• [FARM]McPawz New Army Test
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[IMG]http://ooft.net/upload/3618441.png[/IMG] The 6th Infantry Division was off running their drills and patrolling the perimeter, None of the soldiers had seen real combat, ever. Fort Jackson was like purgatory for soldiers. In the three years the 6th had been there not a single bullet had been fired. All the soldiers wished they could see combat, but they will soon find out that a taste of action, is the last thing they want.
I think that, you may have used, too many commas, and. New sentences, in that, turn description. Also the map could do with a bit of work but I guess for a farm you don't really need a masterpiece.
The map was literately made in 5 minutes [editline]27th October 2010[/editline] [IMG]http://ooft.net/upload/8120642.png[/IMG] Enter the Synens, a technologically advanced space race hell bent on conquering earth. The S.I.M enters the area of Fort Jackson, accompanied by a group of Weblings and Senin Soldiers. /Scanning Area for forms of life... /Multiple life forms identified... /Program initiated... /Extermination imminent...
Quite an ironic misspelling to make there.
Adopting a writing style or affected verbal tic, like prefixing every sentence with a slash and ending with an ellipsis, doesn't really add anything to a match and make the turns annoying to read. It's not the worst I've seen, but it's still a little silly. That's my opinion anyway!
[IMG]http://ooft.net/upload/9101752.png[/IMG] The 6th sniper spots the Sinen soldiers moving ahead, "I've got movement!" and hesitant to get into action fires a round into the unidentified person overlooking the valley. The squad in the crater prepares to move up to the edge of the crater and ambush the unidentified soldiers. The shot fired startles all the soldiers at the small fort and adrenaline rushes through their bodies. The Sinens hear the shot and begin to react, setting up firing positions. One webling climbs ontop of the S.I.M with his sniper and begins to search for the shooter. The remaining weblings struggle to keep up. [editline]27th October 2010[/editline] [IMG]http://ooft.net/upload/6912208..png[/IMG] The vunerable Sinen jumps into the hole in front of him. The Sinen behind him responds to the gunfire, shooting off a quick burst. The Webling on top of the S.I.M squeezes off an unaccurate round towards the general direction of the sniper. The 6th Sniper shouts "I think I got one!" excitedly. The Soldiers in the tunnel begin to move forward, weary of what lies ahead. [editline]27th October 2010[/editline] Done for tonight
He got one, but theres no blood nor a body?
He jumped into the hole infront, effectively dodging that bullet. But wouldn't it then hit the man behind him?
That is a major flaw, the bullet is move x10 fast than he is. I think he'd get clipped by it, and still have the guy behind him get killed.
It's pixel wars for fucks sake it was not made to be realistic!
God, I want to jump in just to start killing his flaws which are men!
[QUOTE=Thereddragon;25755037]It's pixel wars for fucks sake it was not made to be realistic![/QUOTE] Your mixing up realism with plausibility there fine chap.
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