• My "Poems"
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Hey FacePunch, i have been writing poems lately, and would like feedback on my poems. Thanks <3 [b]Drama[/b] Why is there Drama Do we really need it It only causes problems Don’t our lives have enough as it is What does it accomplish Why do people start drama Do they really have noithing else to do But create stupid stuff for other people And ruin their lives? [b]Life[/b] Are we who we think we are? Or, are we something else Our lifes are so perfect Yet there is more to it How can the world be so “Perfect” It would make sense if there was no god Yet, it’d make sense if there was Why is it that we don’t know You would assume that we’d know by now But why don’t we The world will never know Till you die And you are nothing Or you are something Something truly incredible [b]RollerCoaster[/b] Life is like a rollercoaster One minute your as high as everyone else Than the next thing you know Your down And nobody cares Maybe thats why we go through life Maybe we need to expierence drama Maybe it betters us There are so many twists Many of us tend to leap off And hope someone catches us But, what if nobody does And we fall into darkness And lose who we are What do we do?
Don't use "lives" twice in the first. Oh, and vary your sentence lengths more.
Make sure you use the correct form of 'Your' or 'You're'. Try to create some different images that the straight forward one created by your title.
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