• Become Eternal (Drawing and poem)
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Alright, I spent a long time on this drawing. It was originally inspired by some songs and also this poem I had in my head which I wrote(my first one) 20 minutes ago. Finally here Where my own legs have brought me to Soil, rocks and roots A place where no living soul dared to wander This is where I will die Where everything will rot And flow with eternity Time to close your eyes now And wake up in hell For the secret you held within Will not rot away with you [Img]http://fc07.deviantart.com/fs51/i/2009/285/8/5/Become_Eternal___final_by_productno49.png[/Img] The scanner turned up the constrast a bit also. Critique on the drawing will be very appreciated. As for the poem, I don't care too much :P
Amazing drawing. The proportions on the corpse are way wrong though. I will let Xerios tend to that.
Yeah, wow, the landscape is very impressive and inspiring for graphite (right?) but the corpse looks a bit odd.
Hmm..I can see what u mean by odd. But hes kinda supposed to look like this. I mean like there is only bones and a bit of flesh under his clothes. So they start sliding down gradually... Idk, thats what I had in mind when I drew the corpse
I think they mean his legs are tiny. But I love it.
[QUOTE=onox37;17966830]Amazing drawing. The proportions on the corpse are way wrong though.[/QUOTE] I second that His legs and hands are fairly short and also it seems like his neck is way too long, I can illustrate my critic if you want. As for the nature, you did one hell of a job, simply amazing though it does contain some errors like for example tree's roots aren't supposed to be popped out like that, look at this : [img]http://wudhi.com/mrwalker/anderson/Assets/Images/060917%20montana%20008%20tree%20roots.jpg[/img] They go into the ground, then out from random random places, anyway hopefully you get the point And water reflection could also be another mistake,unless it's drawn on purpose. To me & probably to other people too that smooth reflection represents greasy/dirty water, the cleaner it is the better it should reflect the environment.
Thanks Xerios. Totally forgot about the roots part. The water was hard to draw as i was trying to go for the clear look. I'll try improving the proportions next time
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