Is it truly an addiction
Or is it another fiction
Why is that we are lied to
About what they do
What do they think they are preventing
Are they just venting
About how its all a lie
About how it is a bad high
Sure, some of it is bad
And others make people mad
But they tremble over the petty
And get all sweaty
But the worst of them all
They just sit there and bawl
Not trying to be rude, but a thread was JUST made for this exact type of thing...
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Your avatar makes your look like kevjumba
just sayin
Thanks for sharing your poem dude.
thats a pretty simple poem
^agreed, it's more of just a rhyme or something. Plus you never really tied it up and made a point at the end
Lame
You clearly don't know what you're talking about, and it seems as if you've loosely tied in simple principles you've previously have heard but didn't understand.
Haven't you guys heard of slam poetry? This is pretty much the style poetry that really pro poets do at the haiku deathmatch we have, sometimes after the thing they do chains of haiku freestyled in the back
[QUOTE=rnate;24633959]Not trying to be rude, but a thread was JUST made for this exact type of thing...
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Hey it's my thread. <3
op killed himself.
poets are always dramatic fucks.
Make it into a rap song
I looked to my left.
Street lights illumminated my path.
I glanced into the distance.
Shadows waved from the trees like tide on a beach.
I walk.
My shadow fallows.
Slow.
Weary.
Dragging along knowledgeable of the actions to come.
I knock.
And in the distance I hear it.
The soft sound of smoke clearing.
The door creeks, the dog barks the room stands as still as the precipitants therein.
Inhale.
Exhale.
Mind blank.
Drifting into an eternal sea of bliss, I drift into a slumber.
It's funny with poems because the line between genius and embarrassing to all of humanity is so thin. My point being that the OP falls under the latter, but he shouldn't feel (too) ashamed.
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