Gears In The Sky: a steampunk novel attempt by da_maul

[da_maul]

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Hello facepunch, this is my first thread in creationism corner.

sorry for the googledocs format but i found it the best way to organize my thoughts. an added bonus:it auto-updates.

link is here [ [url]https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id=1e-RnfXJ7StCFSiIkPtkL3eEfhgcySY2LBkPYUIs10u0[/url] ]

critisim is welcome as well as suggestions when i ask for them.

i want to make you guys feel involved, have a good read.

[Asgard]

His short black hair blowing in the stark wind, his thin coat [b]barely barely[/b] protecting him from the wind. He hoped to be at the shop soon, but he knew [b]otherwise, It[/b] (he knew otherwise. It) would take him another twenty [b]tinks[/b] (tinks?) to get to the bustling factory.

in all [b]brungsburg[/b] (Brungsburg)

Blittca, it was also the home of Matilda Gottling his secret crush, oh how Anton

Blittca. It was also the home of Matilda Gottling, his secret crush. Oh how Anton

but as they say “love is blind”.

but as they say: “Love is blind”.

fell into a pit of sadness whenever he thought of her, however he couldn’t help it.

fell into a pit of sadness whenever he thought of her. However he couldn’t help it.

I could go on for this like ages, it makes it hard to read in my opinion. I'd recommend to over it again with a fine-tooth comb.

[da_maul]

sorry tinks are minutes and barely barely didnt stand out will fix