Eli and Jason Play: Garry's Mod - Pirate Ship Wars - General

So me and my friend Eli were playing Garry's Mod and decided to go on a Pirate Wars server. We recorded it. Hope you enjoy! [video=youtube;mKbhxTL_8a8]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mKbhxTL_8a8[/video] Constructive criticism is greatly appreciated--any advice you can give us on how to improve the content of the video, the humor, the editing, whatever, is something I'd like to hear. Thanks!

Alright, let me start out with this: Facepunch has a notorious track record for people self-advertising shitty videos. If someone likes your videos, they will be posted on here, you don't need to self-advertise. On to the actual video...I can definitely feel some "riffing" energy in there, like you guys are actually having fun with it. That's a damn good start, seeing as how most self-advertisers are very dull with their delivery in energetic conversation. The whole Pokemon theme of the entire video is going to alienate alot of people watching, however, seeing as how it's not as popular as it used to be. My last suggestion would be to chop your videos up. It's a bit unnecessarily long, especially since a third of the video is you at the loading screen. Make it short and sweet, highlight the finer points of the game.

Let me be blunt: You add nothing interesting in the videos besides immature talking, swearing and bad jokes. You guys probably should get a little older.

[QUOTE=duno;41370335]Let me be blunt: You add nothing interesting in the videos besides immature talking, swearing and bad jokes. You guys probably should get a little older.[/QUOTE] This is kind of what I meant by the whole "Pokemon" thing. You have the energy down, but the contexts of your jokes make it seem immature.

[QUOTE=Water-Marine;41370240]Alright, let me start out with this: Facepunch has a notorious track record for people self-advertising shitty videos. If someone likes your videos, they will be posted on here, you don't need to self-advertise. On to the actual video...I can definitely feel some "riffing" energy in there, like you guys are actually having fun with it. That's a damn good start, seeing as how most self-advertisers are very dull with their delivery in energetic conversation. The whole Pokemon theme of the entire video is going to alienate alot of people watching, however, seeing as how it's not as popular as it used to be. My last suggestion would be to chop your videos up. It's a bit unnecessarily long, especially since a third of the video is you at the loading screen. Make it short and sweet, highlight the finer points of the game.[/QUOTE] Thank you, that was very valuable feedback. Now I'm aware of the issues I might get from self-advertising. I'm just learning the ropes of editing by the way, but I'll be sure to be a little heavier with the cuts next time. Also since what me and my friends talk about and how we talk to each other is kind of a freeform thing, it's difficult to change things without sacrificing the energy, but we'll do our best. [QUOTE=duno;41370335]Let me be blunt: You add nothing interesting in the videos besides immature talking, swearing and bad jokes. You guys probably should get a little older.[/QUOTE] Will do.

[QUOTE=Pvt. Anderson;41370727]Thank you, that was very valuable feedback. Now I'm aware of the issues I might get from self-advertising. I'm just learning the ropes of editing by the way, but I'll be sure to be a little heavier with the cuts next time. Also since what me and my friends talk about and how we talk to each other is kind of a freeform thing, it's difficult to change things without sacrificing the energy, but we'll do our best.[/QUOTE] Might take a little time, but you'll get it. You haven't gotten butthurt over the comments so far, so that's another good sign. Best of luck to ya. Oh, and no minecraft, please.

half the video was loading

Why did you record the loading?

This video brings me great dishonour.

cut out the first 5 minutes at least.