ok so i made this song about a year and a half ago for a friend that had passed on and i thought i'd post it here for you guys. Please ignore the visuals i had a friend do it for me because i couldnt get windows media player to work :/.
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B3JKIojVfwQ[/media]
C&C please but keep it CONSTRUCTIVE.
thanks :)
v nice ;)
Well.. You are way off beat, and your voice matches none of the tones in the music. Sorry but I think you need to keep practicing.
im usually scared whne i see choclate man but ur song ~soothed my soul~
damn, this beat is so fresh
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snap!
[QUOTE=TheTrashMan;17069789]Well.. You are way off beat, and your voice matches none of the tones in the music. Sorry but I think you need to keep practicing.[/QUOTE]
what part am i not keeping to the beat exactly?
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[QUOTE=Parky;17069800]im usually scared whne i see choclate man but ur song ~soothed my soul~[/QUOTE]
thanks man :)
A few parts your voice seems to just slur around the rhythm. You are generally close to the timing, but it's clearly not on enough, especially word for word. Phrases as a whole are more close to being in the right spot, but not individual words.
If it was more on beat, then it wouldn't sound as bad for not matching the tones either, because it becomes percussive, but as it is now, it would either need to match more tones, or match more of the beat. I would suggest going for being more spot on in the rhythm. I know its very tough to do, but it must be done.
good luck.
[QUOTE=CadetBailey;17069805]damn, this beat is so fresh
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thankyou i tried hard to find an original beat that went well with my voice
[QUOTE=TheTrashMan;17069905]A few parts your voice seems to just slur around the rhythm. You are generally close to the timing, but it's clearly not on enough, especially word for word. Phrases as a whole are more close to being in the right spot, but not individual words.[/QUOTE]
he's british, asshole, they all have speech impediments
[QUOTE=TheTrashMan;17069905]A few parts your voice seems to just slur around the rhythm. You are generally close to the timing, but it's clearly not on enough, especially word for word. Phrases as a whole are more close to being in the right spot, but not individual words.[/QUOTE]
could you point out a certain spot because i fail to see where youre coming from :/
One spot is about 45 seconds in. Once at that part, you seem to go offbeat. Word for word offbeat, not entire phrases.
Guys, I never was trying to be an asshole. I thought constructive criticism was allowed.
it is hes asking you nicely ;)
[QUOTE=TheTrashMan;17070062]One spot is about 45 seconds in. Once at that part, you seem to go offbeat. Word for word offbeat, not entire phrases.
Guys, I never was trying to be an asshole. I thought constructive criticism was allowed.[/QUOTE]
im sorry but i really cant hear it :/ all i can hear is that the mic gets quieter for a tiny amount of time because i had a terrible mic back then :/
Alright then. All I ask is that you at least be open and considering of my advice. If you wish to disregard me, that is fine. Maybe listen to some rap songs and see what I mean.
uhh what are you trying to say?
I'm saying that I'm OK with him not wanting to take my advice, he has that right.
Not bad, gB.
thanks man
I cound'nt help but laugh at your voice but a better mic would be nice.
:/ what's wrong with my voice?
n1 m8
[QUOTE=Perfumly;17072523]n1 m8[/QUOTE]
thanks man i worked hard
np m8
Alot of the words are slurred, and the mic could use an upgrade.
I think you just need a better record way/system
[QUOTE=Bulaba0;17074076]Alot of the words are slurred, and the mic could use an upgrade.[/QUOTE]
upgraded the mic a few months back this was my first song you dont need to slur me like that :/
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[QUOTE=Joxalot;17074186]I think you just need a better record way/system[/QUOTE]
ok this is the way my big brother showed me how to do it and he says this is how all the grime legends like boy betterknow and bashy do it ok
[QUOTE=GeeBee;17074206]upgraded the mic a few months back this was my first song you dont need to slur me like that :/
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ok this is the way my big brother showed me how to do it and he says this is how all the grime legends like boy betterknow and bashy do it ok[/QUOTE]
Could you gimme a source? I'm not into this style so I need good exemples to base my C&C on, but overall it's pretty decent :v:
