Welp, after watching The Book of Eli I decided I should try writing more electronic music. I wanted to write a song that could go along with a similar story and setting to The Book of Eli's (post apocalyptic, but with hope), and ended up making this:
[media]http://soundcloud.com/schmoe222/heads-and-wings[/media]
It's really my first serious attempt at anything electronic, so constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated.
Also, thanks to Yur|ko for coming up with the name! :buddy:
It's fucking amazing.
Yep, fucking good! But there are some things that you can "upgrade", I'll try to explain you what.
Good points but can be better:
-There is like a wind behind the melody, no? So, you can add more after-effects like some bamboos sticks hitting eachother, it coud be better, I think.
-The melody is quite cool but you'd better put it at the beginning after a short intro, of course
-The intro is quite long... there is a preview of the melody (which is a great idea) at the 20th second but the theme really begins at 1.12 minutes. In fact, the intro has 1/3 of your song. I don't know if you did it on purpose...
-The voice (1.20 to 1.36 minutes): 16 seconds? Well, it's a bit short, I think that you might develop it. [When I heard it, at this period, I don't know why but I feel just a bit lost because I don't know where the voice come from and when I realize, the voice suddenly stop: too short]
Very good points:
-The cello bass and theme are good
-There are a beginning and a end which are corrects: well done, because it's not as easy as we can think.
-The drum carries along the song.
Sure your song is impressive, it's why I never grow tired when I listen to it.
Sorry for my spelling mistakes.
[QUOTE=Pleg;29509081]Yep, fucking good! But there are some things that you can "upgrade", I'll try to explain you what.
Good points but can be better:
-There is like a wind behind the melody, no? So, you can add more after-effects like some bamboos sticks hitting eachother, it coud be better, I think.
-The melody is quite cool but you'd better put it at the beginning after a short intro, of course
-The intro is quite long... there is a preview of the melody (which is a great idea) at the 20th second but the theme really begins at 1.12 minutes. In fact, the intro has 1/3 of your song. I don't know if you did it on purpose...
-The voice (1.20 to 1.36 minutes): 16 seconds? Well, it's a bit short, I think that you might develop it. [When I heard it, at this period, I don't know why but I feel just a bit lost because I don't know where the voice come from and when I realize, the voice suddenly stop: too short]
Very good points:
-The cello bass and theme are good
-There are a beginning and a end which are corrects: well done, because it's not as easy as we can think.
-The drum carries along the song.
Sure your song is impressive, it's why I never grow tired when I listen to it.
Sorry for my spelling mistakes.[/QUOTE]
I'll look around for some neat effects I can add to the background.
As far as showing the melody earlier, do you have any suggestions? I want it to get more powerful each time, so I don't want to add in something that early and have it be too climactic.
Yeah the voice is definitely a bit short, I'll see what I can do to extend it.
Thanks a lot for all the suggestions, they really help!
i haven't seen book of eli, but it's definitely on a close par with alot of film instrumentals- if not better. I could easily see this being used in a sci-fi film
the only problem i might have with this is that it takes a bit long to develop; even though the intro is still pretty awesome
[QUOTE=Schmoe222;29509148]I'll look around for some neat effects I can add to the background.
As far as showing the melody earlier, do you have any suggestions? I want it to get more powerful each time, so I don't want to add in something that early and have it be too climactic.
Yeah the voice is definitely a bit short, I'll see what I can do to extend it.
Thanks a lot for all the suggestions, they really help![/QUOTE]
You welcome!
I think I have an idea if you want an epic moment climactic.
You have many possibilities but I suggest you one, easy but really cool: add a violin which will play all the time during that period with the drums until that cimmactic moment. All of the volin's line in crescendo.
I can you give the line if I found one before you and if you agree of course.
[QUOTE=Bobie;29509281]i haven't seen book of eli, but it's definitely on a close par with alot of film instrumentals- if not better. I could easily see this being used in a sci-fi film
the only problem i might have with this is that it takes a bit long to develop; even though the intro is still pretty awesome[/QUOTE]
Yeah, I'll try out different things to make it more interesting to listen to.
[QUOTE=Pleg;29509442]You welcome!
I think I have an idea if you want an epic moment climactic.
You have many possibilities but I suggest you one, easy but really cool: add a violin which will play all the time during that period with the drums until that cimmactic moment. All of the volin's line in crescendo.
I can you give the line if I found one before you and if you agree of course.[/QUOTE]
You're talking a tremolo glissando on a violin, right? I've used it before, like in [url=http://zachbeever.bandcamp.com/track/the-horde-moves]here[/url]. The only thing with that effect is that I think it'd make the song too dark, but I'll experiment with it.
[QUOTE=Schmoe222;29509744]You're talking a tremolo glissando on a violin, right? I've used it before, like in [url=http://zachbeever.bandcamp.com/track/the-horde-moves]here[/url]. The only thing with that effect is that I think it'd make the song too dark, but I'll experiment with it.[/QUOTE]
I wasn't talking about a tremolo glissando but just a line of violon which begins where you want until the climactic moment: the rythm is just every beats until that moment.And, if it's possible in crescendo.
[QUOTE=Pleg;29509955]I wasn't talking about a tremolo glissando but just a line of violon which begins where you want until the climactic moment: the rythm is just every beats until that moment.And, if it's possible in crescendo.[/QUOTE]
Ah, okay, I get what you're saying. I'll try it out.
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