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this is a thread for people to express creativity. people can come here to post short stories that they feel proud to have created. For the most part i want to let you all be as free about this as possible any ideas and posts are accepted here but there are rules. 1.BE SERIOUS:I would love to see comedies and love jokes and even sarcasm but please be witty.I love odd random hmor in a story but outside of that do not post things just to waste space.really put lots of thought into this 2.BE NICE:critism is accepted and appreciated from all people but please keep it constructive.dont just tell people they suck,tell them how they can improve. 3.PLAGIARISM:plagiarism is unacceptable. this is a thread for originality. 4.CENSORSHIP:honestly censorship is what i least worry about.I dont like to nitpick any content is acceptable,however if you the author feel it has content some might view as "extreme" please put a disclaimer at the beginning of the post 5.BE DESCRIPTIVE:put as much detail in the story as possible to paint a picture in the reader's head. 6.HAVE FUN AND BE CREATIVE:this is the most important rule. enjoy yourselves and thank you
Is there a word limit?
[QUOTE=Kwigg;33235266]Is there a word limit?[/QUOTE] Absoluetely not!=)just have lots of fun [editline]11th November 2011[/editline] My name is officer reddy,I'm a policeman stationed in Miami,needless to say I have a lot on my plate.I was driving around a culdesac doing a routine patrol when i got a call on my radio about a biker gang wreaking havoc in a nearby bar.I sighed,I thought today would be calm for once. "Roger that I'm on my way,"and with that i turned on my lights and sirens and sped towards the source of the ruccus.When i got there i realized that this was no ordinary problem.Even from outside i could hear screaming and crashing.I cautiosly walked in with my nightstick at the ready.Oh man it was even worse on the inside,tables broken,glass everywhere and blood on the walls.I looked and counted the number of gang members...8 big guys who were clearly very intoxicated. "Hey"I yelled. They all turned to look at me. "What the fuck do you want" asked the largest of the men. "W-well I'm....I'm here to arrest you "I said trying very hard to keep my composure. They seemed to find this funny as the whole bar filled with laughter. "And how do you intend to do that"he asked with a cocky smile. "L-look I don't want any trouble ju-" "Well"he interrupted"in that case you shouldnt have shown up here" he nodded at a portly man to my right. Without warning he lunged forward and threw a wild right hook.I just barely dodged it and then hit him in the gut with my nightstick,he fell to the ground with a thud,completely unconcious. The second he hit the ground the other seven men began pounding my head in.Iwas in the midst of a flury of fists and feet,I wildly swung my nightstick hitting several people,until the leader knocked me to the ground. "Now hold him down" The two remaining men quickly obeyed. "Now"he said"I'm going to kill you...nice...and...slowly." He walked over to his motorbike and pulled out a crowbar.Then he slowly walked back to me. He raised the crowbar high above his head and swung.BAM!a hard shot to my ribs,I could hear them cracking.BAM!Aw damn he broke my arm.BAM!Maybe death wouldnt be so bad.He had taken out five of them after all,that seemed like enough.BAM!Well damn he broke my legs.He raised the crowbar one more time,preparedd to crack my skull and kill me. "Any last words?" "Go to hell" I closed my eyes as he swung for the final blow.BAM! I opened my eyes to see him dead on the ground in a pool of his own blood.I lokked past him to see Sheriff jones pointing his gun toward the men holding me down. "Dont shoot"they pleaded"we surrender" Jones slapped some hand cuffs on them and put them in his car,then he called for an ambulance.The adrenaline wore off just as the ambulance arrived and a horrible wave of pain spread over me.I began to slip out of conciousness as they loaded me into the ambulance but before i completely blacked out I looked at the man who had saved me and said "thank you". [editline]11th November 2011[/editline] here is one of mine as an example
Here we go again. No.
One time there was this thread on Facepunch. It was named "post your own short story." Many people did not like this thread, and so the Great Almighty Mods decided to nuke the thread. Nobody saw anything of the unholy thread ever again.
come on now.i put a lot more thought into this one.you two should lose the frowns(even if i cant see you)
I make longer stories(Sci-Fi kind of stuff), is it 'k if I just showcase an opener instead of a completed piece?
[QUOTE=chicken spears;33241931]come on now.i put a lot more thought into this one.you two should lose the frowns(even if i cant see you)[/QUOTE] I can't because I'm always sad and can't stop being sad you big derp.
[QUOTE=Azaer;33247599]I make longer stories(Sci-Fi kind of stuff), is it 'k if I just showcase an opener instead of a completed piece?[/QUOTE] thats fine. [editline]13th November 2011[/editline] [QUOTE=Zarjk;33241204]Here we go again. No.[/QUOTE] i know the last one was...horrible and i was unorganized and bitchty but this time i put more work in
I don't understand why these threads never take off. Does no one like to write? I would post mine, but it's not finished. I might soon if this thread does not get locked. Also after periods put a space, it's an eyesore to read your story.
