• The RV-200; Total Enihilation of Earth...
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Made this story up while playing around with Pandemic II: ------------------------------------------------------------ [B]The RV-200 (Rapid Virus 200)[/B] ------------------------------------------------------------ Day 1 Tuesday: We noticed many young teenage people coming to the clinic recently. We don't know why. They all said they had a "sickness feeling", but none of them had any symptoms. We dismissed all of them as bored little yankees who had nothing better to do then to fool the clinic with serious issues. Day 2, Wednesday: More people have come. Not only teenagers, but also elderly, and people in their mid 30's. All of them saying they FELT sick, but they really weren't. No symptoms. We took some blood from one of our "visitors" and dismissed him. We discovered a small bacteria in his blood. But it was harmeless. It did nothing to harm. We put the blood in a freezor containter, just for security. We also told the man, and we will probably make more blood tests by tomorrow. Day 3, Thursday: We checked the blood of 10 other people today. All had the little bacteria, but it did no harm. We decided to call the chief of medicine in the country and asked him. He told us to stay calm. He wanted us to send a sample, so they could begin making plans for a vaccine. Day 4, Friday: We got test-results from the lab. The bacteria doesn't need any kind of vaccine. It dies out from being attacked by white anti-bodies. Thankfully! We dismissed everything about vaccine, went to bed, and didn't worry about the little bacteria. Day 5, Saturday: Local news told us on the TV that the virus was deadly as cancer. We got numerous calls about it - we simply sued the news company for coming up with the idea, and trial will be on monday. I'm not involved, so well... Day 6, Sunday: A patient checked in today, saying he had sneezed all day. We checked his blood, just to make sure it wasn't just a cold. It wasn't. The bacteria had evolved in his body. It started to send out symptoms. A tiny one, of course. We told the Chief of medicine. We sent them a sample just an hour after the patient left us. We will receive reports by tomorrow. Day 7, Monday: The virus is still no worries. It dies from the white anti-bodies. Nothing to worry about. Some sneezing, and they're gone. Day 8, Tuesday: I experimented with the bacteria... I didn't like what I saw. It's become heat, cold, and moisture resistent the last few hours. We checked on a patient, and it seemed the same had happened to the bacteria in him. We decided to let it go for now, but the bacteria would be under constant check. I took on the job for that one. Day 9, Wednesday: I think the little "epedemic" we had is starting to go down. Statistics say we have 12 infected in the country. Not more, not less. Most of them are elderly, and probably just has bad immune system. Day 10, Thursday: The bacteria has gained more strength against cold, heat and moisture. We're not worried yet, though. The only symptom it still has is the sneezing. But we are starting to worry about the sneezing might be the spreading... Day 11, Friday: The symptom of sneezing has magically dissapeared into nowhere. People doesn't sneeze anymore. It's resitance to C/H/M is stable... No infections neither yesterday nor today... Still, since the little resistance boost, the number of infected in the US is now up at 65-70 people. NOT good. Day 12, Saturday: The sneezing is back. It has improved resistance in moisture. Anti-bodies is having a tough time to stand against the bacteria, but it's still effective enough to not need a vaccine... Day 13, Sunday: People have started coughing. Coughing and sneezing. Resistance in heat has improved. Chief of medicine tells us to wait with a vaccine, and see where this folds out. Day 14, Monday: Over 3,000,000 reports of the virus in the US right now. The