https://orig00.deviantart.net/ebfc/f/2018/063/8/6/technomancy_by_t3ss3r-dc4yms4.jpg
i made just for figure out how to make good particle effects
PROS:
good use of color
well posed
good narrative
you know i aint gonna say nothing bad about titties
CONS:
those buildings in the back pop too much in relation to the stuff up front, which should be the focus
the really complex patterning just doesn't work, especially with the hair and the body patterns. for practice it's not bad, but i'd keep working on it before submitting anything serious.
i for one don't see what's wrong with the patterning, the only spot where it looks off to me is the cloud effect
speaking of which, the mist on the ground feels too light in color, and also too dense. the transition between the smoke clouds and the... non-smokey parts should be more subtle, because right now it feels like the mist is incredibly heavy for whatever reason, clinging to the ground. it's just a big lump of smokey stuff with too clearly defined borders, it should be becoming more transparent and faded the further it gets from her/it, but that can't be seen here. it looks out of place, because the way it's all over the scene makes it look more like something created by the environment rather than resulting from the technomagic. this is also why the coloring is an issue: the mist should be a darker shade of purple to match all the other effects around the character to make it clear that it's associated with the technomancer's magic powers
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