Enter The Void like promo video

[DayShort]

I'm a film student and a project of mine is to find a company in Liverpool and make them a promotional video.
I found the company Black & Ginger. A unique brand design company.
After a couple of meetings and talking ideas I showed the creative director the opening sequence to Enter The Void. Straight after he said "That's what I want."
And so here is a rough edit of his promo video in the style of the Enter The Void opening credits.

[video=youtube;hhAH2CwIIcQ]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hhAH2CwIIcQ[/video]

I know you guys can be brutally honest so I need some feedback on what to change/add/take away etc.

Also, here's the Enter The Void opening incase you haven't seen it.

[video=youtube;tPxgi-PiNFE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tPxgi-PiNFE[/video]

[residualgrub]

It certainly is interesting.

[HellSoldier]

I never knew a movie did financially worse than Pluto Nash until you showed me this intro to Enter the Void. Thank you.

[Black034]

Enter the void was pretty good.

Nice one as well, tight as hell.

[BrickInTheHead]

the quotes in the beginning need to be handled better, they're so plain and the spacing feels off, it feels very amateurish

[editline]9th April 2013[/editline]

and boring

everything past that owns

[DayShort]

[QUOTE=BrickInHead;40220540]the quotes in the beginning need to be handled better, they're so plain and the spacing feels off, it feels very amateurish

[editline]9th April 2013[/editline]

and boring

everything past that owns[/QUOTE]

Yeah I wanted the beginning to be quite subtle and slow and then it jumps off into what it is. But I get you. And also I'm not sure if it exported properly because it was spaced out a bit more when I made them in photoshop. Not quite sure what happened there. I need to make them again anyway because i've just noticed the capital 'I' on 'Imagination'.

Thanks for watching, man.