Living With HowToBasic - General

Hey Guys, It's that time again, where I've found the time to make another video and want your opinion. If you compare the images below you can see how much the episodes have changed with your input, which I cant thank you enough for. You've helped since day one. [img]http://i.imgur.com/PIexHCT.jpg?1[/img] Here's the new video. Please could you give me some constructive criticism again. If you could, could you give me a list of pros and cons following the other episodes. Thanks again guys! [media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q78-ZGsI-eo[/media]

The joke is that HowToBasic lives on a strict diet of eggs and egg accessories.

1. Don't censor swearing, if you're with a network that has to implement censorship to keep sponsors happy, abandon ship and go with someone else. Bleeps for comedic effect are only funny to like 5 year olds 2. Animation is incredibly slow and there's practically no real jokes, "eggs" isn't a punchline 3. V/O sounds very boring, there's no real energy or vibrancy, doesn't help that the music would cause someone to probably rest their eyes and kind of fall asleep 4. Animation lip syncing is incredibly off and I think you're lacking assets, throwing animation was also too slow I mean I like the idea and the animation drawing style, it's modern and ive got a soft spot for that shit but im sorry i just think its boring and tame. And looking at the previous threads where people gave you CC, you either ignored it or tried to both keep your original framework+add their CC into mix I think you need to look seriously at this, get more friends to review it before releasing it to the GP and write better jokes

I'm pretty sure I mentioned this last time, but your animation is slow, uninteresting, and your characters have the expressive variety of wood. The biggest problem I see here, and this is just my opinion, is that the general premise is just god-awful. Your jokes are just piggybacking off the success of other youtubers, and are often stretched on long enough to the point that they just lose all value whatsoever. Every single one of these is entirely predictable, and to make it worse, you seem to just drag it on like the viewer is a fucking four-year-old that needs everything explained out to them.

I think the pacing is what nags at me the most. Everything happens at such a slow pace, it's kinda weird. You really have to nail when to play the next scene or dialogue. Timing is pretty vital when it comes to comedy, so try to improve on that at least. From what I remember, a lot of your videos suffer from this incredibly slow pacing you've set. Aside from timing and pacing, though, the jokes themselves weren't very good.

[B]Pros[/B]: • I feel like this art style could work [B]Cons[/B]: • The animation is REALLY slow. The heads just kind of bob lazily. Other than the mouths changing shape, the characters don't seem expressive. • The voice acting sounds like everyone is hushed. It sounds like you're recording in the middle of the night and are afraid to wake other people around you so you talk extremely quietly. (that's just the vibe I'm getting, as I've been in that situation before and my voice sounded a lot like that) • The joke here is already tired on the original YouTube channel. The first HowToBasic video was pretty great. It looked like there was actually a point, and then he just went nuts. Eggs were broken. Then the next video came out. Eggs were established as a gag. Now the gag is old and tired. It's just seen as kind of a standard for his videos, sort of like a weird requirement at this point. Because the joke is already pretty damn tired on his channel, the whole joke of your animation being "HowToBasic uses eggs" is very, very dull. It doesn't even feel like a joke. • The music in the transitions seems really stock to me. I get the feeling I've heard it in every other video before. That might just be me. • Some animation just really needs more attention and polish. The sweeping at 1:36 just seems so lazy that I can't tell if it's intentional or not. He just kind of [I]slightly[/I] wiggles a broom around. I would analyze the pacing, but because the jokes weren't really there to begin with, I can't give helpful on pacing them. The whole thing just seemed pretty off. I feel even worse looking at the comments though. Not that you have much control over who watches your videos, but these probably aren't the people that you'd want to attract: [IMG]http://i.imgur.com/rEUVKyV.png[/IMG] [IMG]http://i.imgur.com/156CQFW.png[/IMG] [IMG]http://i.imgur.com/xV6JRdj.png[/IMG] You need something with more substance. Get away from the "living with" formula. Watch a lot of other great shows and take notes. Look at the way ExplosmEntertainment animates their characters, and study what they do to convey emotion.

I remember you posted another video a while back and it was pretty shit. I'm not going to say this is amazing, but it's definetely an improvement. My biggest criticism is that everything feels "stiff" including animations and the voice acting, and as mentioned above the actual jokes need to be better. Just follow Snickerdoodle's advice, he's spot-on on everything.

whats up with the head bobbing it's like they're about to pass out [editline]18th January 2016[/editline] just like I almost did while watching this tbh

definitely work on your timing