Dimidium Animae - WIP Metal Demo - General

I'm working on a Metal EP that I want to Sell, I've got 2 tracks that I've written out in a program called Guitar Pro 6 and I plan on doing the Guitars, Vocals, drums, mixing, and distribution myself, I need to purchase a decent low-budget microphone next week so I can start recording Here's an instrumental of the title track. Constructive Criticism please :3 [media]http://soundcloud.com/kennykohl/dimidium-animae[/media] Guitar pro: [url]http://www.guitar-pro.com/en/index.php[/url] Cover: [thumb]http://th07.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2011/188/f/8/dimidium_animae_by_kak714-d3lcthy.jpg[/thumb]

It is clipping so bad, and there is too much reverb. Also, you should have waited to post until you recorded real instruments, cause Guitar Pro makes even good compositions sound terrible.

yeah I know it does, it sounds much better when I play it. I'll lower the drum volume and tone down the reverb

I think you should study drums a bit more or get a drummer to help you because the drums seem very off and don't flow the way they should in a metal song. There's more to metal drums than just fast double bass and crashes

[QUOTE=phobia-_-;31221337]I think you should study drums a bit more or get a drummer to help you because the drums seem very off and don't flow the way they should in a metal song. There's more to metal drums than just fast double bass and crashes[/QUOTE] yepp I've been meaning to change it up, I've been messing around with gallops and triplets and making some nice stuff with the snare and china, I just need to fix it up a bit sample starts on measure 6 [media]http://soundcloud.com/kennykohl/hurr-durr-drums[/media] [img]https://s-hphotos-sjc1.fbcdn.net/278901_207655769285041_100001218593735_624196_6789418_o.jpg[/img] hows this for added breaks and snare? I'll have to learn how to use toms correctly though.

I hate the fact that you want to sell it. I don't like the sound, it's really messy. Where is the snare? It's so quiet that I can't hear it. Please don't get me wrong but [B]first[/B] plan to make an incredible good album with quality that people would give money for before you plan on selling it.

i dont think people are gonna pay for this

[QUOTE=Darkslicer;31234798]I hate the fact that you want to sell it. I don't like the sound, it's really messy. Where is the snare? It's so quiet that I can't hear it. Please don't get me wrong but [B]first[/B] plan to make an incredible good album with quality that people would give money for before you plan on selling it.[/QUOTE] a bit harsh, but I know it's a lot to go for and hopefully I can get help from people but I really want to get into selling music, however the way this is going it's going to be free considering these are mostly thrown together. also it's still in early development, It's not like I'm going to release it tomorrow, I'm still going to hopefully lengthen the songs and add nice choruses and make them sound a lot nicer before recording everything and try to finish it. I've still got a long ways to go, I'm just looking for what I can do to improve it from here

As it stands, not much of it is perceivable. Do you happen to own an ASIO sound-card? If you do, you could record the guitars / bass with a lot more quality than GP6's Instruments, and then just import a MIDI drum line if you don't actually play the drums yourself. That will help you getting started with a much better sound to achieve your goals.

The rhythms make no sense, the riffs you're playing go nowhere and the track is clipping like no tomorrow. It sounds like the whole song is a breakdown with way too much bass. The kick drum is ridiculous. I hate to be harsh, but as it stands, there's barely any composition effort put into this. Work on writing riffs that aren't so forgettable and that have a direction. You're going to need to improve this a ton in order to sell it.

[QUOTE=TD4rK1;31239371]As it stands, not much of it is perceivable. Do you happen to own an ASIO sound-card? If you do, you could record the guitars / bass with a lot more quality than GP6's Instruments, and then just import a MIDI drum line if you don't actually play the drums yourself. That will help you getting started with a much better sound to achieve your goals.[/QUOTE] I do have a USB guitar cable but if I run it straight from my amp it sounds like crap, and if I can't find any good virtual ams to run it from my guitar, and yea I plan on using digital drums. [QUOTE=Z3r0747;31239915]The rhythms make no sense, the riffs you're playing go nowhere and the track is clipping like no tomorrow. It sounds like the whole song is a breakdown with way too much bass. The kick drum is ridiculous. I hate to be harsh, but as it stands, there's barely any composition effort put into this. Work on writing riffs that aren't so forgettable and that have a direction. You're going to need to improve this a ton in order to sell it.[/QUOTE] yes I do rewrite parts constantly, I just don't post them because I change it so frequently, and yeahh there is way to much bass but I've since changed that.

Sounds like all the effortless fret mashing and excessive bass stomping that infects the metal scene these days. Why don't you try creating music worth listening to as opposed to something that is impossible to tell apart from something else.

Please do not ask money for this. You have to practice first before trying to sell your music.

[QUOTE=kak714;31241790]I do have a USB guitar cable but if I run it straight from my amp it sounds like crap, and if I can't find any good virtual ams to run it from my guitar, and yea I plan on using digital drums.[/QUOTE] Yes of course it does, when you plug it straight, only the Pre-amp signal gets through, resulting in madness. When recording straight from the Amp --> DAW, you need an Impulse Response after the signal gets into the Host to emulate a Cabinet, that also applies when recording Bass lines. Virtual Amps don't cut it if you want a heavy sound, they usually sound too "weak" and artificial when compared to the real thing, some professionals actually managed to get some decent sounding tones from Virtual Amps, but that sure takes a lifetime EQ'ing... Here's a 30 secs piece of recording (so you don't have to go through an entire composition) doing it they way I described you, Rhythm guitars, Solo guitar, Bass and Drums: [url]http://youtu.be/pw6N_jm7jP0?hd=1[/url]

[QUOTE=Yur|ko;31245141]Please do not ask money for this. You have to practice first before trying to sell your music.[/QUOTE] 'tis already been settled kind sir. "the way this is going it's going to be free"