Here are some lyrics I wrote, in the spur of the moment, after deciding I should write more wholesome stuff:
[b] Keep in mind, the instrumental I used was only 2 minutes.
Instrumental :
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wFieAwNDaZY[/media]
MY ALIAS:[/b]
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[quote]the definition of beauty, a figure of perfection
eyes that mesmerise, with a mind that grabs attention
her mind pushes attention, makes everyone inferior
think about about the internal, as opposed to the exterior
how am i to approach, devote, what i do not have
how do i attract, and everyday, witness your laugh
see, the questions i question myself with make you smile,
but they're answers undealt with, a list aslong as the nile
if you have a solution, only one comes to mind
where you're holding my hand, like a pheonix, we'll walk the line
24/7 you'll be mine, vice versa, i will stay true
understand there's not a thing that i will ever do
to ever make you pain, weep, cry
to ever make you strain, and deeply deny
the relations, that we constantly making
we tried to stay away, but couldn't resist the temptation
see girl, i think i'm lost in the wealth of your beauty
your mind is divine, but your looks is what consumes me.[/quote]
So what d'ya think?
I rated you wrench because although it's pretty good you could do with some fine-tuning, but that's mostly good.
Interesting lyrics, i like them :smile:
[QUOTE=Kaiwren-;17989065]I rated you wrench because although it's pretty good you could do with some fine-tuning, but that's mostly good.[/QUOTE]
thanks bud, could you tell me where?
Well written and seemingly thought out lyrics. I have a problem however where without music I read all lyrics as rap :S .
[QUOTE=Smeetin;18002266]Well written and seemingly thought out lyrics. I have a problem however where without music I read all lyrics as rap :S .[/QUOTE]
ha, well switched between two instrumentals, one would be difficult to find and the other is, [url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wFieAwNDaZY]'Forever Begins by Common'[/url]
Pretty fresh, but I'm no expert in this field of music so I'll let others be the judge!
[QUOTE=Smeetin;18002266]I have a problem however where without music I read all lyrics as rap :S .[/QUOTE]
Same. :sigh:
[QUOTE=Applecrap;18010385]Same. :sigh:[/QUOTE]
Well, make a beat in your head, or just tap a beat on the table. It helps.
they may be good lyrics but it doesnt mean they can keep a beat
[QUOTE=S1N1337;18016851]they may be good lyrics but it doesnt mean they can keep a beat[/QUOTE]
elaborate please?
Just post the instrumental, might make it easier to read?
[QUOTE=kizza55;18058754]Just post the instrumental, might make it easier to read?[/QUOTE]
Already Have.
[QUOTE=Metroid;18005647]ha, well switched between two instrumentals, one would be difficult to find and the other is, [url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wFieAwNDaZY]'Forever Begins by Common'[/url][/QUOTE]
what genre do these lyrics belong? rock/rap/indie etc?
[QUOTE=z_OmbeHz;18074705]what genre do these lyrics belong? rock/rap/indie etc?[/QUOTE]
rap lyrics.
[QUOTE=Metroid;18082396]rap lyrics.[/QUOTE]
i can see it. decent job dude
[QUOTE=z_OmbeHz;18083126]i can see it. decent job dude[/QUOTE]
thanks, you think it's worth it, for me to record a video of myself performing them?
[QUOTE=Metroid;18083319]thanks, you think it's worth it, for me to record a video of myself performing them?[/QUOTE]
go for it. it would be better for all of this thread's posters to hear instead of just read.
[QUOTE=Metroid;18059058]Already Have.[/QUOTE]
Stick it in the OP.
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