New Single- Opinions? - General

Hello people of facepunch, my band has released a new single and I would like your opinions on it, I am very satisfied with this song so I hope you guys will enjoy it as much as I did and I still do, well give it a listen and tell me what you think, and don't mind the ugly artwork, my art skills are very limited. here's the link [url]http://socialrevolution.bandcamp.com/track/im-fine-go-away[/url] you can take a listen to our other music but personally I think this is the best song we have put out so don't expect much from the other ones.

Reminds me of old blink 182. Production isn't amazing but it's not bad. Really enjoyed it.. singer needs a little work (or just a slightly mature voice.. give it a year) but it's ok really.

Yeah, it's recorded at my home studio, and I'm not that good at mixing or producing, or singing haha, I do the singing and the guitar, I use a drum machine since my studio is not equipped to record a full set, and bass is also done by me if my bassist can't make it to the recording

I think its REALLY good, I see what chaz13 is saying about your voice needing to be a bit deeper. But it actually seems to fit.

pretty bad

[QUOTE=duckboy38;34453105]I think its REALLY good, I see what chaz13 is saying about your voice needing to be a bit deeper. But it actually seems to fit.[/QUOTE] Thanks, and yeah I would agree with that, although I'm a baritone so it's a little hard for me to sing in that particular range so that probably has something to do with it. and Vedicardi, elaborate. I'm looking for some constructive criticism

I'll be the butt brigade: •It sounds like a 12 year old trying to cover something from Green Day. •The drums sound stock and your bassist has no groove at all. •Highly recommend not charging people to download your music. •Your bandcamp site needs a makeover. •The feedback at the end of the song made me :zoid: on the bright side •You'd have every middle school girl on your dick six years ago. Don't stop, keep looking for advice, and cooperate with people and try not to do everything yourself.

nailed it ayo

this is alright for what it is. ur voice i'd say is what needs the most work. the instrumental piece itself isnt bad, but just kinda basic, even the solo part. i dont think ur voice needs to be deeper. i think thats actually pretty irrelevant.. but i do think some vocal lessons or just more practice would help cuz a lot of the notes u were hitting were just off. people often to settle for unimpressive vocals with a great mix, but then the vocals werent mixed great either. i'll say its a start, but theres some work for u to do. if u are gonna record ur music at home, it's definitely worth doing the research and educating yourself on things like mixing and production.

Really good job! I don't get what people are so negative about. A song that sounds like a song. You never see that around here. It's a breath of fresh air. Your singing and playing is good. The mixing too considering the circumstances (except for the kick, it needs more mid and less bass). Keep it up!!

Needs some serious mastering but otherwise it was pretty good. Like someone else said it was reminiscent of old Blink 182.

Well thanks guys for the criticism/comments etc... the problems with the mixing and mastering should be fixed in a couple of months when we head into the studio, my voice, well I'll have to fix that myself haha.

you should be able to do mixing fine from your own computer. being in a studio only helps you so much, it won't magically make you mix well unless someone is doing it for you.

Yeah you can just do it at home. I think the mix is pretty good apart from the kick. With an equalizer, lower the bass and increase the mid/treble to get more punch into it. At the moment it just sounds like a big poof, hogging energy from the whole spectrum. Maybe add a compressor to your vocals to make them more consistent. Do this, and then you can fine-tune it from there if you're still not satisfied.

yeah, someone else will be doing the mixing. also I do have a compressor on the vocals, I thought the vocals sounded consistent to me, but I guess thats just me.

my crits: a band called social revolution and you're singing about woman troubles, why not get political or at least metaphoric when you talk about this girl. Why not compare her to what you're revolting against. For example she's drives a car from general motors so she thinks she is too big to fail. Why not add a bridge, about what happened in the good times to switch the mood, then you can switch it again and be all 'fuck that cunt' or something to draw people in. Talking about a break up isn't very new for any genre, and especially a rock band, so make it interesting. Be very careful not to fall into the 'love song / break up song' trap.

[b]Running commentary mode engaged:[/b] Hi Green Day / Blink 182. Mixing is really weird. I have my speakers at my optimal music-playing volume, and the guitars have absolutely no meat. It sounds like they're panned way off to the sides or something. The vocals are front and center, and the only things with meat at all. The kick drum has absolutely no sound of its own - it's literally just a fuzz/spike in the low-end of the mix. The bridge riff sounds neat, but it's just too weak to make an emphasis. Your vocals are a bit muted throughout, and I find myself listening to the snare, which is the loudest piece - in fact, it seems to have front and center. Vocals are fine, though they didn't hold my attention at all. They were just a slurred humming to me as I listened to the snare with the guitars buzzing at the edges of my attention. When the song ended, it ended so abruptly it caught me by surprise. At barely two minutes, this is far too short for the genre you're going for - a majority of [i]grindcore[/i] songs are longer than this, and grindcore is known for its short song lengths. This post isn't meant to flame you or anything. These are my thoughts, honest as they come, as I listen to the song. This is what I, as your listener, am thinking as I listen to this song - and I give those thoughts to you, raw and unedited, so you can see what others think when they hear your song, and compare it to what you want them to be thinking when they hear it. If there's any discrepancy between the two, you should be able to isolate offending issue and find a way to solve it.