First I was sort of experimenting with heavy alliteration.
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A distant dissident dialect danced delicately off of tongues,
And spiritually savoring sounds sonically slithered out of lungs.
A petrafyingly prevalent power privately prowled around the chant
And ancient agents of atrocity articulated anthems of the rant
Onerous oriental rites recited,
Forgotten forbidden forces ignited.
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Then there is this one.
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The hypnotic hiatus has ended,
My feelings are dulled once more.
What the whetstone of senses has lended,
Has faded away into lore.
So I venture far from light,
I venture there to fight the trite.
In dreary darkness I look for
My ephemeral escape door
too much alliteration/assonance ends up sounding stupid cause you end up plumbing thesauri for words that start with the same letter but only sort of mean what you want them to mean.
second one has a good first verse, not so much on the second verse.
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