white anti-bodies can just barelly hold it back. Day 15, Tuesday: Sores have become a new symptom for the bacteria. It's also developed a strong resistance to heat. Over 6,000,000 reported sick in the pandemic. White anti-bodies can't hold it back, but Chief of medicine tells us to wait. They recommend lots of medicins. We'll just see if it works or not... Day 16, Wednesday: Nothing has changed yet, really. Day 17, Thursday: The government today declared the boarders CLOSED. Noone gets in, noone gets out. All we can hope for is noone with the sickness got out of te country earlier... Day 18, Friday: The bacteria is now airborne, and waterborne. It has an avarage infection-rate of 100,000 humans a day. Noones died yet, and hopefully never will. Day 19, Saturday: The bacteria has spread to Canada, Mexico, Peru, India, South Africa, Greenland and Cuba. Infection-rate of 3-400,000 a day. Noone claimed dead. Day 20, Sunday: The government has decided to make a vaccine! The pandemic might be over in a week or so! It still has an avarage of 6-700,000 infections a day. We'll need lots and LOTS of vaccine... Day 21, Monday: The bacteria has claimed the name "RV-200" and, sadly, it has developed an immunity to the vaccine. The vaccine itself is delayed heavily... Day 22, Tuesday: RV-200 has claimed the sickness of over 4 billion humans, more then half the earths population. Only about 15,000 humans in the US is still not infected. This is more then an pandemic. It's developing into a possible apocalypse. Day 23, Wednesday: Less then 50 people are not infected in the US. In the whole world, about 2 million are not infected. Day 24, Thursday: No one in the US is no longer "not infected". I belive I am infected as well. All the symptoms match up to me. The bacteria has claimed all, except 600,000 more or less. The vaccine is being deployed. Hopefully it will all stop. Day 25, Friday: The vaccine works well. It has been deployed to all over the world. The time of RV-200 os over! Day 26, Saturday: The vaccine is not deployed to anyone in the US yet. The government is hiding something... Day 27, Sunday: The vaccine has developed a bigger immunity to the vaccine. Noone is being cured, but the vaccine is out... Something is not right! Day 28, Monday: Noone cured yet. RV-200 is in a stable condition. It has showed signs of possible evolving into a DEADLY VIRUS, which would end in more then 3 fourths of the Earths population dying. Let's hope it does not... Day 29, Tuesday: The bacteria is cured, apparantly. But the downside of the pandemic is sterility. No babies have been born the last days. Nowhere, noone, notime. Not even in the non-effected countries. The sterility is just a short-term sideeffect, which will dissapear in a matter of days. I wonder if we have that time... Day 30, Wednesday: First victim has died from the disease! He lived in China, and it's spreading like a fire! Day 31, Thursday: Over 9,000,000 victims have been claimed dead! This is the apocalypse! I knew it would happen! Day 32, Friday: This is madness!! They've started BURNING THE CORPSES of the dead, to prevent any further infections! Day 33, Saturday: Over 22,000,000 claimed dead. This is turning out reeaaal bad. Day 34, Sunday: Over 4,300,000,000 dead. God help us all... Day 35, Monday: Barelly a month after the first find, when it was just a tiny bacteria, it has evolved into the RV-200 (Rapid virus 200), and has already killed off a two fourths of the Earths population. God save us! Day 36, Tuesday: Started with sneezing, evolved into caughing, sneezing, sores, kidney failures and sweating. Doom is here to kill us all! ------------------------------------------------------------ [editline]01:01AM[/editline] Oh, and C&C Pliz.
''Doom is here to kill us all!'' my only problem [b]Edit:[/b] Fix your Grammar also
I like it's concept, work on grammar and its fine.
Shut. Down. Everything.
It's spelled Annihilation just so you know.
[QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Made this story up while playing around with Pandemic II: ------------------------------------------------------------ [B]The RV-200 (Rapid Virus 200)[/B] ------------------------------------------------------------[/QUOTE] here it comes [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 1 Tuesday: We noticed many young teenage people coming to the clinic recently. We don't know why. They all said they had a "sickness feeling", but none of them had any symptoms. We dismissed all of them as bored little yankees who had nothing better to do then to fool the clinic with serious issues.[/QUOTE] usually the first to show symptoms with almost any illness will be the extremely young and the extremely old as they have weakened immune systems. also not sure why you called them yankees [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 2, Wednesday: More people have come. Not only teenagers, but also elderly, and people in their mid 30's. All of them saying they FELT sick, but they really weren't. No symptoms. We took some blood from one of our "visitors" and dismissed him. We discovered a small bacteria in his blood. But it was harmeless. It did nothing to harm. We put the blood in a freezor containter, just for security. We also told the man, and we will probably make more blood tests by tomorrow.[/QUOTE] bacteria? in blood? unbelievable. i thought blood was sterile. [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 3, Thursday: We checked the blood of 10 other people today. All had the little bacteria, but it did no harm. We decided to call the chief of medicine in the country and asked him. He told us to stay calm. He wanted us to send a sample, so they could begin making plans for a vaccine.[/QUOTE] chief of all medicine, what country is this set it in. also it takes more than 10 people feeling sick to initiate the creation of a vaccine considering the only symptom so far is that it makes people "Feel sick" without having any symptoms [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 4, Friday: We got test-results from the lab. The bacteria doesn't need any kind of vaccine. It dies out from being attacked by white anti-bodies. Thankfully! We dismissed everything about vaccine, went to bed, and didn't worry about the little bacteria.[/QUOTE] yes that's how the real world works [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 5, Saturday: Local news told us on the TV that the virus was deadly as cancer. We got numerous calls about it - we simply sued the news company for coming up with the idea, and trial will be on monday. I'm not involved, so well...[/QUOTE] it really is that simple, news group airs an exaggerated report on the dangers of a new virus that has still not had any research done aside from that it exists and is easily destroyed by the human immune system, so blam they are hit with a lawsuit in hours without any of the usual time spent gathering data in order to order a lawsuit and all of the other legal mumbo jumbo required [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 6, Sunday: A patient checked in today, saying he had sneezed all day. We checked his blood, just to make sure it wasn't just a cold. It wasn't. The bacteria had evolved in his body. It started to send out symptoms. A tiny one, of course. We told the Chief of medicine. We sent them a sample just an hour after the patient left us. We will receive reports by tomorrow.[/QUOTE] normal operations for a patient with sneezing: check for strep throat, if positive, provide antibiotics, if negative, dismiss a common cold, still provide antibiotics. abnormal operations for a patient with sneezing: immediately check the blood and diagnose in one day that it is the result the same super virus that stands no chance of survival in the human body having mutated. [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 7, Monday: The virus is still no worries. It dies from the white anti-bodies. Nothing to worry about. Some sneezing, and they're gone.[/QUOTE] thank god! [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 8, Tuesday: I experimented with the bacteria... I didn't like what I saw. It's become heat, cold, and moisture resistent the last few hours. We checked on a patient, and it seemed the same had happened to the bacteria in him. We decided to let it go for now, but the bacteria would be under constant check. I took on the job for that one.[/QUOTE] normal family physicians are now also qualified virologists who can track the changes of a number of different evolutionary factors of a new strain of bacteria in real time? when did that happen? [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 9, Wednesday: I think the little "epedemic" we had is starting to go down. Statistics say we have 12 infected in the country. Not more, not less. Most of them are elderly, and probably just has bad immune system.[/QUOTE] ridiculous [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 10, Thursday: The bacteria has gained more strength against cold, heat and moisture. We're not worried yet, though. The only symptom it still has is the sneezing. But we are starting to worry about the sneezing might be the spreading...