• running.avi - A short film by me.
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[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n5EKLNj2kQA[/media] Not a ripoff or related to What's In The Box. Part of my own story called Project 9, This video features Jones Upwoods(The protagonist) running from a UPC attack chopper. I hope you enjoy it Sorry if the heli sounds are annoying/loop badly. They were hard to blend together. And sorry if the vibrating of the camera is too noisy. I wanted to keep the phone sounds in. Credits: Jones Upwoods - Me Cameraman - Me Editing - Me Sounds - Valve Software Props - Me. [editline]03:09PM[/editline] How am i dumb?
[QUOTE=Comrade General;24800208] [editline]03:09PM[/editline] How am i dumb?[/QUOTE] People are rating you dumb because your film looks like it needs work. It's generally blurry, fast and out of focus. I found it difficult to read the writing on the paper. It also seemed to lack any real direction, but you did say that this is part of a project. In the future refine your videos before you post them on the internet for the entire of Facepunch to see. Just thought I'd post some constructive criticism before the shit-storm.
Looks stupid, stop the breathing, too
You can make the heli-sounds loop with a quick fade-out/fade-in.
I loved the shitty helicopter looping sound.
Cool cap gun bro.
It was kind of lame, but it isn't [i]dumb[/i]. It just needs a lot of work, like less shaky camera work, and better audio quality. Also try not to spend too much time in one area, like 30 seconds of you walking through a garden while breathing intensely was a bit boring. I can't really help you improve since I have no movie making experience, but hopefully this will help in some way.
[QUOTE=creefer;24801079]Cool cap gun bro.[/QUOTE] Actually a shitty chinese BB Gun i picked up in a pound shop like six years ago. This was just, pretty much a quick test film for the entire project.
You spell like shit.
I have a pen like that. I remember running around with my dad's old camera back in 2002 making movies EXACTLY like this one. To make good first person movies you need a camera that attaches to your hand so that you are hands-free when rolling.
[QUOTE=Sokrates;24801226]You spell like shit.[/QUOTE] I don't actually. I just have appauling spacing and writing skills.
Running? You could have been simply suffering from asthma on a leisurely walk outside to enjoy the day.
Boring and terrible. Tape camera to your head so you have both arms free. It's not like that will make the movie any better anyway.
[b]jones use this[/b]
Do you have a fucking breathing problem?
m9's don't have ejection ports fyi
You need to read up on how to make your video more appealing. Right now it's just one constant stream of one scene. I can't really give you much advice because you basically took one scene out of your project and want us to criticize it. We don't know the context in which the scene plays. Right now it is a big big mess. If you want some real advice then post a couple more scenes
I don't know why, but that really hurt my eyes...
I remember doing shit like this when I was 14 or 15. Does not work on camera
So, our heavily asthmatic hero flees (and by that I mean walks very slowly) from a horrible looping rotor sound while waving around his mobile for no reason, until he finds a toy gun and some drugs, which he stares at intently and waves them around a bit. Then he suddenly develops extreme photosensitivity, someone plays a combine voice sound, and the view cuts out to obscure the fact that Comrade couldn't be bothered to edit in bullets - I mean to obscure the gore.
don't ever do it again
Comrade General/Deathbucket quality since 1909
That was just... bad. Get some stuff from video copilot, also get After Effects (use these in combo to spice up your video.) Follow some video copilot tutorials, too, and buy an HD camera (just because your quality is shit.) Also, buy one that's at least semi-decent... You don't a crappy one that separates the colors and doesn't allow manual focus/aperture/optical zoom. Yeah, just PM me if you need help.
[QUOTE=Lebowski;24809760]Comrade General/Deathbucket quality since 1909[/QUOTE] Stole the words outta my mouth. Was about to say; Move along guys, its Comrade General.
[quote]Lebowski Maybrick: i wish deathbucket would kick the bucket soon Jeff Lynne: I haven't seen him in like a year Jeff Lynne: is he still around Lebowski Maybrick: comrade general = deathbucket Jeff Lynne: haha is it really Jeff Lynne: that explains so much Lebowski Maybrick: yes [/quote]
Jesus you run slow How much do you weigh
[QUOTE=Comrade General;24801483]I don't actually. I just have appauling spacing and writing skills.[/QUOTE] [B]appalling[/B]
[QUOTE=Tacosheller;24810398]Jesus you run slow How much do you weigh[/QUOTE] Judging by his breathing, a lot.
[QUOTE=Comrade General;24801483]I don't actually. I just have [B]appauling[/B] spacing and writing skills.[/QUOTE] :silent:
Gave me those chills you get after you see something that even embarrasses yourself.
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