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Hey guys, i started making some movies in my free time with some friend, and im looking to get some critiques on them, and some attention drawn towards them.
These are my first three movies i made they are in order of when i made them. I know they need some work, im a first time director/cameraman/actor in these and im learning as i go, which is why some decent crits would be greatly appreciated, as to what im doing right and what im doing wrong.
[b]Ice Cream Revenge[/b]
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=541ungdyu3I&feature=related[/media]
[b]The Delivery[/b]
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4QaGcPt6Mo8&feature=related[/media]
I know the effects are kinda cheesy on this but i feel like im getting better, especially with a new movie we just filmed and im spending a lot more time and trying different techniques
[b]Spaghetti Anathema[/b]
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V40mvIyF2dE&feature=related[/media]
thanks for checking them out!
You really need to work on how your actresses hold their guns.
[QUOTE=milkandcooki;32034712]You really need to work on how your actresses hold their guns.[/QUOTE]
yes i do, i noticed it like half way through shooting and i was like "wow"
video 2:
for an action thingy it's super slow and that makes it really boring to watch.
[QUOTE=DOG-GY;32042931]video 2:
for an action thingy it's super slow and that makes it really boring to watch.[/QUOTE]
awesome that actually helps a lot, thanks, and i agree it does need to pick up the pace some
shaky!
[QUOTE=ManicMarauder;32083787]shaky![/QUOTE]
yea its hard to get people who can work a camera well, im trying different diy things to help kill the shake haha
[QUOTE=Moocow8;32129971]yea its hard to get people who can work a camera well, im trying different diy things to help kill the shake haha[/QUOTE]Maybe you should use more still shots then , you can't rely one the whole film to be shaky.
I know this video (The Delivery) is meant to be funny, you know comic relief kind of funny.
But that's no excuse to make it not good.
There's a bunch of problems in this one, especially with the way people hold their guns, their readiness and reactions.
Imagine you're the woman upstairs with the guard. Once you hear gunshots and automatic rifles being fired downstairs, would you just sit there and wait?
Would the guard stand up with his hands behind his back, as if nothing has happened?
Furthermore, when the three badguys in the kitchen discover the "dead body", all they do to check if he's alive is slightly touch the shoulder with his foot. Jesus.
What kind of trained soldier would leave his comrade like that? I'd perform CPR if nothing else. Or check more thoroughly.
At 1:12, two soldiers enter and clear a room. Now the Soldier #1 goes first through the room, then the Soldier #2 checks out a small janitor closet.
A well trained soldier would never let his friend go first into the room without checking the smaller room first.
Imagine there was a guy standing in the closet: Soldier #1 would get shot no doubt. Think these things through. Do it properly, or don't do it.
Check out some youtube videos of instructional gun handling. If you're gonna make a scene with trained soldiers in it, at least check some stuff out beforehand.
You also need to work on switching between camera angles. 1:21 through 1:26 is super hard to comprehend, because when you switch back to the hot girl's shooting scene you go from left side to right side, which fucks with the human mind's ability to comprehend where we're at. Same with 1:32 through 1:37. I'm not gonna complain about the sound effects, the music and the visual effects (which were generic and bland) because that's something you will learn over time yourself.
The camera quality and lighting composition is of course bad, but that's not really what's important. You can get gear later. Just focus on thinking stuff through for now. Also check out some videos on video production, search for popular movie action scenes or something like that. Look at how they handle their angles. How they are shot. When they are stable, when they are shaky. Little things, like how people enter a room or run or walk. These things really help if they're done properly, to give the whole video a more professional feel.
These are the kinds of things that separate "youtube" films from proper indie films, where people actually think about continuity and reference. Plan your scenes. Imagine yourself in your actor's shoes. Most importantly, don't make concessions. If the scene didn't feel right, DO IT AGAIN!
Keep practicing and never give up. Take things seriously.
[I](Also, I mean not to offend proper youtube folks, theres guys like freddiew and corridor digital that do this kind of thing really well)[/I]
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