Editing could be a lot better. Same muzzle flash every time, just a flash of an image etc.
Acting also needs improvement to make it a lot more believable.
The way you made the guy in the yellow hat fly out of the window was absolutely ridiculous.
[QUOTE=Pat.Lithium;32145874]Work on your acting.[/QUOTE]
I will. Thanks for the reply.
[editline]6th September 2011[/editline]
[QUOTE=MadPro119;32146019]Editing could be a lot better. Same muzzle flash every time, just a flash of an image etc.
Acting also needs improvement to make it a lot more believable.[/QUOTE]
I'll pay more attention to what you mentioned next time. :)
[QUOTE=salmonmarine;32146289]The way you made the guy in the yellow hat fly out of the window was absolutely ridiculous.[/QUOTE]
haha :)
Please work on the SFX. Parts of the light saber scene lagged EG The beam stuck in the air for a second. Good ( For a fist time? ) though :)
Got any more questions just PM me and I'll see if I can help you.
[QUOTE=Elfy;32182751]Please work on the SFX. Parts of the light saber scene lagged EG The beam stuck in the air for a second. Good ( For a fist time? ) though :)
Got any more questions just PM me and I'll see if I can help you.[/QUOTE]
Thanks for the offer. I'll definitely send you a message if I have any sfx questions. :)
Might want to put the camera on one too! :v:
just kidding, it's a humorous concept and I enjoyed it.
I loved it personally. It would have been better without dialogue, however.
I liked it.
Like I said from the other thread
[quote]Sounds need some work. You need some "zoom" sounds from bullets flying and the explosions and muzzleflashes are too exaggerated. Smoke effects are lame and there are no bullet holes. The acting is bad and the recoil is a bit unrealistic. The first person section looked unrealistic and the hostiles reacted too slow to be realistic. Blood looks god awful and is too dramatic. RPG segment was just terribad, the projectile looked flat and the effects were awful. The lightsaber climax was boring and when he fell out the window it was too fast and too unrealistic. The camera position during the indoor sections seemed amateur and were awful. The background wind at the beginning was annoying along with other ambient sounds.
You have potential, but you're going to have to improve a lot more until you get even near the level of FreddieW. [/quote]
I like how freddieW just started out making videos one day, and now he is the standard to be compared to.
Also, op, freddie started out similar to what you have up there. I remember seeing a video of him and his friends running around his house shooting fake guns. (Come to think of it, he does that now, just with a severely increased production value) Anyways, keep at it and you will improve.
You're like a low budget Freddie Wong.
[QUOTE=D0C H.;32228931]I like how freddieW just started out making videos one day, and now he is the standard to be compared to.
Also, op, freddie started out similar to what you have up there. I remember seeing a video of him and his friends running around his house shooting fake guns. (Come to think of it, he does that now, just with a severely increased production value) Anyways, keep at it and you will improve.[/QUOTE]
Thanks man! :) Everyone needs to start somewhere. Hopefully one day, I'll be as good as Freddiew is.
Oh no problem. Im about to release a short film myself and it has many mistakes in it simply because I have no experience in the field. While it may not be vfx heavy, there are mistakes in other things. (exposure most notably, and focus etc...) Mistakes that I will remember on my next short film and hopefully wont make again. But there is nothing I can do but not do it next time. Same with you man. Good luck.
If those things ever happen, just re shoot it. And work on your VFX. I'm actually surprised people aren't more critical. Try not only adjusting the exsposure of the flash to match the scene but also add a mask and apply a glow to the effected areas. Don't forget to add a bit of smoke. It makes a big difference. I can wait until I start 'shooting' (Hahaaha pun) my action short.
Well for me, in my distraction and negligence, I didn't notice the exposure's were way off until after was done shooting. And one scene we shot at a town quite a ways away, and couldn't just go do it again. If I had paid attention I could have used my laptop as a monitor (because I couldn't tell on the tiny LCD) and noticed the exposure was off while still on location. So remember, ALWAYS have a monitor or check your footage immediately.
[QUOTE=D0C H.;32275748]Well for me, in my distraction and negligence, I didn't notice the exposure's were way off until after was done shooting. And one scene we shot at a town quite a ways away, and couldn't just go do it again. If I had paid attention I could have used my laptop as a monitor (because I couldn't tell on the tiny LCD) and noticed the exposure was off while still on location. So remember, ALWAYS have a monitor or check your footage immediately.[/QUOTE]
Great advice. I'm sure myself and many other filmmakers will learn from you mistake. Thanks for sharing! :)
Sorry, you need to Log In to post a reply to this thread.
