Original Website:
[url]http://www.albertcorp.com/[/url]
Concept Design Recreation: (please view below for new version)
[url]http://img862.imageshack.us/img862/7374/templatekk.jpg[/url]
Intro: [url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QpXmyasykLQ[/url]
The intro may be converted to flash format and used at the top of the website in my concept design. If not, it will be used for a commercial or an instructional video. Sound is only used for fun. I'd like some CnC about the design and what could be improved.
Thanks,
Dan.
UPDATE:
New version:
[url]http://img9.imageshack.us/img9/259/templatefull.jpg[/url]
Wow! Very nice!
Nice work, I really enjoy the look of it, it's simple, but not too simplistic and I like that. One thing I noticed though, is with the white writing and the clouds in the top left corner are a bit hard to distinguish between each other. Other than that, great work.
post it here for some real C&C [url]http://facepunch.com/showthread.php?t=1152034[/url]
There is too much going on, hard to focus on the content. If a complex element such as a cloud is going to be an invasive background (going behind the content) then potentially lighten it, or lower the transparency, or in my opinion add a new colour somewhere as right now it looks fairly dull with just the blue and white going on.
Try making the main content area a dark grey or black background, or possibly do the opposite and try making the background darker and/or more saturated.
Just ideas/opinions, keep it up.
[QUOTE=Smeetin;36114117]There is too much going on, hard to focus on the content. If a complex element such as a cloud is going to be an invasive background (going behind the content) then potentially lighten it, or lower the transparency, or in my opinion add a new colour somewhere as right now it looks fairly dull with just the blue and white going on.
Try making the main content area a dark grey or black background, or possibly do the opposite and try making the background darker and/or more saturated.
Just ideas/opinions, keep it up.[/QUOTE]
Is it just me or are the clouds not as flashy as you say they are?
Yeah the clouds are way too distracting where they are.
Also I don't like how you have shines on all the text. I think it looks kind of cheap and doesn't really serve a purpose.
all i can really add to this is research economy in design. really understanding the elements and principles of design is something that your piece shows you lack currently. also learn color theory.
Thank you everyone for the CnC. I have created a new concept design. It is in the top view. But for those who are lazy:
[url]http://img9.imageshack.us/img9/259/templatefull.jpg[/url]
A lot nicer, quick suggestion would be to make the company logo black, that is an important piece of information.
[editline]12th June 2012[/editline]
Oh, about the intro you made, I don't know the company and whether it fits, but I like it anyways. It's got an old-fashioned view of the future vibe in my opinion haha, something you would see in an older science fiction movie.
[QUOTE=VendlandFx;36281049]Thank you everyone for the CnC. I have created a new concept design. It is in the top view. But for those who are lazy:
[url]http://img9.imageshack.us/img9/259/templatefull.jpg[/url][/QUOTE]
You need to look at ideas of composition regarding the placement of things within the borders you've set up. Most of the elements (logo, button text, that quote, etc) are too close to the edges of their spaces. Rethink the placement of that phone number and the size of it - at the moment it stands out more than the company log.
I'd center the company logo, maybe give custom widths to the buttons to make them each fit the text comfortably (management in particular feels too tight compared to the others), shift that quote to the left a bit so that there is equal space above and to the left of that first speech mark.
Think about the vertical positioning of the text in the menu buttons as well
[editline]14th June 2012[/editline]
make sure that the white in that quote text isn't getting lost in the image behind it
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