• Two Odes
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I wrote two odes. Odes are structured in 10-line stanza following a rhyme scheme and in Iambic Pentameter, in case you didn't know. I'd like you guys to criticize me, or praise, but I am extremely certain it'll be the form. Enjoy! An Ode to Teenage Poetry. [code]The inner angst of teenage problems starts With pain (what’s pain to them?) so coarse in rhyme (Or even sans the rhyming schemes or parts That people needed back before) with time To view, yet (Come on, people used to take A lot of time to create master works With complex structure, using pretty words And feelings; now disgraced with many fake Disputes) the pain, supposed to be the perk, We all have felt before (though theirs unheard). What qualms (always sad about what burns The mind, and low above the grounded hearts, And never seeing reason always turns To pain, the fakeness pain that ills and darts My stomach towards accord, but never long Before I come to; blanked, nothing I care About, because, I’ve tried but cannot, dim Ideas that bring no care no matter (wrong Ideas in mind) how thorough they’re aware We’re lost) that allows poems wrong as them? No(art is sacred; complex, clever thought; Enlightened, comely tone; and broadened crowd; All things to art. Your ‘art’ has only taught The sorrowed life that plastic people shroud With closed emotions, periled comfort , wide To narrow views, which combine, perfect ring, To form disaster. Time is long, and life Is hard, and every type of person hides Their truths in secret; Hide your hate, and strife; Mature. Be silent in pain. We all are)thing [/code] An Ode to Drifting Leaves [code] These leaves are drifting down with fright, the first They’ve been together, nights always apart, For last, the stems are tied, so linked to start Their time, and land in gentle water, nursed By droplets, thrust in softly rapid force Along the rocky currents, now, adrift: The cool, abating flow; the leaves endorse The brooks relaxed and baby swells; the curt And certain path, with both the leaves unhurt; The water widens, truth reveals, too swift. T he river roars, and (trees) do blow too bold, T he lea(ves are tugged, with, cra,sh:ing waves and wind, Inept to calm the bo;nd, the lea((ves are pin ned Toge ther, claim forsaken li)(nk cold And broken, stormy clout without a w ay To incr)ease once unyielding ba)(nd to lull; In swells, the lea:::ves have fallen, ;into: ;fray; The lea) (v) (e) (s) are lost without each ((((other there, Relived at last, and d r i f t i n g far, to tear Them part; (was it the (right of fate) to scull)? The ocean vast and wide, a Leaf is left To fend in lone endeavor; lone in thought And need of warmth and it, as partner wrought Has gone, begotten gloom and such a heft Which fails and burdens Leaf. The Leaf is strong, And black, in lieu of open space, the field The Leaf can hold now, blank despair from loss, The weight and sink, and down to depths concealed From mate that lost to tension, then untied With raining penance. Leaf is gone, have died And shriveled past the point of seen emboss [/code]
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