I want to give a fair warning that this is probably a bias post but, I always want feedback on my writings and how to make them better.
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Apple has been the poster child for simple, clean, and elegant design and performance for the common consumer. This however, was not the whole story to Apple. Apple was on the verge on bankruptcy when they invested all they had left into the iPod. Without any expectations, Apple had blown the market away with its final effort. The iPod literally saved Apple as a company and propelled them into the massive market share they are today. In the past Apple was innovative, collective, and capitalizes on its products. Recently, they have gone downhill to the point of losing respect from people who buy their ever so thought after products. They have been suing Motorola, Google, Samsung, and HTC over their patent claiming that they “are abusing the patent system”. Yes, Apple was the first to patent a smart phone but it is what they patented not how, or when. Apple’s patent for the iPhone is nothing more than a rectangle with curved corners. One could imagine how a patent could even get through the system with a rectangle with curved corners. Apple even went as far in court to prove that some tablets were almost identical to the iPad. With some careful investigation, people proved that Apple had tampered the evidence showing the dimensions of the two products in hand to match the iPad. They even went as far as putting a splash screen that resembled Apple’s own UI on the products at hands screen. This is where Apple is starting to slip. In mid-august, a Chinese company who assembles iPhones and iPods went to the media about Apple’s senseless disposal of hazardous materials. Surely, this would raise some concern about Apple being a green company. In the past week, an employee from Apple ‘forgot’ a prototype iPhone in a bar, again. The incident was not the first of its kind since another employee left the prototype of the iPhone 4 at a bar. This had not been a big deal until some Apple security guards posed as San Francisco police officers and searched the alleged holder’s house, car, and computer for evidence of the device. Now, within the last three days Apple is suing android claiming “Android started in Apple internally.” To anyone who follows the Android development you know that one of the lead developers started working for Apple as a low-level engineer. Apple is trying to pull every trick out of their legal hat to prove that no one else can have a smart phone or device that acts as one.
I am not one to bash a company, or tell people not to buy that one product but, for the first time I would not recommend buying Apple products. If the company cannot provide truthful, and prove some real findings of a patent infringement, then yes, they have all the right to stop that manufacture of producing a look-a-like product. Apple needs to stop trying to punish the competition and start embracing it. The iPod brought Apple into the market and the iPhone is starting to bring them out of the market. Apple is relentless suing, counter-suing, and blocking of the competitors’ products is outright wrong and it has gone on for too long now. Apple needs to find its place as a breakthrough company, not a global smart-device police force that breaks laws to protect its own products.[/quote]
I kind of like writing reviews of things from a third-party stance.. any thoughts (besides the topic. )
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Informative, if a little carelessly done
>Apple was on the verge on bankruptcy
>In the past Apple was innovative, collective, and capitalizes on its products.
>from people who buy their ever so thought after products
>One could imagine how a patent could even get through the system
>tampered the evidence
>Apple even went as far (...) They even went as far
>on the products at hands screen.
>I am not one to bash a company, or tell people not to buy that one product but, for the first time
>If the company cannot provide truthful, and prove some real findings of a patent infringement, then yes, they have all the right to stop that manufacture of producing a look-a-like product.
>Apple is relentless suing, counter-suing, and blocking of the competitors’ products is outright wrong
All of the above excerpts are noticeably amateurish/incorrectly written
I left out sentences that were missing necessary punctuation too, since they were less major but the whole thing could certainly use a good reviewing.
[QUOTE=MakoSkyDub;32107827]Informative, if a little carelessly done
>Apple was on the verge on bankruptcy
>In the past Apple was innovative, collective, and capitalizes on its products.
>from people who buy their ever so thought after products
>One could imagine how a patent could even get through the system
>tampered the evidence
>Apple even went as far (...) They even went as far
>on the products at hands screen.
>I am not one to bash a company, or tell people not to buy that one product but, for the first time
>If the company cannot provide truthful, and prove some real findings of a patent infringement, then yes, they have all the right to stop that manufacture of producing a look-a-like product.
>Apple is relentless suing, counter-suing, and blocking of the competitors’ products is outright wrong
All of the above excerpts are noticeably amateurish/incorrectly written
I left out sentences that were missing necessary punctuation too, since they were less major but the whole thing could certainly use a good reviewing.[/QUOTE]
Thanks for the feedback! I am not a writing by trade but I have been trying to better myself at it by just writing. The article did not have any revision before posting as you noticed.
Make it regular practice to read the sentence either in your head or aloud enough to hear the words yourself. I usually do that and it has helped my grammar and spelling tremendously.
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Still 100% better than Fox News.
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