorry. I'll also try and work on my lettering next time! Thanks for the feedback, maybe I'll try and come up with an actual storyline instead of making it up as I go next time, even though this was just a small test.

[QUOTE=MaikkiBoi;40800177]I apologize if anyone was offended, I guess I should have taken a second glance at the dialogue. When I was editing the speech in I thought it was funny at the time, sorry. I'll also try and work on my lettering next time! Thanks for the feedback, maybe I'll try and come up with an actual storyline instead of making it up as I go next time, even though this was just a small test.[/QUOTE] Listen, I'm not an authority on comic making, so please take my advice with a grain of salt. The best way you can improve is to keep making more comics, man. This community can do with more of them, I look for them in particular. I'd love to see you produce something with a longer storyline. :)

[QUOTE=Dactrius;40800227]Listen, I'm not an authority on comic making, so please take my advice with a grain of salt.[/QUOTE] I disagree with this. Dactrius is talented, so if you should listen to anyone regarding getting started in comics, he's your guy.