Yo.
How you doin?
Good.
So Myself and several of my friends have just recently started making videos. I edit all of them together along with adding the effects. My friends mainly act or film. Here is our first video. And yes the acting sucks from the antagonist. He wont be in another movie. Constructive criticism.
[video=youtube;afVa76ykY6o]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=afVa76ykY6o[/video]
Edit: watch in 1080p.
plot could use some work. dealer suddenly just pulls and starts firing? made no sense.
acting is meh
camerawork needs an upgrade
[QUOTE=Protocol7;36127478]plot could use some work. dealer suddenly just pulls and starts firing? made no sense.
acting is meh
camerawork needs an upgrade[/QUOTE]
Thank you. I really appreciate this, how was the vfx in your opinion?
The opening titles definitely need a lot of work. Grammar is important in titles as well. You also may want to make a unique logo for your film studio(even if it is school it definitely would look a lot better.)
The opening scene was way too shaky. Try using a homemade steadicam from [url]http://14dollarstabilizer.org/[/url] (Do note that you won't get instant results and you'll want to practice with this for a while before you get competent enough for it to produce usable footage.
Try cutting when doing certain shots as well. Clearly you won't be able to do panning shots without proper equipment so try another approach to it.
[editline]30th May 2012[/editline]
[video=youtube;eslSC6KQFt8]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eslSC6KQFt8&hd=1[/video]
In my personal opinion this would be a much better title sequence. It's simple enough, of course add your own touches and do what you want but something like that is simple enough to make it look professional. (this is all my opinion, others may disagree)
Cutting to text with a black background really ruins the flow of a video. Try incorporating the text into the video itself. If you want to be really ambitious you can have a narrator explaining the back story and a bit of insight into each character. You can even do flashbacks if you wanted. Video to video is a lot less jarring than video to still image.
In the beginning cut out the background audio and leave only the music. Sounds like the truck door shutting were too quiet to be read as intentionally left there, and instead just sound sloppy.
The speaking was meh overall, I don't know if you guys had to speak up so the mic could hear you, or if you didn't spend enough time fleshing out your characters but it seemed unnatural. Try getting a shotgun mic if possible.
It was already mentioned but you really really need to use a tripod/steadicam. I started to feel nauseous at the beginning of the video (to be fair I have really bad motion sickness).
Don't be discouraged though, you took the biggest step and actually made something. Now you just have to tidy the details up.
[QUOTE=Bomber9900;36128085]The opening titles definitely need a lot of work. Grammar is important in titles as well. You also may want to make a unique logo for your film studio(even if it is school it definitely would look a lot better.)
The opening scene was way too shaky. Try using a homemade steadicam from [url]http://14dollarstabilizer.org/[/url] (Do note that you won't get instant results and you'll want to practice with this for a while before you get competent enough for it to produce usable footage.
Try cutting when doing certain shots as well. Clearly you won't be able to do panning shots without proper equipment so try another approach to it.
[editline]30th May 2012[/editline]
[video=youtube;eslSC6KQFt8]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eslSC6KQFt8&hd=1[/video]
In my personal opinion this would be a much better title sequence. It's simple enough, of course add your own touches and do what you want but something like that is simple enough to make it look professional. (this is all my opinion, others may disagree)[/QUOTE]
What was the music in the intro you made, and i like the text and emblem but im thinking about having something with more movement in it.
[editline]30th May 2012[/editline]
[QUOTE=FKop_Dragon;36128429]Cutting to text with a black background really ruins the flow of a video. Try incorporating the text into the video itself. If you want to be really ambitious you can have a narrator explaining the back story and a bit of insight into each character. You can even do flashbacks if you wanted. Video to video is a lot less jarring than video to still image.
In the beginning cut out the background audio and leave only the music. Sounds like the truck door shutting were too quiet to be read as intentionally left there, and instead just sound sloppy.
The speaking was meh overall, I don't know if you guys had to speak up so the mic could hear you, or if you didn't spend enough time fleshing out your characters but it seemed unnatural. Try getting a shotgun mic if possible.
It was already mentioned but you really really need to use a tripod/steadicam. I started to feel nauseous at the beginning of the video (to be fair I have really bad motion sickness).
Don't be discouraged though, you took the biggest step and actually made something. Now you just have to tidy the details up.[/QUOTE]
Wow, i like the flashback idea, i will incorporate that into my next film. and thank you for the link. Greatly appreciated.
[QUOTE=Jesus Rulz;36137010]What was the music in the intro you made, and i like the text and emblem but im thinking about having something with more movement in it.
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[video=youtube;H5UQE3QnZwI]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H5UQE3QnZwI[/video]
wow, you take constructive criticism really well. is this thread really happening
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