[QUOTE=Burgervich;33263111]I don't understand why these threads never take off. Does no one like to write? I would post mine, but it's not finished. I might soon if this thread does not get locked. Also after periods put a space, it's an eyesore to read your story.[/QUOTE]It was a good idea, we just got a really bad OP who doesn't realize that proper spelling, grammar, capitalization, punctuation and spacing is a must on Facepunch.
[QUOTE=Burgervich;33263111]I don't understand why these threads never take off. Does no one like to write? [/QUOTE] I'd contribute if I could write well and think of an original plot for once.
[QUOTE=Lordgeorge16;33263273]It was a good idea, we just got a really bad OP who doesn't realize that proper spelling, grammar, capitalization, punctuation and spacing is a must on Facepunch.[/QUOTE] Want me to remake the thread?
[QUOTE=Burgervich;33263703]Want me to remake the thread?[/QUOTE] Yes do, once my story is done I wouldn't mind posting it.
some guy walks into a bar..... now he is in the hospital,then a dragon flies up and eats him. hahaahahahahahahahahahahahaha:suicide:
I guess i will actually post my story on Deviantart named "Doctor" Its about a medic who is named james, and how he captured the intel. Contains some blood and deaths... but its about TF2 though :P "Doctor "You wanna hear a touching story?" said Sniper. Several scouts nodded in agreement. "Alright, here is a story about a medic, and how he captured the intel" Sniper said. James is a normal medic in the RED team. He and his friend, Alex, are going to fight the BLU team. James and Alex waited for the rest of their teammates in the resupply room. They were in 2fort, which was filled with snipers. "Alright men, it's time we get ready. War begins in 50 seconds." A soldier said. James grabbed his medigun, and Alex grabbed his scattergun. They were ready. James began to build up something called a "Ubercharge" which makes both him, and his partner invincible for several moments. He only got up to 33% before the games began. James rushed outside the resupply, and saw a hallway leading to the Intel. He saw a friendly engineer begin to block it with a dispenser, and built a sentry nearby. James and Alex ran towards the battlements, and jumped! They both land in the sewer water below, while James heard a bullet fly by his head. He began to heal Alex, hoping to get to 100% uber. Alex ran ahead of him, and James only got to 45% uber. He sighed, and heard footsteps. He was on high alert, and looked around. He put his back away from the wall, and he heard a weird electronic noise. He turns around and sees a spy about to cut him! He dodged the knife, but the spy tried again, this time, cutting his cheek. James took out his bone saw, and stabbed him through his chest. Blood gushed out, and he covered his eyes. "AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!" the spy cried out. He fell to the ground, twitching then still. James ran towards the enemy base, and heard "Alert! We have taken the enemy intelligence!" James continued to run, and saw Alex, running off with the intel, being chased by tons of BLUs. This gave James some time to avoid being killed. He ran towards the intel room, and saw their intel was empty of sentries. He sees a few dead bodies on the ground, and avoids them. "DOCTOR!" he hears behind him. He turns around, and sees a friendly heavy. James then spy checks him, by staring in his eyes. He learned that spies' disguises have emotionless eyes. Luckily, it was a real heavy. James heals him, and they both hear "We have captured the enemy intel! Congratulations." The both then see the intel come back and his heavy friend goes ahead and takes it. He continued to heal the heavy, and they make a run for it. James and the heavy run up the spiral climb, and saw a sentry at the top. Then, the best thing that could possibly happen happens. The ubercharge then reached 100%. Heavy then drops the intel, and James flips the switch. A sudden warm feeling enters their bodies. They look at their skin, and saw that it's red! Heavy rounds by the corner and shoots at the engineer and the sentry. The engi was killed, and the sentry was destroyed. The uber then ends, and heavy then goes back to get the intel. They then continue to escape, and run towards the front exit. BLUs were waiting for them, and began to shoot. James took cover behind the heavy, and kept the medigun on him. Then, the heavy kept trying to dodge the bullets, but it wasn't too long, till that final blow hit him in the skull. Heavy began to lose feeling in everything. He falls to the ground, and goes black. James reacted quickly, and took the intel. James dived into the water, with the intel. He swam all the way to their sewer, and continued to run. Loads of BLUs were behind him. He made it up the stairs, when he felt a sudden pain in his left calf. He was shot! He limped all the way into their base. He made it to the basement, where friendly sentries and engis greeted him, and celebrated. He made it to the intel room, and placed the intel on the table. "We have captured the enemy intel! Congratulations." was the last thing he heard, until he blacked out. He woke up in the resupply room, being healed by several medics. "Are you ok? That was some sacrifice you made out there. I can't believe you captured the intel!" they all chattered. James was happy to be ok, and saw Alex sitting there, also having an injury. Apparently, he was shot in the arm. James then felt bad to the heavy that sacrificed for James' own life. He may have not been in school, but he learned, that even though you might know them, they might give their life for you. THE END. All the scouts were asleep before he finished. When he did finish, he looked at them and was very angry. "YOU FALL ASLEEP IN STORY TIME AGAIN; I WILL SHOOT YOUR HEADS OFF!" Sniper angrily yelled."
