• My first Rap.
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Well, first i'd like to say, Iv'e made a few short raps before, and even one for the facepunch rap competition, but never an actual complete one. Anyways, this is it. I wrote it during my boring science class, in about 3 days, and each time i worked on it lasted about 30 minutes. I listen to alot of Eminem, and this song was probably most insipred by " No ones Iller than me. " From the Slim Shady EP, : [url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KJEZeOYpDfE[/url] ( also when you're reading this pay close attention to the commas. ) Lyrics I'm a criminal, I murder kids for fun, I'm a Jackass, I threaten old people with Guns. Alot of people ask me how i became so ill, Isn't it obvious don't you see all the people i kill? Cops Question me just for walkin' down the street, people ask me why I like Hip Hop when i can't make a beat. The hoes that I pimp beg me for cash, sure honey, right after I beat dat' ass, the skill that i emmit flows through the air, the tips of my fingers flow through your sisters hair. Packin glocks, Ak's and Rpg's In my trunk, and i drive around with em', while I'm drunk. Blood's scattered all over my kitchen floor, Never thought it could get so messy raping a whore. Drug Dealers hang around me, like their stuck on a fuckin' collar, I can get a bag of weed for just 30 dollars. This bitch Blake, and his fat friend wanna jump me, Hell, not my fault their buddy Tyler tried to Taunt me. I whooped his ass for one reason only, lay your damn hands on me again and It's on homie. You three Red Neck cunts don't know shit, so why don't you get on your knees and suck my dick. Your one Year older than me, and It's still a fair fight, I'll Kill you, and bury your body at a fuckin' Construction Site. " My words are like a dagger, with a jagged edge, ' That'll cut you up, until your whole body Is covered in red. END Well, near the end you probably saw the part that's actually true about these guys in my school. Anyway, most of this was just out of bordem, Maybe when i get an actual mic some day I'll rap it, any way if you have suggestions for a beat, please share. [IMG]http://i41.tinypic.com/2842sy.jpg[/IMG]
Honestly, I find your voice pretty cool, but the rap is ruined by the lyrics and beat also change this shit [img]http://i41.tinypic.com/2842sy.jpg[/img]
:colbert: Really now?
Why does the banner says Duckboy100 while your name is Duckboy38 Other than that,it's not bad for a first rap.
[QUOTE=BrQ;24574888]Honestly, I find your voice pretty cool, but the rap is ruined by the lyrics and beat[/QUOTE] no! The youtube video isn't my song thats a song made by Eminem that i was talking about in the beginning, it's just a song that inspired this one, mine is below.
Just got scared for a second, I thought you said "my first rape"
[QUOTE=nmagain;24574940]Why does the banner says Duckboy100 while your name is Duckboy38 Other than that,it's not bad for a first rap.[/QUOTE] Because i first signed up for facepunch when i used 38 but every since i got my ps3, i use 100.
I liked everything apart from the words. [editline]0[/editline] and the logo
[QUOTE=CarlBooth;24574980]I liked everything apart from the words. [editline]0[/editline] and the logo[/QUOTE] i know, it looks pretty stupid, but it's the first one i ever made, and i used it as a banner for the rap competition, i put it together in a few minutes.
No, you did not make a rap for the facepunch rap battle. You just sent me lyrics, nothing was recorded.
[QUOTE=Pepin;24576954]No, you did not make a rap for the facepunch rap battle. You just sent me lyrics, nothing was recorded.[/QUOTE] And? I still made one.
[QUOTE=madjawa;24574954]Just got scared for a second, I thought you said "my first rape"[/QUOTE] It is a creative work of art. Let me show you.
[QUOTE=duckboy38;24578125]And? I still made one.[/QUOTE] Lyrics are not a rap, you have to rap to make it a rap.
you rhyme in the same way every time lol, gets so damn bland
Nobody takes you serious with a duck as a logo. Especially not all these wannabe's, sadly but true, the whole rap scene consists of them. :ohdear: <memories>Aww the times where people didn't care about your cap, gold chains, watches...</memories> Also, using badwords doesn't makes you a badass rapper.
What bodenlan said. Also, the lyrics were terrible. Comeon, talking about killing and fucking etc... Just no. That's not what rap is about.
Fucking sucks [editline]02:21PM[/editline] All rap fucking sucks, even if your trolling or w/e.
[QUOTE=Sergeant Lulz;24597086]Fucking sucks [editline]02:21PM[/editline] All rap fucking sucks, even if your trolling or w/e.[/QUOTE] You know, that's not constructive criticism
[QUOTE=Torekk;24589055] Also, using badwords doesn't makes you a badass rapper.[/QUOTE] That. I wouldn't claim those lyrics as good, but you just keep on trying. Also, I was utterly bored. Here, have a silly logo. [img]http://img259.imageshack.us/img259/4633/lolduck.png[/img]
This isn't a rap, this is lyrics for a rap. The title should be "My first rap LYRICS."
[QUOTE=Failboat;24612203]That. I wouldn't claim those lyrics as good, but you just keep on trying. Also, I was utterly bored. Here, have a silly logo. [img]http://img259.imageshack.us/img259/4633/lolduck.png[/img][/QUOTE] holy crap, can i copyright this?
[QUOTE=duckboy38;24658489]holy crap, can i copyright this?[/QUOTE] uhh
more of a psycho poem
[QUOTE=duckboy38;24658489]holy crap, can i copyright this?[/QUOTE] Your avatar icon might be yours, the logo as a logo is yours, but the font isn't. No, but use it as you want, as long as you don't profit on it. [img]http://img64.imageshack.us/img64/8532/fuckingduckboy.png[/img]
make it your last [editline]01:07PM[/editline] @ op
Why so hating everyone. It might suck, but atleast he is optimistic enough to post it here on facepunch. Although he should really be asking for how to improve his writing, and not for a silly "beat".
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