Hey FacePunch, i have been writing poems lately, and would like feedback on my poems. Thanks <3
[b]Drama[/b]
Why is there Drama
Do we really need it
It only causes problems
Don’t our lives have enough as it is
What does it accomplish
Why do people start drama
Do they really have noithing else to do
But create stupid stuff for other people
And ruin their lives?
[b]Life[/b]
Are we who we think we are?
Or, are we something else
Our lifes are so perfect
Yet there is more to it
How can the world be so “Perfect”
It would make sense if there was no god
Yet, it’d make sense if there was
Why is it that we don’t know
You would assume that we’d know by now
But why don’t we
The world will never know
Till you die
And you are nothing
Or you are something
Something truly incredible
[b]RollerCoaster[/b]
Life is like a rollercoaster
One minute your as high as everyone else
Than the next thing you know
Your down
And nobody cares
Maybe thats why we go through life
Maybe we need to expierence drama
Maybe it betters us
There are so many twists
Many of us tend to leap off
And hope someone catches us
But, what if nobody does
And we fall into darkness
And lose who we are
What do we do?
Don't use "lives" twice in the first.
Oh, and vary your sentence lengths more.
Make sure you use the correct form of 'Your' or 'You're'. Try to create some different images that the straight forward one created by your title.
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