My short story losely based on 1984 and HL2 (Would appreciate feedback)

[hoot37]

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[I be da best]

Eh, it's ok. Seems like you basically picked out different parts of 1984 and changed the names of things.

[Metanar]

gone

[hoot37]

Thanks, I'll take note of that.

[Pvt. Martin]

Wasn't HL2 based on 1984 in the first place?

[Maloof?]

It's dystopian; doesn't necessarily mean it was based on 1984 but rather that it falls, partially, into the genre of dystopian fiction