• Instrumental Trip-Hop Track
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[media]http://soundcloud.com/rickymousewaffles/the-long-walk-1[/media] New track I have recently finished. Its a dark and mildly cinematic trip-hop track. I tried to use a much different approach to the construction of this song by creating the percussive layers first then building on top of that. I'm really happy with the results.
I like it. It's got a nice, dark yet calm atmosphere that could work well with an introspective/societal-engagement styled rap. Good job, man.
Thamk you so much...that's exactly the style of vocals i've been searching for...hopefully I will find someone who fits...again thanks
I like this beat, mind if i rap over it?
[QUOTE=FacepunchZen;46322393]I like this beat, mind if i rap over it?[/QUOTE] Please do just post me as a producer and lemme be the first to hear it hehe, [url]https://soundcloud.com/rickymousewaffles[/url]
[QUOTE=mousewaffle;46322813]Please do just post me as a producer and lemme be the first to hear it hehe, [url]https://soundcloud.com/rickymousewaffles[/url][/QUOTE] Sounds good dude, it might take a lil while cause im working on other shit but ill post it here when im done :)
Just an update, I have finished the lyrics now I just need to find the time to record.
[QUOTE=FacepunchZen;46365554]Just an update, I have finished the lyrics now I just need to find the time to record.[/QUOTE] awesome
Yoooooo dude im done check it out, the quality of my mic is kinda shitty so excuse that. [video]http://soundcloud.com/ryan-eason/the-long-walkft-reason[/video]
[QUOTE=FacepunchZen;46447749]Yoooooo dude im done check it out, the quality of my mic is kinda shitty so excuse that. [video]http://soundcloud.com/ryan-eason/the-long-walkft-reason[/video][/QUOTE] turn down the vocals a LOT more, you need to mix them into the song, not have the song just sort of in the background. Your lyrics are awful too, I cringed throughout the entire thing. you need to work on your flow too, it's very awkward and hard to listen to.
I don't think the lyrics are that bad - too over the top for someone "not really known". People like eminem get away with that shit because they've built up their persona. The delivery isn't amazing, though. Not awful, but not great. Flow needs a lot of work (although is better than a lot of amateurs), and the quality is upsetting - really piercing. I agree about the mix, needs to be way down and with some more reverb.
Hey thanks for the criticism guys. My flow is complete shit Ill be the first to say that, whenever I record something I get choked up and angry for some reason and it really affects how I perform, I always feel like im playing catchup. Im alot better off the top and acapella then over a beat, strangely enough I feel more confident and in the moment, its weird. Idk what to do about the quality though, I only have a headset mic to record with :/ [editline]12th November 2014[/editline] Also self conscious about my voice, it sounds too high pitched and whiny to me. Idk what kind of flow would accommodate that, got any ideas?
[QUOTE=FacepunchZen;46447749]Yoooooo dude im done check it out, the quality of my mic is kinda shitty so excuse that. [video]http://soundcloud.com/ryan-eason/the-long-walkft-reason[/video][/QUOTE] do you kiss your mother with that mouth
[QUOTE=FacepunchZen;46476590]Hey thanks for the criticism guys. My flow is complete shit Ill be the first to say that, whenever I record something I get choked up and angry for some reason and it really affects how I perform, I always feel like im playing catchup. Im alot better off the top and acapella then over a beat, strangely enough I feel more confident and in the moment, its weird. Idk what to do about the quality though, I only have a headset mic to record with :/ [editline]12th November 2014[/editline] Also self conscious about my voice, it sounds too high pitched and whiny to me. Idk what kind of flow would accommodate that, got any ideas?[/QUOTE] well, work on the lyrics for sure. Be more conscious about what you're saying, and try to make it flow a bit more. Also, you really need to work on accenting and stressing certain syllables to create a flow, and keep that stress pattern common to make sort of a "beat" with your words. Thanks for taking the criticism to heart and not getting frustrated about it. We're trying to help you, and I can see that you're trying to improve.
Man all I want to do is get better in all aspects, idk what else to do with my life lol.
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