Alright the book is called Truely origins
you can get it here [url]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/7872802/Truely%20origins.zip[/url]
Just post here what you think of it.
MAKE SURE YOU READ THE WHOLE THING BEFORE BEING A RAGING @$$!
Why did you spell "Truly" wrong.
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I don't even want to read it now
[QUOTE=DJFender;23906724]Why did you spell "Truly" wrong.
[editline]06:48PM[/editline]
I don't even want to read it now[/QUOTE]
Truely is a guys name truly is just truth
Too late, bad spelling ratings will storm in.
How long is it? What's it about? Post more. Otherwise people are not motivated to read it.
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23906742]Truely is a guys name truly is just truth[/QUOTE]
i will post the first chapter here just to give you a taste of the story.
Chapter 1 North pole
setting: December 1, 2003;Northern polar Ice caps;polar base of genetic experimentation. 7:35 p.m.
"It appears subject one is coming to," said the first scientist. "Remarkable, we have tested weapons on him
and he regains consciousness, Doctor Rienhoff, you are a genius," said the second. "No time to congratulate me,
we still have to do some tests with his reflexes, and strength," said Dr. Reinhoff. "Doctor we have tested his
abilities already, without distractions he can catch a bullet coming towards him or regenerate quickly
if it hits him.'His body can even push out foreign objects before he regenerates.' As for strength he
can punch through a 12 foot thick titanium door." Proclaimed the second scientist. "Your name would be?"
"Oh sorry I'm Stevenson, sir," said Stevenson proudly. "Ah yes well let's attend to our large subject, oh and
please read his credentials my mind isn't what it used to be," Dr. Reinhoff said nonchalantly.
"Yes sir," Exclaimed Stevenson as he picked up a clipboard. "Alright, Subject one is an eight foot male with
a reinforced bone structure, medium tolerance for pain, excessive strength, reflexes that a cat would be
jealous of, regenerative atoms..." "He is a work of art," Said Dr. Reinhoff. As these men talked
"Subject one" looked himself over and noticed He was wearing Cargo pants, a camo shirt, and black boots.
He also noted that he was in a storage pod with a reflective surface in front of him. From there he judged
that he had brown eyes, short black hair, and a semi long face with no facial hair. "Truly he will be the
Shepard of our advances," said Dr. Reinhoff. Subject one enjoyed the words "truly" and "Shepard", with the fact
that he didn't remember his own name. He decided his name would be Truely, and for the heck of it he chose
Shepard as his last name. "Now lets give him a little more room to test his legs out," Dr. Reinhoff said as
he pushed a button. "Now I warn you Stevenson, he weighs several hundred pounds, that's why we built the
base beneath the ice." Truely took a step out of the pod, slightly stumbled then gained balance.
"Wonderful, absolutely wonderful," Dr. Reinhoff said in awe. "Can you speak?" Stevenson said to truely.
"Rather well actually, where am I?" Truely said confused."well you're in the P.B.G.E," Stevenson said.
"Huh?" Truely said even more confused. "It stands for Polar Base of Genetic Experimentation," Reinhoff added
"Big name, I liked the other one," Truely said. "Well then lets take you to the labs, We still need to test your
tolerance of low temperature," said Stevenson. "Very well I just hope there's food on this freaking base,"
Truely said before following the scientists.
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23906765]
Chapter 1[/QUOTE]
Oh god
Seems terrible.
tl;dr
Da fuck is this shit?
Yeah, seems pretty bad. But maybe i just can't get past the bad spelling.
And the awkward sentence phrasing.
And the unrealistic dialogue.
May books are not
for you. You should try to fap
That's how I pass time.
[QUOTE=Meloan;23906763]How long is it? What's it about? Post more. Otherwise people aren't motivated to read it.[/QUOTE]
ok then it's 23 chapters. It's about a genetic experiment(main character)
who escapes from an experimental lab and goes through the storylines of the alien movies(alien, aliens, alien 3, alien resurrection, aliens versus predator, and aliens versus predator requiem)
Why is every chapter only one paragraph long? You really should learn how to actually format a book before attempting to write one, and use a fucking spell checker.
Also, get some word processing software.
Regenerative atoms?
wat
Also, improve your spelling a bit.
'genious'
[IMG]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/3794151/Truely%20origins%20title.jpg[/IMG]
What is this? Did you just steal an image from the internet and slap some unformatted words on top?
You don't seem to be putting any effort into this.
