Freelancer Chronicles - Garry's Mod

this is my first comic, so please try to offer "constructive" criticism. [img]http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2010/169/9/5/Freelancer_Chronicles_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2010/169/9/8/Page_1_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] this is only the cover but more will be coming soon, so sit tight.

Hi. A few suggestions: [LIST] [*] Try not to use gm_construct. This is the standard map which is shipped with GMod and is mainly used for the sandbox gamemode. There are other maps which suit your storyline, for example, rp_c18_v1, rp_tb_city45_v02n, etc etc. [*] Try to use a spellchecker before you post text. Microsoft Word is quite good but there are websites as well, so have a look on Google. [/LIST] Apart from that, your posing is fairly good considering it's your first comic, especially the masked man on the right, that posing is pretty nice. If you're using paint, then don't, use [URL]http://www.gimp.org/[/URL] or Adobe Photoshop if you have it. Good luck on the next comic, I'll be looking forward to it.

not Gm construct, gm_pd_destruct, which is a mod of the original. my PC is shit, have to use Gmod on lowest settings. :( was rushed because i do most of this at work. more will come so check back often.

[QUOTE=Freelancer Jak;22717585]not Gm construct, gm_pd_destruct, which is a mod of the original. my PC is shit, have to use Gmod on lowest settings. :( was rushed because i do most of this at work. more will come so check back often.[/QUOTE] If your PC is shit to the point were you have to put it on the lowest settings then you shouldn't make comics. Nothing will looking good. Ever.

He's right. If your PC can't handle decent Source settings then stop now, sorry.

way to crush my dreams. still doing this.

[QUOTE=Freelancer Jak;22731354]way to crush my dreams. still doing this.[/QUOTE] Just buy a new PC...

God this looks like a frekin' PS1 game.

your spelling :psyboom:

Sorry but i have to agree with these guys. Shit PC = no comic making ever, even if you do continue, you will see the same comments.

you you hate it so much feel free to donate.

I don't think it's that big an issue. Generally pictures can be cleaned up afterwards with an image manipulation program, it's just a better PC can help save a lot of time and effort later on.

Some helpful criticism you guys are giving. >.> Just pose and set up the scene on crappy settings then set it to max settings when you take the screenshot.

[QUOTE=Freelancer Jak;22775274]you you hate it so much feel free to donate.[/QUOTE] Why would we donate for you to buy a new computer? Mow some lawns. Get a job. Work for it your self. People get flamed for asking "I want tf2 plox so gift meh it!" so why should we give you our money?

I honestly want to know what place would hire you because from the looks of your absolutely atrocious spelling you have the intelligence of a five year old using a dictionary written by a two year old.

Garbage truck [DEL]driver?[/DEL] worker? The guy who rides on the back and dumps the trash in.

[QUOTE=kevinseven;22778825]Why would we donate for you to buy a new computer? Mow some lawns. Get a job. Work for it your self. [/QUOTE] i have a job, unfortunately things like food, bills, and internet are more important to me than a new PC.

Then we can't help, Sorry, New pc or no comic making.

[QUOTE=Lunik;22776510]Some helpful criticism you guys are giving. >.> Just pose and set up the scene on crappy settings then set it to max settings when you take the screenshot.[/QUOTE] I think this is going to be the way to go.

[QUOTE=UserDerth;22785902]Then we can't help, Sorry, New pc or no comic making.[/QUOTE] Dude you have no right to tell this guy if he can or can't make a comic. He has all the right in the world to make a comic with shitty graphics, terrible spelling, and boring characters. It doesn't mean [I]should [/I]but you of all people should be the last to tell him he can't make a damn comic.

