(I wasn't sure whether this went in the Creation Corner forum or here)
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I suppose we can post our own videos, be they Garry's Mod related or not, right? If not, then I apologize. I just thought I'd post my video, as it took me a long time to create and I thought I'd share it here.
Anyway, here it is:
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OBghzSnaYlY[/media]
I figure, even if you don't like the jokes (though I really hope at least one catches your fancy) that you can at least appreciate some decent production values. This video is, out of all of my other Machinima, the most heavily-edited and overall, IMO, my best Machinima as of now in about every way.
[b]Episode Synopsis[/b]
Episode One: "Pilot"
The year is 2245. By now, advanced cryogenic technology has arrived, and cryogenic labs have been placed in each city. In fear of natural disasters, the people of each city would rush into the cryo labs and freeze themselves for a certain amount of time, hoping to wake up in a safe world.
The apocalypse is upon society, and the fate of a city will rest in one person's hands. Gregory is the community leader, who was chosen to, after their century in cryo, to exit the lab and investigate to see if the world is safe to rebuild in.
His best friend Leon comes along, with his "pet" Klumpo.
Episode two will pick up after this in the cryo lab and into the future.
I am very much so open to criticism. The pilot is not flawless, and therefore, before I begin editing episode two, criticism wouldn't necessarily hurt. I'd like to hear what I did right, wrong, what just needs tweaking, etc.
A few things I am aware of that I plan to work on in episode two:
-Way way over-the-top headbobbing
-Camera repetition
-Klumpo subtitles going to quickly
Anyway, thanks for watching.
If you're particularly liking the series, you may want to check out these links:
[url=http://virtualflicks.net/forum/index.php?/topic/4478-the-big-city/] A full scoop on the series, along with some more info on the full plot[/url]
[url=http://virtualflicks.net/forum/index.php?/topic/5081-the-big-city-promo-images/page__pid__66241__st__0&#entry66241] A whole bunch of promotional signatures, posters, etc. for The Big City[/url]
[img]http://i289.photobucket.com/albums/ll230/dannystorm/TBCSig.png[/img]
Eh, your voice annoys, the plot has so many holes in it, Halo Machinamas have been so done before, if you're going to use a Halo game use the most recent one unless going for nostalgia, which in this case you're not, your jokes are forced and unfunny. Just opinions.
[QUOTE=Dachande;24069502]Eh, your voice annoys, the plot has so many holes in it, Halo Machinamas have been so done before, if you're going to use a Halo game use the most recent one unless going for nostalgia, which in this case you're not, your jokes are forced and unfunny. Just opinions.[/QUOTE]
In case you're unaware, Halo: CE has the absolute most superior abilities in modding compared to the other Halo games. Map making (the map editor for Halo 1 is like Forge on steroids - more than just adding items), chroma keying, texture modification, etc. That's mainly why I went with it.
And your "Halo Machinimas have been done so before use a newer game" doesn't make a lot of sense to me. Using the newer Halo games, if anything, makes a machinima stick out less. Halo: CE Machinima is few and far between nowadays.
I understand Halo Machinima as a whole is pretty typical, but that shouldn't make Halo Machinima automatically be called overdone.
And also, not all of those were my voice. The only voice I did was Klumpo. The other ones I got experienced actors to play as.
In which case, could you please specify which actor(s) you disliked, and why?
And could you also be more specific on which jokes you disliked?
Also I would like to see what holes in the plot you've discovered. I haven't really gone into the plot much at all in the pilot, so I'm not sure exactly how there can be a hole in it as of now.
Though, irregardless, you claim to have found one and I'd like to know what it was.
Thanks for the criticism.
Whenever they talk it looks like they're fapping
You really want me to go through the entire video again to give you two or three mediocre jokes? Ugh.
Halo CE Is still a Halo game, with Halo Flavors and a Halo Storyline. You are using the same Flavors and Storyline as other Halo Machinimas have before you, thus making the machinima un-original and really lacking in any flair.
Also you took 'plot holes' too literally, I meant to say the plot appears too predictable and, yet again, boring and unoriginal.
***ALL*** of the voices in the video annoyed me, they were all seemingly voiced by kids in their young teens and besides the fact that most Machinimas feature voice actors in their young teens these voice actors have seemingly no depth or experience in making it appear as if they are doing nothing more than reading from a script.
[QUOTE=Dachande;24069832]You really want me to go through the entire video again to give you two or three mediocre jokes? Ugh.
Halo CE Is still a Halo game, with Halo Flavors and a Halo Storyline. You are using the same Flavors and Storyline as other Halo Machinimas have before you, thus making the machinima un-original and really lacking in any flair.
Also you took 'plot holes' too literally, I meant to say the plot appears too predictable and, yet again, boring and unoriginal.[/QUOTE]
I honestly beg to differ. This isn't a generic Spartans VS Elites war Machinima, which I, too have seen done countless times before.
I know the apocalypse is in a good slew of Halo Machinima, though I'm adding my own twists to it, with the uptight man going on an impulse, keeping his entire town (excluding his best friend) frozen for another 100 years, so that they may have their own little personal sandbox. It's all explained in that thread in the OP.
I am yet to see a Machinima doing anything such as that, and I have watched a [b]lot[/b] of Machinima in my day.
[QUOTE=Dachande;24069832]You really want me to go through the entire video again to give you two or three mediocre jokes? Ugh.[/QUOTE]
Way to be constructive. All I asked was which joke(s) you disliked and why you disliked them. I'm trying to improve, and you're honestly not helping me just by saying the jokes are mediocre.
@Fap comment - Yes, the Bungie developers must've been watching porn while making the animations for Halo 1. Though it's honestly irrelevant.
[QUOTE=DominationDarre;24069978]I honestly beg to differ. This isn't a generic Spartans VS Elites war Machinima, which I, too have seen done countless times before.
I know the apocalypse is in a good slew of Halo Machinima, though I'm adding my own twists to it, with the uptight man going on an impulse, keeping his entire town (excluding his best friend) frozen for another 100 years, so that they may have their own little personal sandbox. It's all explained in that thread in the OP.
I am yet to see a Machinima doing anything such as that, and I have watched a [b]lot[/b] of Machinima in my day.
Way to be constructive. All I asked was which joke(s) you disliked and why you disliked them. I'm trying to improve, and you're honestly not helping me just by saying the jokes are mediocre.
@Fap comment - Yes, the Bungie developers must've been watching porn while making the animations for Halo 1. Though it's honestly irrelevant.[/QUOTE]
Apocolypse, Normal guy attempting to control silly and humerous guy, dude we've been there done that.
Sorry for not helping you all the way, I just am not in any way watching that again to give you a few jokes.
[QUOTE=Dachande;24070037]Apocolypse, Normal guy attempting to control silly and humerous guy, dude we've been there done that.
Sorry for not helping you all the way, I just am not in any way watching that again to give you a few jokes.[/QUOTE]
Well, I can't exactly argue with your first point. Yes, it is a normal guy and a humorous guy, etc. I'm trying to make up for it with high production values and editing, and making my own spin on the plot (which will be developed in Episode Two/three).
Though I still find your second comment odd. You watched it all of... like.. less than a half hour ago. I find it hard to believe you've already forgotten each and every joke, or at least can't remember which you liked/disliked.
Though it's irrelevant. If you can't critique the jokes further, you can't and I'm not going to force you to re-watch it.
Thanks for watching.
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