Hey guys, I just finished up this short story I started a few months back. I took quite a lengthy break from writing it, so it took a bit longer than I'd expected it to.
I haven't wrote a story or anything similar in years, not since I was very young, so I'm looking for as much criticism as possible... I'm sure my writing skills are a bit weak, if not more than just a bit.
The story is about a young man and woman who are in love, the girl (Cambrie) lives in an unhealthy environment and is abused by her father regularly. Terrence (the boy) would do anything in the world to make her life better, and this leads to a very strange thing happening to Terrence, in order to better the future of the girl he loves.
It may sound like a shitty romance story or something but that is not where it goes whatsoever, it's only on the topic of two people loving one another. Give it a fair chance, you may be surprised.
It's posted on fanfiction (because of some Dark Tower / Insomnia references) as well as DeviantART. Feel free to view it on whichever you wish:
[url]http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8874919/1/Terrence-Cambrie[/url]
[url]http://lifemonkey.deviantart.com/#/d5qfa7j[/url]
Once again, I appreciate any criticism. I'm not trying to write for a living or anything, but I would like to improve as much as possible as it is a hobby I enjoy, and would like to get better at.
Thanks.
EDIT: The story is about 5,400 words, so it may take a little bit of time, depending on your reading speed.
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