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23906829]ok then it's 23 chapters. It's about a genetic experiment(main character)
who escapes from an experimental lab and goes through the storylines of the alien movies(alien, aliens, alien 3, alien resurrection, aliens versus predator, and aliens versus predator requiem)[/QUOTE]
oh god. You made me want to buy the book now. Buy every single fucking book, drench it in gasoline, and just burn that pile of shit.
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Spelling and grammar mistakes
spelling and grammar mistakes everywhere!
-_- if there are so many mistakes then you correct them, i spent a month making this thing.
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23906829]ok then it's 23 chapters. It's about a genetic experiment(main character)
who escapes from an experimental lab and goes through the storylines of the alien movies(alien, aliens, alien 3, alien resurrection, aliens versus predator, and aliens versus predator requiem)[/QUOTE]
Dude, that shit is deep. You can get a Pulitzer prize for that shit, what are you doing posting it here?
People are going to be studying you in fucking college.
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23906909]-_- if there are so many mistakes then you correct them, i spent a month making this thing.[/QUOTE]
Why would we correct mistakes in something [I][B]YOU[/B][/I] are writing? Again, get some word processing software, do a spell check and learn how to properly format a book.
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23906909]-_- if there are so many mistakes then you correct them, i spent a month making this thing.[/QUOTE]
Best reply ever.
[QUOTE=TheDiddler;23906910]Dude, that shit is deep. You can get a Pulitzer prize for that shit, what are you doing posting it here?
People are going to be studying you in fucking college.[/QUOTE]
LOL oh man that's the funniest thing i've ever heard.
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[QUOTE=Dashiel;23906923]Why would we correct mistakes in something [I][B]YOU[/B][/I] are writing?[/QUOTE]
I only told you that for being an @$$hole
I'm not being an asshole, I'm giving you criticism. If you don't want criticism then don't post your work and ask people to tell you what they think.
Also, you can swear on the internet.
I like how chapter one ends in comedy, take a photoshop class that title is crap, the chapters were too short, "truely" should be renamed as its mistaken as a misspelling.
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[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23906909]-_- if there are so many mistakes then you correct them, i spent a month making this thing.[/QUOTE]
A WHOLE MONTH? I've written better short stories in 3 days!
[QUOTE=TheDiddler;23906910]Dude, that shit is deep. You can get a Pulitzer prize for that shit, what are you doing posting it here?
People are going to be studying you in fucking college.[/QUOTE]
I particularly enjoyed the philosophical undertones displayed throughout his book.
I don't like attributing any one thing to a major change in my life, but this has altered my perception of existence and what it means to be human.
Chapter Two, spell/grammar check.
[IMG]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/3655261/12323131screenie.PNG[/IMG]
The 'chapters' aren't more than a printed page in length. In a 'book' it would be about 4 pages if that.
You're in [B]6[/B]th grade, aren't you?
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23906933]LOL oh man that's the funniest thing i've ever heard.
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I only told you that for being an @$$hole[/QUOTE]
Disclaimer
This book/series does not reflect the ideals of 20th century fox(Alien,Aliens,
Alien 3,Alien resurrection, Alien versus predator,Alien versus predator requiem, etc.) and for anybody who
would take this too seriously,This is not a true story nor was it based on a true story.It is just A
digital book for the enjoyment of others. The dates displayed are for the beginning of the chapter only.
Finally, this follows the story of Truely not the exact movies.
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[QUOTE=Biotoxsin;23906987]Chapter Two, spell/grammar check.
[IMG]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/3655261/12323131screenie.PNG[/IMG]
The 'chapters' aren't more than a printed page in length. In a 'book' it would be about 4 pages if that.
You're in [B]6[/B]th grade, aren't you?[/QUOTE]
Well as i have said you don't have to read it
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23906990]Disclaimer
This book/series does not reflect the ideals of 20th century fox(Alien,Aliens,
Alien 3,Alien resurrection, Alien versus predator,Alien versus predator requiem, etc.) and for anybody who
would take this too seriously,This is not a true story nor was it based on a true story.It is just A
digital book for the enjoyment of others. The dates displayed are for the beginning of the chapter only.
Finally, this follows the story of Truely not the exact movies.[/QUOTE]
What do you mean not based on a true story!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!
[QUOTE=TheDiddler;23907018]What do you mean not based on a true story!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?![/QUOTE]
it's for the morrons who take things too seriously
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23906990]
Well as i have said you don't have to read it[/QUOTE]
Christ, learn how to take criticism. He actually helped you a lot there seeing as you can't be arsed to use a spell checker yourself.
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