[QUOTE=Zeekybomb343;22788386]Dude you have no right to tell this guy if he can or can't make a comic. He has all the right in the world to make a comic with shitty graphics, terrible spelling, and boring characters. It doesn't mean [I]should [/I]but you of all people should be the last to tell him he can't make a damn comic.[/QUOTE] And on this note, I proudly present a Son 0f Grim production, (have to mention him, he does all the Photoshop) Who watches the watchers? [img]http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2010/173/d/2/who_watches_the_watchers__pg1_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc06.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2010/173/9/1/pg2_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc09.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2010/173/b/3/pg3_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2010/173/4/3/pg4_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2010/173/c/2/pg5_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc00.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2010/173/d/a/pg6_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2010/173/d/e/pg7_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2010/173/4/7/pg8_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2010/173/6/f/pg9_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2010/173/6/a/pg10_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2010/173/9/1/pg11_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2010/173/9/f/pg12_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc09.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2010/173/1/3/pg13_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] [img]http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2010/173/c/b/pg14_by_Son0fgrim.jpg[/img] and thats it, tune in for more coming soon.

[QUOTE=Zeekybomb343;22788386]Dude you have no right to tell this guy if he can or can't make a comic. He has all the right in the world to make a comic with shitty graphics, terrible spelling, and boring characters. It doesn't mean [I]should [/I]but you of all people should be the last to tell him he can't make a damn comic.[/QUOTE] If he wants to be respected on comic making, and get C&C without having people say "Get a new pc", then he needs either turn graphics up when take a picture, OR get a new pc.

[QUOTE=UserDerth;22808194]If he wants to be respected on comic making, and get C&C without having people say "Get a new pc", then he needs either turn graphics up when take a picture, OR get a new pc.[/QUOTE] I do turn the graphics all the way up, to medium. which is what my PC can handle if nothing moves. then I Photoshop the rest with the help of Son 0f Grim, who's a buddy of mine.

[QUOTE=UserDerth;22808194]If he wants to be respected on comic making, and get C&C without having people say "Get a new pc", then he needs either turn graphics up when take a picture, OR get a new pc.[/QUOTE] Then you should have said THAT. You shouldn't have said he isn't allowed to make a comic at all. [QUOTE=Freelancer Jak;22808134]And on this note, I proudly present [/QUOTE] You REALLY should work on getting a new computer, your editing skills, and ideas before making a comic. I may have defended you but that doesn't mean I think you should keep going. To be honest this comic needs a crap load of improvement.

read the newest one yet? by the way the first panel is the raw unedited cut of the image before Son 0f Grim Photoshops it.

[QUOTE=Freelancer Jak;22808284]I do turn the graphics all the way up, to medium. which is what my PC can handle if nothing moves. then I Photoshop the rest with the help of Son 0f Grim, who's a buddy of mine.[/QUOTE] Medium settings? It still looks low to me, and i meant over that it can handle.

comment on the comic, not the image quality. I hate the low quality, if you hate it so much; PM me and you can be my camera man and take photos for me, then Email them to Son 0f Grim so he can Shop them and then I'll post them. I'll happily hire a Camera man with a better PC then me to take photos in High-def.

[QUOTE=Freelancer Jak;22813613][B]comment on the comic, not the image quality. I hate the low quality, if you hate it so much; PM me and you can be my camera man and take photos for me, then Email them to Son 0f Grim so he can Shop them and then I'll post them.[/B] I'll happily hire a Camera man with a better PC then me to take photos in High-def.[/QUOTE] So then you wont be doing any work? :downs:

[QUOTE=halflambada;22813860]So then you wont be doing any work? :downs:[/QUOTE] Read harder, good sir. He wants a guy to take the shot for him after he's done with the posing and stuff. I don't know if I should help you; The comic doesn't look good right now, but it could just be the graphics. Also, the editing isn't really sharp. The only thing I can see him doing is covering the entire picture in white.

Looks like the first episode of Red vs Blue. Where they go. Guy 1 : Hey Guy 2 : Yeah? Guy 1 : You ever wonder why we're here? Then Guy 2 breaks into a speech about wondering if there's a God. Looks very fimiliar actually.