[URL]http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/The_J_Hat/1175414/[/URL]
I did post this in the Critique my Writing thread, but no one commented on it, so I figured I'd post it here, see if I could possibly get critiques and/or comments.
The story itself will probably take you about an hour or so to read. Fair warning.
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Please get out.
Very nicely done, OP.
i'm a few paragraphs in and i'm really pleasantly surprised. there's a bit of dodgy syntax here and there but i like it so far. i gotta go to work but i think i'll finish it later and give you my thoughts
gotta say i was a bit worried at first because if there's anything there's too much of on the internet it's probably "lovecraftian style short stories" but it's holding up nicely. it's made better by me reading the whole thing in the voice of that dude from amnesia
Thanks for the comments so far.
I don't really know much about writing and w/e but i found it nice and engaging, although maybe with a bit too much arcane language, a bit too much explanation, and a nice ending
For the record, I added an Afterword to the story. It's mostly just notes on the story, some inspirations and ideas I had. In case anyone wanted to read it:
[URL="http://www.writerscafe.org/The_J_Hat/blogs/The-Journal-of-Adam-Warwick%3A-An-Afterword/31877/"]http://www.writerscafe.org/The_J_Hat/blogs/The-Journal-of-Adam-Warwick%3A-An-Afterword/31877/[/URL]
you wouldn't belieeeeeeeeeve how much i loved this.
i HATE reading, but i just devoured your story in one single take. great job dude.
Thanks.
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