Hey guys, just wanted to know what you think of this.[URL="http://www.indabamusic.com/songs/show/750211"]http://www.indabamusic.com/songs/show/750211[/URL]
It's a song that I wrote, preformed, and produced.
It's a message, about nobody wanting to do nothing about today's society, and relying on someone else to do it.
it does start off slow (sorry) but as people have stated, it gets better.
and im not that much of a rapper, so don't except much
the 30 second 'twang, twang, twang, twang' intro was way too long, but it got better.
[QUOTE=daijitsu;21828211]the 30 second 'twang, twang, twang, twang' intro was way too long, but it got better.[/QUOTE]
this.
also,idk why three people rated dumb and didn't even comment.
I can only assume it's for the lack of info and a link being the only content of the OP.
Should also fix that.
The delivery was terrible. Sounds more like you were talking than rapping.
Delivery was terrible as gamefreek said, but it got a bit better later on. Lyics at the start were quite lacking too, but later on they got a lot better.
Thank you guys for telling me the flaws, I will keep in mind, for the next time.
In this style, I'd suggest at MOST eight beats of the opening twang, preferrably four before you introduce the buzz.
I wanted to start off slow, but you're right, that's too slow.
[QUOTE=daijitsu;21839848]In this style, I'd suggest at MOST eight beats of the opening twang, preferrably four before you introduce the buzz.[/QUOTE]
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I completetly agree. You have about 64 fucking twangs before the song actually starts. 8 would be perfect.
[QUOTE=DoctorSalt;21842110]^
I completetly agree. You have about 64 fucking twangs before the song actually starts. 8 would be perfect.[/QUOTE]
fixed
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