[/QUOTE] what is it powering up like dragon ball z characters? [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 11, Friday: The symptom of sneezing has magically dissapeared into nowhere. People doesn't sneeze anymore. It's resitance to C/H/M is stable... No infections neither yesterday nor today... Still, since the little resistance boost, the number of infected in the US is now up at 65-70 people. NOT good.[/QUOTE] ugh [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 12, Saturday: The sneezing is back. It has improved resistance in moisture. Anti-bodies is having a tough time to stand against the bacteria, but it's still effective enough to not need a vaccine...[/QUOTE] this is sensationalized crap, sorry [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 13, Sunday: People have started coughing. Coughing and sneezing. Resistance in heat has improved. Chief of medicine tells us to wait with a vaccine, and see where this folds out.[/QUOTE] this is like a dragon ball z episode, it just keeps powering up [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 14, Monday: Over 3,000,000 reports of the virus in the US right now. The white anti-bodies can just barelly hold it back.[/QUOTE] its just that easy to quantify things like this [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 15, Tuesday: Sores have become a new symptom for the bacteria. It's also developed a strong resistance to heat. Over 6,000,000 reported sick in the pandemic. White anti-bodies can't hold it back, but Chief of medicine tells us to wait. They recommend lots of medicins. We'll just see if it works or not...[/QUOTE] typo, chief of medicine making split second decisions alone without a research team [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 16, Wednesday: Nothing has changed yet, really.[/QUOTE] thanks for the update captain super medical chief officer master [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 17, Thursday: The government today declared the boarders CLOSED. Noone gets in, noone gets out. All we can hope for is noone with the sickness got out of te country earlier...[/QUOTE] 6 million infections in 3 days to realize hey this thing might be big [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 18, Friday: The bacteria is now airborne, and waterborne. It has an avarage infection-rate of 100,000 humans a day. Noones died yet, and hopefully never will.[/QUOTE] ughhh [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 19, Saturday: The bacteria has spread to Canada, Mexico, Peru, India, South Africa, Greenland and Cuba. Infection-rate of 3-400,000 a day. Noone claimed dead.[/QUOTE] you are setting an infection rate per day every day. [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 20, Sunday: The government has decided to make a vaccine! The pandemic might be over in a week or so! It still has an avarage of 6-700,000 infections a day. We'll need lots and LOTS of vaccine...[/QUOTE] its just that easy again. hmmm well this virus thing is pretty big i think we should. make a vaccine for it. *pop bacteria in vaccine maker 3000, blam out pops vaccine wooo* [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 21, Monday: The bacteria has claimed the name "RV-200" and, sadly, it has developed an immunity to the vaccine. The vaccine itself is delayed heavily...[/QUOTE] it grabbed the name out of our hands, we couldn't stop it because it was to powerful. man you really did use the vaccine maker 3000 to roll out of a vaccine to the entire world in 24 hours and realize it is already ineffective. [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 22, Tuesday: RV-200 has claimed the sickness of over 4 billion humans, more then half the earths population. Only about 15,000 humans in the US is still not infected. This is more then an pandemic. It's developing into a possible apocalypse.[/QUOTE] this is so bad it hurts [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 23, Wednesday: Less then 50 people are not infected in the US. In the whole world, about 2 million are not infected.[/QUOTE] so easily quantifiable [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 24, Thursday: No one in the US is no longer "not infected". I belive I am infected as well. All the symptoms match up to me. The bacteria has claimed all, except 600,000 more or less. The vaccine is being deployed. Hopefully it will all stop.[/QUOTE] there are no people with natural immunity? even the biggest viral outbreaks of all time has naturally immune people. you already said a couple days early its immune to the vaccine now too, why roll it out [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 25, Friday: The vaccine works well. It has been deployed to all over the world. The time of RV-200 os over![/QUOTE] yes!!!!! its dead! the vaccine rolled out to 6.5 bilion people over the course of one day!!! we still shipped it out when we already declared the vaccine to be ineffective against the virus once! [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 26, Saturday: The vaccine is not deployed to anyone in the US yet. The government is hiding something...