• Facepunch Grade my essay Please!!
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[B]I wrote this essay for English class. Give it a grade from A to E, also I want to know if i should revise it, or rewrite it. IMPORTANT!!! THIS IS 3 Pages in MLA FORMAT![/B] Manifest Destiny Defined Manifest Destiny was the 19th century American belief that the United States was destined to expand across the North American continent, from the Atlantic seaboard to the Pacific Ocean. So now in this essay I will to the best of my ability define manifest destiny. Manifest Destiny was always more of a general term than a strict policy. It was a belief in expansionism with other popular ideas of the time, including American exceptionalism, Romantic nationalism, and a belief in the natural greatness of the English-speaking people. In this some see it as America's mission in this world. Three key themes were usually talked about by people who endorsed Manifest Destiny, these 3 themes are: 1. The virtue of the American people and their institutions 2. The mission to spread these institutions, thereby redeeming and remaking the world in the image of the U.S. 3. The destiny under God to accomplish this work. The theme's are mostly based from America's Puritan heritage. Mostly the theme is based off of John Winthrop's famous "City upon a Hill" sermon in 1630, Were he called for the creation of a virtuous community that would be a good example to England. The phrase "Manifest Destiny" is most often connected with the expansion of the United States from 1812 to 1860. From the time of the War of 1812 to the American Civil is claimed to be the Manifest Destiny age. During this time the United States expanded from the alantic Ocean to the Pacific Ocean or as most would say "from sea to shining sea". In the nineteenth century the belief that the United States would control all of north America is the belief of "continentalism". One of the early important figures in this idea was John Quincy Adams. He was a leading figure in the Lousinana purchase in 1803 and the Polk administration in the 1840s. Manifest Destiny was a important part of the border dispute of Oregon, between the United States and Britian. Since the Anglo-American Convention of 1818 had provided for the joint occupation of the Oregon Country. Many Americans moved there by traveling the Oregon trail. President John Tyler proposed to divide the region along the 49th parallel instead of the proposed a boundary line on the Columbia River. Still the British refused causing Americans to respond with terminating the the joint occupation agreement. The British finally giving in agreed to divide the region along the 49th parallel. The dispute was finally settled by the Oregon Treaty of 1846. After the turn of the nineteenth century to the twentieth, the word Manifest Destiny lowered in usage. Due to the fact the United States had reached a point were it was large enough to be considered “From sea to shining sea”. During the terms of President Theodore Roosevelt the role of the United States in the New World was finally defined. So Manifest Destiny has had many Meanings from time to but it had the most meaning in America. Were they believed it meant a lot of things like virtue, Expansion, and size. But the most important thing that Manifest destiny meant was that the United states was destined to expand across the North American continent, from the Atlantic seaboard to the Pacific Ocean. And finally be from sea to shining Sea. So that is the End of my essay.
:wtc: Name and address of english teacher, please. This guy need to be fucking shot
[img_thumb]http://ereads.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/05/f-grade2.jpg[/img_thumb] 3 sentences don't make a good paragraph kiddo. Especially for a school essay.
How is that even an essay? It's barely a page...
My essays are always at least several pages so either you'll get an F for it being too short or you're in like 6th grade. Oh god he changed his avatar to an Apple logo. It all fits together so well...
Because everybody on Facepunch is a professor with a PHD in their respective subjects.
Fucking F. That was horrible. [editline]18th October 2010[/editline] I didn't even read it :v:
F unless your 12
[QUOTE=CabooseRvB;25496809]First off, main body paragraphs no longer consist of 3 sentences. You need more.[/QUOTE] Technically, the definition of a paragraph is a sentence or two. Op: Run on sentences are bad. You want to avoid any reference to yourself. You need to rewrite quite a few sentences for them to make sense. Basically, your essay sucks.
OP = Middle School [sp]>>>>>>C<<<<<<<[/sp] OP = High School [sp]>>>>>>F<<<<<<<[/sp] OP = College [sp]>>stop posting<<<<[/sp]
You said to grade it from A to E, therefore I give you a -10% for failing that bad. Also a paragraph in school is defined as 5-10 sentences. You wrote sections of 2 sentences each, it was pretty much extended question answer format, so using 1-2 sentences to answer a question.
[QUOTE=LearningToday;25496780][B] IMPORTANT!!! THIS IS 3 Pages in MLA FORMAT![/B] [/QUOTE] No, it isn't..
I should also add that if you're doing MLA you need to have in text citations. Else you'll get a grade reduction for plagiarizing. [editline]18th October 2010[/editline] [QUOTE=Meep Moop;25496955]No, it isn't..[/QUOTE] Yes it is. MLA is double spaced and the first sentence of each paragraph is indented.
F+, Just because I'm nice. If I weren't I would take your essay and rip it to pieces before slapping your face multiple times
Why the fuck is meanings capitalized in the last paragraph!? Did you even proofread this!? Where's the spelling button when you need it! [img]http://t2.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:-LIiWdZGQbtMFM:http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v429/Tress85/fuuuuu.png&t=1[/img]
Also, spellcheck! I pasted it into word and found a shitton of spelling errors.
[QUOTE=Capn'Underpants;25496947]You said to grade it from A to E, therefore I give you a -10% for failing that bad. Also a paragraph in school is defined as 5-10 sentences. You wrote sections of 2 sentences each, it was pretty much extended question answer format, so using 1-2 sentences to answer a question.[/QUOTE] Oh god I just nostalgiad hard at your avatar.
whoever taught you MLA format is a horrible teacher and needs to be fired.
[QUOTE=Raptor_Girl;25496956]I should also add that if you're doing MLA you need to have in text citations. Else you'll get a grade reduction for plagiarizing. Yes it is. MLA is double spaced and the first sentence of each paragraph is indented.[/QUOTE] It's barely a page and a half.
Ain't good man.
[QUOTE=CabooseRvB;25497046]It's barely a page and a half.[/QUOTE] I plugged it into word and formatted it to MLA specifications. It's three pages. Without the formatting it's a page and a half, which for MLA is three pages.
Here I was thinking an essay should be well over 1000 words, proper grammar, and not directly tell the reader what it is you are explaining. :allears:
Read it, lots of mistakes, the line saying "So now in this essay I will to the best of my ability define manifest destiny." needs to go.
[QUOTE=LearningToday;25496780]So now in this essay I will to the best of my ability define manifest destiny.[/QUOTE] ... :crossarms:
[QUOTE=superdinoman;25497081]Here I was thinking an essay should be well over 1000 words, proper grammar, and not directly tell the reader what it is you are explaining. :allears:[/QUOTE] x) the essay I'm working on is supposed to be 5-8 pages. Not including cover sheet, outline, and works cited page.
[QUOTE=superdinoman;25497081]Here I was thinking an essay should be well over 1000 words, proper grammar, and not directly tell the reader what it is you are explaining. :allears:[/QUOTE] So that is the End of your Post.
Its kinda bad. Sorry.
if this was the ept i would have to give you a 1 out of 6 which means you get to go to a remedial college english class!!!
[QUOTE=AlphaNoob4;25497127]Its kinda bad. Sorry.[/QUOTE] KINDA bad? Its fucking horrible
Remove all references to yourself (second sentence), take that list out of there as regular sentences, fix the numerous spelling and capitalization errors, for god's sake make it longer, and the style and wording in some places is very awkward. Needs a lot of revision.
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