• A song I wrote
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Hey, I'm in a band, I made a song not so long ago and I wanna know how you guys react to the lyrics... So here goes... [code] Now bow your head and say your prayers And while your at it take whats theirs Hope for a life that's not this bad Hope for a song not quite as sad Free yourself and free your life And while your at it take this knife I'll kill myself if I can't break free I'll kill myself if I can't break free We're taken by the media listen to what I say burgers noodles and pizza Here it comes judgement day Breathing down your fucking neck listen to what I say The countrys dead yeah it's a wreck Here it comes judgement day Now take this gun and shoot at them But what's different between us and them You call them black and you say they bomb Hey that's good just blame islam We elected Gordon Brown But we're rejected and beaten down Come one come all to this freak sideshow Pack your bags come on lets go! We're taken by the media listen to what I say burgers noodles and pizza Here it comes judgement day Breathing down your fucking neck listen to what I say The countrys dead yeah it's a wreck Here it is Judgement Day ~ Solo ~ The Media Screams 5000 Lies every single day ( x8 ) [/code] This is a Punk Rock Song, it will be on our album (Which is free to download and £7.00 to buy a hard copy)
Sounds pretty good man, just get some meaty riffs behind it.
Already got some riffs
Not too shabby. When is your album out and where can I get it?
It'll be out in the next couple of weeks. I will provide a link...
Cheers babes
No Prob. Does anyone want our whole set of Lyrics?
Looks pretty cool. A bit depressing/fite dem govmunts!, but pretty cool nonetheless.
Yeah, all our songs are Political.
[QUOTE=Loli;18049759]No Prob. Does anyone want our whole set of Lyrics?[/QUOTE] I would very much like that
[QUOTE=Loli;18050034]Yeah, all our songs are Political.[/QUOTE] I like political music, but I like it more when it focusses on a particular issue or trend, not just "dem govmunts thay are eevil". For example [code]There's a young boy in the queue There's not much else here for him to do He's had a drink, he's had a few Down the pub on Hope Street Dear old lady, you're looking thin Got a shopping bag with your life in Your old man's going through the bins And so it goes on hope street Rain on me come pouring down Clean the dirt off this old town Tell the sun to come around And show his face on Hope Street There's a fight right down the street The betting shop has got him beat He blew his money for the week On a horse called Hope Street No old faces out today Someone took them all away Cleaning up or so they say The dirty face of Hope Street Rain on me come pouring down Clean the dirt of this old town Tell the sun to come around And show his face on hope street Rain on me come pouring down Clean the dirt of this old town Tell the sun to come around And show his face on hope street Everyday I look at you Dressed up in your ties of blue Saying there's not much that you can do To help the kids on Hope Street You don't seem to even care That it was you that put them there You seem to think they like it there Hanging out on Hope Street Rain on me come pouring down Clean the dirt off this old town Tell the sun to come around And show his face on hope street [/code] Like I said, your lyrics are good, but if all the songs on the album are just generic fight the power songs it could get repetitive. If the other songs focus on specific issues and that is a sort of theme song anthem thing, then it could work really well.
[QUOTE=Negrul1;18050767]I like political music, but I like it more when it focusses on a particular issue or trend, not just "dem govmunts thay are eevil". For example [code]There's a young boy in the queue There's not much else here for him to do He's had a drink, he's had a few Down the pub on Hope Street Dear old lady, you're looking thin Got a shopping bag with your life in Your old man's going through the bins And so it goes on hope street Rain on me come pouring down Clean the dirt off this old town Tell the sun to come around And show his face on Hope Street There's a fight right down the street The betting shop has got him beat He blew his money for the week On a horse called Hope Street No old faces out today Someone took them all away Cleaning up or so they say The dirty face of Hope Street Rain on me come pouring down Clean the dirt of this old town Tell the sun to come around And show his face on hope street Rain on me come pouring down Clean the dirt of this old town Tell the sun to come around And show his face on hope street Everyday I look at you Dressed up in your ties of blue Saying there's not much that you can do To help the kids on Hope Street You don't seem to even care That it was you that put them there You seem to think they like it there Hanging out on Hope Street Rain on me come pouring down Clean the dirt off this old town Tell the sun to come around And show his face on hope street [/code] Like I said, your lyrics are good, but if all the songs on the album are just generic fight the power songs it could get repetitive. If the other songs focus on specific issues and that is a sort of theme song anthem thing, then it could work really well.[/QUOTE] Who wrote that song?
