[QUOTE=Dead Madman;33246978][media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lUyUc5nn3l0[/media]
Please C&C[/QUOTE]
You spent way too long building up to the drop. Like 45 seconds in a 2 minute song.
Drum opining isn't interesting, heard it far to many times before. The chances are if your opening is generic, the listener will assume the rest is.
The synth isn't doing much interesting.
The slow climb is unneeded. What you're going for is tension, but you're forcing it. Like if this was how you created tension with your Mother, you'd be punching her. This is the wrong way to create tension, yes, it may work, but people dislike abuse. It's kind of like creeping people out, sure you can take the quick route and show a person some messed up videos, but that is like punching your Mother in the face. A better idea would be to stick tacks into apples and put them all over the house and bring out a Christmas tree and put a banana on top.
The tension you created didn't pay off, that's the danger in doing that. You don't want to build up so much tension that the next part of the song can't handle.
I'm not understanding the point of this. None of it seems to be living. The music is as flat as a piece of paper.
The drum outro, I don't understand it, you should have just ended the song. What purpose did it serve?
[QUOTE=Pepin;33252386]It's kind of like creeping people out, sure you can take the quick route and show a person some messed up videos, but that is like punching your Mother in the face. A better idea would be to stick tacks into apples and put them all over the house and bring out a Christmas tree and put a banana on top.[/QUOTE]
Once again, one more instrument layer, increase the tempo.
[QUOTE=Pepin;33252386] It's kind of like creeping people out, sure you can take the quick route and show a person some messed up videos, but that is like punching your Mother in the face. A better idea would be to stick tacks into apples and put them all over the house and bring out a Christmas tree and put a banana on top[/QUOTE]
I have no idea what I just read but I will take it as sound advice.
i'd get some better instruments if i were you. souds like it was made on an 80's casio keyboard.
Incredibly anti-climactic drop
[QUOTE=joe588;33319922]i'd get some better instruments if i were you. souds like it was made on an 80's casio keyboard.[/QUOTE]
No, an 80's Casio keyboard would have more sound character. lol
My tip to you. Learn to use effects. On the main synth, decrease the release time if you don't do anything else. Then give it a little drive and cut out the unneeded lows. There just isn't enough grit and presence. With some saturation on everything to give it all a bit more grit, and better EQing/compression, this would be alright, but right now it sounds like a kid playing with loop mode on an electric piano. You've got effects. Use them. That is what will make or break your tunes. You're working in a completely digital environment I'm sure. You've got to get the organic character back in.
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