[/QUOTE] intrigue!?! i just wet myself a little [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 27, Sunday: The vaccine has developed a bigger immunity to the vaccine. Noone is being cured, but the vaccine is out... Something is not right![/QUOTE] [B]the vaccine is now immune to itself[/B], how ever will it save itself from itself!? [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 28, Monday: Noone cured yet. RV-200 is in a stable condition. It has showed signs of possible evolving into a DEADLY VIRUS, which would end in more then 3 fourths of the Earths population dying. Let's hope it does not...[/QUOTE] ahhh so bad [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 29, Tuesday: The bacteria is cured, apparantly. But the downside of the pandemic is sterility. No babies have been born the last days. Nowhere, noone, notime. Not even in the non-effected countries. The sterility is just a short-term sideeffect, which will dissapear in a matter of days. I wonder if we have that time...[/QUOTE] you just said the bacteria is cured and the world is safe so im glad [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 30, Wednesday: First victim has died from the disease! He lived in China, and it's spreading like a fire![/QUOTE] what!? its not cured?! oh nooooo! spreading a like a singular fire! not like how fire in general spreads! [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 31, Thursday: Over 9,000,000 victims have been claimed dead! This is the apocalypse! I knew it would happen![/QUOTE] why didn't you stop it my smarty pants scientist?why are you able to quantify the number dead in one day this easily [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 32, Friday: This is madness!! They've started BURNING THE CORPSES of the dead, to prevent any further infections![/QUOTE] i thought you were going for a 300 quote. thankfully you didnt. also you capitalize burning corpses for no reason. [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 33, Saturday: Over 22,000,000 claimed dead. This is turning out reeaaal bad.[/QUOTE] this is bad guys.... real bad... i reckon we should amscray. go live on the moon where there is no oxygen for bacteria to breathe. i will work out how we breathe later. [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 34, Sunday: Over 4,300,000,000 dead. God help us all...[/QUOTE] again, you quantify the additional number dead in over a day, when half of the world is already dead. at this point order would be beyond gone [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 35, Monday: Barelly a month after the first find, when it was just a tiny bacteria, it has evolved into the RV-200 (Rapid virus 200), and has already killed off a two fourths of the Earths population. God save us![/QUOTE] typo, terrible [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 36, Tuesday: Started with sneezing, evolved into caughing, sneezing, sores, kidney failures and sweating. Doom is here to kill us all! ------------------------------------------------------------[/QUOTE] doom is here!!! oh no!!! [QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149][editline]01:01AM[/editline] Oh, and C&C Pliz.[/QUOTE] I can do that. This is sensationalized, exaggerated bullshit. I don't want to bring age into this but to me it is obvious you probably haven't finished public schooling yet. You have a million friggin' billion typos, the grammar is so mixed up its hard to understand the point you are trying to get across, and you have no grasp of the steps required to research a virus, create a vaccine, roll it out, or generally any piece of information you bullshit exaggerated for this story. Now I'm not saying never write another story again, but hey that's always an option. Never write a story regarding biological viruses (virii?) ever again. Please. [B]Edit:[/B] Or at least wait until you graduate high school and have a more developed mastery of the English language.
[QUOTE=brickbox;16664774]I like [B]it's[/B] concept, work on grammar and [B]its[/B] fine.[/QUOTE] you're not one to talk about grammar
[QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Day 35, Monday: Barelly a month after the first find, when it was just a tiny bacteria, it has evolved into the RV-200 (Rapid virus 200), and has already killed off a two fourths of the Earths population. God save us![/QUOTE] Two Fourths of Americans are retarded. Ya dig it? Sucka.
[QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149] Barelly a month after the first find, when it was just a tiny bacteria, it has evolved into the RV-200 (Rapid virus 200), and has already killed off [b]a two fourths[/b] of the Earths population. God save us! Oh, and C&C Pliz.[/QUOTE] Half. It was alright. Quite a bit of errors though.
[QUOTE=CadetBailey;16665324]Wow a lot of stuff. I was going to do that, but you beat me thanks.[/QUOTE] Also Bacteria /= Virus. They are two separate things. Vaccines take a horribly long time to produce. And the Virubacteria is highly unlikely to gain heat resistant and other nonsense spontaneously. Its late I don't feel like typing more its good, but full of inconsistencies research you think writers write from the top of their heads without research?
You gais do not remember its from a game, apparantly.
no excuse for writing a shitty, uninteresting story like this to be honest.