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[QUOTE=Atomic_punch;18051316]Who wrote that song?[/QUOTE] Levellers.
OK So our Album Goes [code] 1. Linear Motion 2. Dammit 3. The Media 4. Warning 5. War [b]Look at this one carefully[/b] 6. Loving The Music [b]If you support BNP Don't Read This[/b] 7. Give It Up 8. Hurt [/code] Track 1 - Linear Motion [code] Linear Motion Intro Back in school we get good grades Now with our education it just fades We sit on our ass all god damn day I feel my voice slipping away [Bridge] Verse 1 We go to college, get a job we get our pay, light the hob cook a meal, eat alone wait for the ring, of the telephone check the mail, we got bills grab our bag, run to the hills stop the path, breaking free politcal death means anarchy Chorus Now life is a linear motion we do the same things and the same things happen And life is a linear motion feel no pain, no emotion But life is a linear motion We rise up yet nothing happens Yeah life is a linear motion rise up and just don't listen [Bridge] Verse 2 Damn kids, your all the same So take a gun and take your aim Join the army, kill a man lifes a bitch, and so we ran away from home, from safe hands we ran through hills, onto the sands we got to the sea, ome last time we ran from it all, escaped war time Chorus Now life is a linear motion we do the same things and the same things happen And life is a linear motion feel no pain, no emotion But life is a linear motion We rise up yet nothing happens Yeah life is a linear motion rise up and just don't listen [Bridge] [Oli Solo] [Matt Solo] The bit that don't get a name! I looked into your eyes, to see if I could see The torment in the world, the plee of sympathy But as I looked at you, and you looked back at me we knew it couldn't last, we would never be free Outro x 2 Back in school we get good grades Now with our education it just fades We sit on our ass all god damn day I feel my voice slipping away [/code] Track 3 - The Media [code] Now bow your head and say your prayers And while your at it take whats theirs Hope for a life that's not this bad Hope for a song not quite as sad Free yourself and free your life And while your at it take this knife I'll kill myself if I can't break free I'll kill myself if I can't break free We're taken by the media listen to what I say burgers noodles and pizza Here it comes judgement day Breathing down your fucking neck listen to what I say The countrys dead yeah it's a wreck Here it comes judgement day Now take this gun and shoot at them But what's different between us and them You call them black and you say they bomb Hey that's good just blame islam We elected Gordon Brown But we're rejected and beaten down Come one come all to this freak sideshow Pack your bags come on lets go! We're taken by the media listen to what I say burgers noodles and pizza Here it comes judgement day Breathing down your fucking neck listen to what I say The countrys dead yeah it's a wreck Here it is Judgement Day ~ Solo ~ The Media Screams 5000 Lies every single day ( x8 ) [/code] Track 5 - War [code] Why Are Rationalists Waging A Raging War And Rationalising War? A Ready Willing Army, Ready Waiting A Round Whilst A Royal Waits A Royal Waisting. Aniahlation Ready [/code] Track 6 - Loving The Music [code] Lovin' The Music - Intro - x2 Hey man I'm lovin' the music And I'm never gonna quit it Hell why don'tcha turn it up - Verse 1 - But who the fuck are we To give into the fury My fists become the rage And the battle will engage But Who the fuck are you To critisize a jew You're no different to Hitler You're just like a loyer - Chorus - Your fillling up our ears with bullshit useless noise controlling all our fears with your political ploys - Verse 2 - Racist, Facist, really quite insane Mindless, Faceless, Generic piece of shit Nick Griffin causes pain Killer, Liar, Main Culprit Out of Hope, out of faith Out of white, out of the country In with pain, in with hate Why don't you bring in the body bags - Chorus - Your fillling up our ears with bullshit useless noise controlling all our fears with your political ploys - Outro - Speaking - Fill our ears with the noise of the patriots But we won't give in, think for yourself Rise above the soundwaves, listen to the truth Look around, look at the homeless, the poor the young, the elderly Stop the hatred and the war, stop the racism The Facism, The Government [/code] Track 7 - Give It Up [code] Gotta Copy this onto my PC [/code]
I would never share lyrics of mine over the internet.
