are these good lyrics? - General

never really thought of myself as a very good lyricist, but i've got a verse and a chorus i might continue work on, if they're worth it welcome back, spaceman, we missed you down here. i left my heartstrings up there, spinning in the vacuum. where no one can hear the tears float back into the eyes from whence they came, and every day is exactly the same on tonight at eight the late show our guest tonight is spaceman spliff tell us what the earth looks like from so far away i was a twenty-something came back an old man with a wasted life recycled air and vapor stoges

spaceman spliff heh

some of its okay but stuff like 'from whence it came' is just not good at all

Welcome back, Mister Spaceman We missed you from below I left my heartstrings out to rot With the tears my eyes sowed And when they floated back to me I decided I knew why why every day in itself was repeating time (Chorus?) Hello Mister Spaceman Go on, take a bow It matters not what you lost But what our nation has found Ta-da! Just my 2 cents anyway. I'm not sure what genre these are for, but I'm sort of singing it as a rock ballad thing.

[QUOTE=killerteacup;39288198]some of its okay but stuff like 'from whence it came' is just not good at all[/QUOTE] Read "from whence they came" and all I could think of was Limmy's Show... [media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tSeGYHaNyOA[/media]

[QUOTE=inebriaticxp;39287141]never really thought of myself as a very good lyricist, but i've got a verse and a chorus i might continue work on, if they're worth it welcome back, spaceman, we missed you down here. i left my heartstrings up there, spinning in the vacuum. where no one can hear the tears float back into the eyes from whence they came, and every day is exactly the same on tonight at eight the late show our guest tonight is spaceman spliff tell us what the earth looks like from so far away i was a twenty-something came back an old man with a wasted life recycled air and vapor stoges[/QUOTE] they're poor but you can make them work if you believe.

see ya spaceman.

They're decent, but I'd say with lyrics, simplicity is key. Unless of course you're telling a deep personal story or writing rap music.

how do you think you're gonna get any good advice here posting your lyrics and just asking if they're good only you can know if your lyrics are good and what it comes down to is whether or not the finished product (your voice and a rhythm) sounds good. even then, only you can know if it sounds "good"

Big Blue, you're a winner. I'd do the tag but I'm on my mobile. If you need to ask if the lyrics are good, they're bad.