A track for my ex - General

[url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=peZ1YyXnNW0[/url] Think she will like it?

Ha you wrote a song for someone, that's fucking well gay mate :v: Dunno I can't listen to it at work but if I remember later and care enough then I'll listen.

I enjoyed it, so i don't see why she wouldn't. Unless y'know you fucked her mum or something.

Why did you do this

[QUOTE=killerteacup;29811398]Why did you do this[/QUOTE] Did i do something wrong?

First off Stop making a new thread for every song you make secondly you suck

The songs pretty alright but if you send it to her it'll probably just make her uncomfortable. One issue is it really doesn't sound like anything I havent heard before, the lyrics are all kind of generic breakup rap song cliches, there's nothing about it that makes it unique/memorable. If you cared about her then what, spefically, did you like about her? All I got from the song is that she's "real" and that she made you happy, which every rapper says about every girl in a breakup song

Don't ever make shit for your ex. It just makes them less likely to get back with you. Get over her and move on.

[QUOTE=mikeyt493;29821623]First off Stop making a new thread for every song you make secondly you suck[/QUOTE] Did i do something wrong?

[QUOTE=Heatvision...;29875945]Did i do something wrong?[/QUOTE] The biggest thing for me is that you got the instrumentals from the fucking Black Eye Peas. The next thing would be that you don't put any conviction into what you're saying, all of the good rappers genuinely believe what they're saying to some extent, and it shows.

Surprisingly decent. You need to sound a little bit more convincing with your tone, it sounds like you're holding back, or like your voice doesn't actually sound like that. The way you had the vocals twice was kind of annoying, too.

[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1C-dMOiMZPk[/media] Study up on your love raps :eng101:

[QUOTE=SilverHammer;29881514][media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1C-dMOiMZPk[/media] Study up on your love raps :eng101:[/QUOTE] Notice my rap says freestyle...

Don't record your freestyles.

[QUOTE=TH89;29894745]Don't record your freestyles.[/QUOTE] What? Why?

have TH89 teach you to rap correctly without sounding like a wigger still I couldn't do any better, and really it's at the same level as the stuff on the radio imo. And I doubt she'll like it being brutally honest mate but you didn't do a horrible job

[QUOTE=Heatvision...;29903381]What? Why?[/QUOTE] Because they sound like shit.

I like it.

[QUOTE=Eluveitie;29903626]Because they sound like shit.[/QUOTE] :dogout: ...wish that still worked

[QUOTE=Heatvision...;29908785]:dogout: ...wish that still worked[/QUOTE] Well, he is still saying what most of us are thinking.

[QUOTE=Hakita;29911270]Well, he is still saying what most of us are thinking.[/QUOTE] How does it sound like shit

you sound like a wigger

[quote]PLENTY GIRLS TO SMASH BUT YOU WAS ON MY HITLIST[/quote] yeah thats not creepy at all.

Ha it's cause you guys are white and I'm black

[QUOTE=Heatvision...;29817347]Did i do something wrong?[/QUOTE] Homie, she's your ex. That's fucking weird know what I'm saying?

[QUOTE=mr apple;29924336]yeah thats not creepy at all.[/QUOTE] How? He's basically saying there "There was lots of girls to hit on but I hit on you"

[QUOTE=Heatvision...;29903381]What? Why?[/QUOTE] Freestyling is a parlor trick you do at shows and parties, not for making songs. There's about five guys on this planet who can freestyle well enough to record it as a track that's worth listening to, and you're not one of them, sorry. [editline]20th May 2011[/editline] [QUOTE=En-Guage V2;29924305]you sound like a wigger[/QUOTE] Way to assume the dude is white despite all evidence to the contrary retardo

1) Work on your vocals 2) Sing over something better 3) When I say sing I don't mean freestyle rap 4) Move the fuck on, it isn't hard. You're pining over the same girl when you could be out there finding someone else.

[QUOTE=Heatvision...;29928993]Ha it's cause you guys are white and I'm black[/QUOTE] There we go, claiming racism because we said he was shit and should stop rapping.

[QUOTE=Eluveitie;29943564]There we go, claiming racism because we said he was shit and should stop rapping.[/QUOTE] I don't believe I mentioned racism. He asked me why I sound like a wigger and that was my response. Plus for a person who sounds like shit ive been getting mostly positive reviews so you guys can just stop now. No more opinions needed unless they are constructive criticism.