Well, If Someone Nicks them I don't care. If someone wants to use them perfectly fine, they're just words, spreading the word of what's right isn't a bad thing. All I ask is people aknowlage that we made these lyrics, they came from our hearts.
I really like those, actually, especially linear motion. Would go well with fiddles; the lyrics are sort of folky, and in a lot of ways quite similar to the other Levellers lyrics (no bad thing; they are one of my favourite bands). [editline]01:45AM[/editline] But as a tip; don't use names. If you use names, you are confining your song to one particular time in the soon to be history. If you want your lyrics to hold up ten years from now, don't use names of today's political figures.
Thanks, We wrote about Nick Griffin because of what he has done which annoys us. Out of all the government organisations I would say bnp is by far the worst. I'll copy up "Give it Up" Soon [editline]11:07AM[/editline] Anyone noticed anything about Track 5
You sound kind of emo, I hope all your songs aren't whining about the government and the media, at least have some uplifting ones.
Our first album is about the Afghan war, How the media have made it massive and how the government keep sending people in to die for their government. Our second Album will be uplifting, it will be about how life would be without laws, regulations and restrictions. And although alot of the lyrics have a harsh meaning the tunes are quite upbeat and nice. I really wouldn't call us emo, we're more Hard Punk than anything.
[QUOTE=Loli;18058839]Our first album is about the Afghan war, How the media have made it massive and how the government keep sending people in to die for their government. Our second Album will be uplifting, it will be about how life would be without laws, regulations and restrictions.[/QUOTE] Perhaps you should mix it up a bit, add some variety, people don't like to be constantly reminded how depressing the world is, we're already in a recession.
Well, as I said the tune is nice and happy. I think you would enjoy the second Album More. [editline]11:29AM[/editline] You could relate us to these bands... Anti Flag - [url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Aa5KJ5C-QP8[/url] (We sound alot like these guys) Alexisonfire - [url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=G_wnm_GdQFs[/url] Four Year Strong - [url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-bluR5vXh_8[/url] Rise Against - [url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=utWqCyq-RK0[/url]
Don't just write songs about how the government is shit and stuff like that or all who is going to listen to you is angsty teens. [editline]01:25PM[/editline] Yeah fight the power!!!!!!
[QUOTE=Loli;18058821]Thanks, We wrote about Nick Griffin because of what he has done which annoys us. Out of all the government organisations I would say bnp is by far the worst. I'll copy up "Give it Up" Soon [editline]11:07AM[/editline] Anyone noticed anything about Track 5[/QUOTE] Each line spells war.
[QUOTE=Loli;18058821]Anyone noticed anything about Track 5[/QUOTE] It's not clever if you force people to notice it
[QUOTE=SenorJose;18058826]You sound kind of emo, I hope all your songs aren't whining about the government and the media, at least have some uplifting ones.[/QUOTE] Emotive Hardcore isn't political related. Get the fuck out.
[QUOTE=CorpseRida;18064086]Emotive Hardcore isn't political related. Get the fuck out.[/QUOTE] Easy there, isn't being emo about self harm, he mentioned suicide and cutting with knives in the first song.
[QUOTE=SenorJose;18065044]Easy there, isn't being emo about self harm, he mentioned suicide and cutting with knives in the first song.[/QUOTE][url]http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Emo[/url] Educate yourself.
If you don't believe in the government what do you believe in
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