[highlight]Viruses are not bacteria. Bacteria are microorganisms and viruses are clusters of proteins and genetic matter. Bacteria can be stopped with antibiotics and vaccines can stop viruses. Vaccines are small injections of dead or inert virus that allow the body to develop immunity to the virus.[/highlight]
There is a [B]big[/B] difference between viruses and bacteria, they are not interchangable. [QUOTE=CadetBailey;16665324] bacteria? in blood? unbelievable. i thought blood was sterile. [/QUOTE] Can't tell If you're being sarcastic but bacteria and viruses travel around the body in the blood. Also If blood was sterile it would contain no Red blood cells or white blood cells. So blood is not sterile :eng101: Oh and OP always read through before you post, people have already pointed out spelling mistakes and gramma, but a good read through would have shown these mistakes.
Someone already did was I was going to do and quote all the days and do it day by day. However, the story was bad, the facts were wrong, the math didn't work, everything was just horrible. When you write a story like this, you should search the internet or go to the library and research a few things. You said the 'white anti-bodies' didn't work on it, yet you wanted a vaccine. The vaccine causes the body to create these 'white anti-bodies' and destroy it later. It has already been stated that bacteria and viruses are not the same. A bacteria can't just evolve into a virus like your story allows it to. I did the math and even with an infection rate of 1 million people per day, which is 300,000 higher than yours, the infection rate wasn't high enough. You had 4 billion people infected, but at 1 million people a day only 22 million people would be infected. A lot of it was really cheesy like one of those kids who writes a movie script and thinks it is the best thing in the world but consists of: "Joe gets on the back of his super powerful rocket motorscooter of awesome and races fastly to the nuclear power plant! He arrives and smashes through the buildings getting into the center of the core! HE IS BECOMING INFECTED WITH RADIO WAVES! IT IS CAUSING HIS BODY TO BECOME RADIATION. He is now the bad guy and is big and strong! HE CAN CRUSH A TANK WITH HIS TOE!"
doom is here shut down everything
-snip- Mentioned twice, rate me late.
my favorite part is when the they call the chief of medicine and he recommends "lots of medicins"
It's... a friggin... game. Go play it, then come back. PANDEMIC II
[QUOTE=Ferelin;16654149]Made this story up[/QUOTE] [QUOTE=Ferelin;16753077]You gais do not remember its from a game, apparantly.[/QUOTE] You laier
[QUOTE=Ferelin;16779604]It's... a friggin... game. Go play it, then come back. PANDEMIC II[/QUOTE] oh yes how could we possibly doubt such a reliable source for information about diseases
[QUOTE=TH89;16778023]my favorite part is when the they call the chief of medicine and he recommends "lots of medicins"[/QUOTE] i got just the thing for ur broken heart bab...
so this tread is for emo's and random anticipate
Somebody has been playing Pandemic. Oh...late, I guess.
[QUOTE=Ferelin;16779604]It's... a friggin... game. Go play it, then come back. PANDEMIC II[/QUOTE] I don't think anyone in this thread HASN'T played it, but by [i]writing a story[/i] about it it is assumed that you know what you're talking about. No one would like a Half Life fanfiction where the author clearly knows nothing about the way guns work and makes the whole story look dumb.
Should have made it set on Madagascar. Just sayin.
[QUOTE=Ferelin;16779604]It's... a friggin... game. Go play it, then come back. PANDEMIC II[/QUOTE]Yea? What's your point? Just because it's from a game doesn't mean the story has to suck.
I have a quicker version for you. [B]------------------------------------------------------------ The RV-200 (Rapid Virus 200) ------------------------------------------------------------[/B] Day 1 Tuesday: We noticed many young teenage people coming to the clinic recently. We don't know why. They all said they had a "sickness feeling", but none of them had any symptoms. We dismissed all of them as bored little yankees who had nothing better to do then to fool the clinic with serious issues. Day 2, Wednesday: Madagascar closes port. End.
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