RP_Coastal - Alpha - Developers

This is my first Role-play map and it is still in the Hammer stage. I would like some constructive criticism on everything E.G Textures, brushwork, layout as I would like this to be the best I can make. The map, so far, Includes - 1 estate agent - 3 terraced houses - 3 flats - 2 detached houses - 2 plots of land - 1 Office space to rent above bank - 1 bank - 1 burger joint - 1 gas station - 1 internet café - 1 bus stop - 1 Jail/ploice station Details; -The bank has a keypad activated vault (health-shoot open = 2000) Containing 216 gold bars. -The vault code is 349 -The door to the staff only section of the bank can be locked and unlocked from the room adjoining the foyer. -There is CCTV in the vault veiwable from the monitor in the room adjoining the foyer -Use the screen to change cameras -Access to office space at the rear of the bank. TO BE ADDED; Town/city hall Pharmacy Restaurant gun-shop Here are some pictures taken in hammer; [b] OVER VIEW [/b] [IMG]http://img140.imageshack.us/img140/1259/rpcostal1.png[/IMG] [b]RP_COASTAL BANK [/b] Outside of the bank [IMG]http://img198.imageshack.us/img198/6418/rpcostal15.png[/IMG] The vault ( Outside an Inside ) [IMG]http://img688.imageshack.us/img688/1475/rpcostal18.png[/IMG] Cash registers [IMG]http://img266.imageshack.us/img266/8944/rpcostal17.png[/IMG] Inside the bank [IMG]http://img195.imageshack.us/img195/3458/rpcostal16.png[/IMG] [b]THE PRISON [/b] The main cell block [IMG]http://img571.imageshack.us/img571/716/rpcostal14.png[/IMG] Inside a cell [IMG]http://img541.imageshack.us/img541/9269/rpcostal13.png[/IMG] The Canteen [IMG]http://img514.imageshack.us/img514/9531/rpcostal12.png[/IMG] Entrance [IMG]http://img203.imageshack.us/img203/3995/rpcostal11.png[/IMG] The outside of the prison [IMG]http://img293.imageshack.us/img293/7752/rpcostal10.png[/IMG] [b] ESTATE AGENT AND PLOTS [/b] Plot No' 1 [IMG]http://img202.imageshack.us/img202/2208/rpcostal9.png[/IMG] Office space [IMG]http://img190.imageshack.us/img190/3672/rpcostal30.png[/IMG] Outside the estate agents [IMG]http://img190.imageshack.us/img190/1140/rpcostal3.png[/IMG] Inside the estate agents [IMG]http://img248.imageshack.us/img248/9238/rpcostal2.png[/IMG] [b] THE CHURCH [/b] [IMG]http://img339.imageshack.us/img339/9573/rpcostal8.png[/IMG] [b] Internet cafe and terrace [/b] Inside the cafe [IMG]http://img17.imageshack.us/img17/2360/rpcostal7.png[/IMG] Outside the cafe [IMG]http://img232.imageshack.us/img232/5817/rpcostal6.png[/IMG] Terraced houses' kitchens [IMG]http://img375.imageshack.us/img375/2861/rpcostal5.png[/IMG] Terraced houses' Upstairs [IMG]http://img375.imageshack.us/img375/4724/rpcostal4.png[/IMG] [b] APARTMENT BLOCK [/b] Living room [IMG]http://img218.imageshack.us/img218/8638/rpcostal29.png[/IMG] Kitchen/diner [IMG]http://img340.imageshack.us/img340/2855/rpcostal28.png[/IMG] Bathroom [IMG]http://img80.imageshack.us/img80/9335/rpcostal27.png[/IMG] [b] BUS STOP [/b] [IMG]http://img442.imageshack.us/img442/2028/rpcostal26.png[/IMG] [b] GAS STATION [/b] [IMG]http://img338.imageshack.us/img338/310/rpcostal19.png[/IMG] [b] LARGE HOUSES [/b] House 1 attic [IMG]http://img10.imageshack.us/img10/7315/rpcostal25.png[/IMG] House 1 Kitchen [IMG]http://img204.imageshack.us/img204/9785/rpcostal23.png[/IMG] House 1 Bedroom [IMG]http://img695.imageshack.us/img695/8020/rpcostal24.png[/IMG] House 1 Living room [IMG]http://img225.imageshack.us/img225/1027/rpcostal22.png[/IMG] House 1 Outside [IMG]http://img688.imageshack.us/img688/8170/rpcostal21.png[/IMG] House 2 Living room [IMG]http://img64.imageshack.us/img64/2580/rpcostal20.png[/IMG] Thank-you and sorry for the long post :+ [editline]05:13PM[/editline] BTW the beach is green because my custom blend textures appear opposite in-game

That's alot of pics :P Looks like your really far with it but it's a bit ugly though...maybe it'll look alot better with lighting, can you show a pic with lighting?

Looks useful but kind of outdated, would prefer in-game screenshots though.

Ill try and get some pics with lighting sorted out.

Yes, get ingame pictures rather than hammer screenshots, and add more detail to the interiors. Some things need to be bordered, like doorways, windows, skirting on the bottom of the walls etc.

It's so great at some places. But its bad at others. [editline]04:35PM[/editline] Do those windows have frames in the first pic

The maps seems pretty empty, but I guess that is fine since its alpha.

You need better materials and some detail.

Use better/custom textures, default HL2 ones are ugly and overused.

Textures are fuck ugly. Can't really comment on anything else as it's not ingame.

Holy fuck you came prepared with lots of images ;;_;; On the other hand, it's not the worst mapping, but some criticism from a few mappers will probably help you. I suggest getting a custom shiny-yellow colour for the gold bars in the Bank.

The wall textures look really bland, try looking up some good modern textures, layout looks pretty good.