[QUOTE=milesedgeworth;33397301]I guess i will actually post my story on Deviantart named "Doctor" Its about a medic who is named james, and how he captured the intel. Contains some blood and deaths... but its about TF2 though :P "Doctor "You wanna hear a touching story?" said Sniper. Several scouts nodded in agreement. "Alright, here is a story about a medic, and how he captured the intel" Sniper said. James is a normal medic in the RED team. He and his friend, Alex, are going to fight the BLU team. James and Alex waited for the rest of their teammates in the resupply room. They were in 2fort, which was filled with snipers. "Alright men, it's time we get ready. War begins in 50 seconds." A soldier said. James grabbed his medigun, and Alex grabbed his scattergun. They were ready. James began to build up something called a "Ubercharge" which makes both him, and his partner invincible for several moments. He only got up to 33% before the games began. James rushed outside the resupply, and saw a hallway leading to the Intel. He saw a friendly engineer begin to block it with a dispenser, and built a sentry nearby. James and Alex ran towards the battlements, and jumped! They both land in the sewer water below, while James heard a bullet fly by his head. He began to heal Alex, hoping to get to 100% uber. Alex ran ahead of him, and James only got to 45% uber. He sighed, and heard footsteps. He was on high alert, and looked around. He put his back away from the wall, and he heard a weird electronic noise. He turns around and sees a spy about to cut him! He dodged the knife, but the spy tried again, this time, cutting his cheek. James took out his bone saw, and stabbed him through his chest. Blood gushed out, and he covered his eyes. "AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!" the spy cried out. He fell to the ground, twitching then still. James ran towards the enemy base, and heard "Alert! We have taken the enemy intelligence!" James continued to run, and saw Alex, running off with the intel, being chased by tons of BLUs. This gave James some time to avoid being killed. He ran towards the intel room, and saw their intel was empty of sentries. He sees a few dead bodies on the ground, and avoids them. "DOCTOR!" he hears behind him. He turns around, and sees a friendly heavy. James then spy checks him, by staring in his eyes. He learned that spies' disguises have emotionless eyes. Luckily, it was a real heavy. James heals him, and they both hear "We have captured the enemy intel! Congratulations." The both then see the intel come back and his heavy friend goes ahead and takes it. He continued to heal the heavy, and they make a run for it. James and the heavy run up the spiral climb, and saw a sentry at the top. Then, the best thing that could possibly happen happens. The ubercharge then reached 100%. Heavy then drops the intel, and James flips the switch. A sudden warm feeling enters their bodies. They look at their skin, and saw that it's red! Heavy rounds by the corner and shoots at the engineer and the sentry. The engi was killed, and the sentry was destroyed. The uber then ends, and heavy then goes back to get the intel. They then continue to escape, and run towards the front exit. BLUs were waiting for them, and began to shoot. James took cover behind the heavy, and kept the medigun on him. Then, the heavy kept trying to dodge the bullets, but it wasn't too long, till that final blow hit him in the skull. Heavy began to lose feeling in everything. He falls to the ground, and goes black. James reacted quickly, and took the intel. James dived into the water, with the intel. He swam all the way to their sewer, and continued to run. Loads of BLUs were behind him. He made it up the stairs, when he felt a sudden pain in his left calf. He was shot! He limped all the way into their base. He made it to the basement, where friendly sentries and engis greeted him, and celebrated. He made it to the intel room, and placed the intel on the table. "We have captured the enemy intel! Congratulations." was the last thing he heard, until he blacked out. He woke up in the resupply room, being healed by several medics. "Are you ok? That was some sacrifice you made out there. I can't believe you captured the intel!" they all chattered. James was happy to be ok, and saw Alex sitting there, also having an injury. Apparently, he was shot in the arm. James then felt bad to the heavy that sacrificed for James' own life. He may have not been in school, but he learned, that even though you might know them, they might give their life for you. THE END. All the scouts were asleep before he finished. When he did finish, he looked at them and was very angry. "YOU FALL ASLEEP IN STORY TIME AGAIN; I WILL SHOOT YOUR HEADS OFF!" Sniper angrily yelled."[/QUOTE] nice story,the opening was kind of awkward, other than that it was great
Banshee By: Jorge Rivera On October 30, 1954 all the inhabitants of a small village ended up dead the day before Halloween earning the nickname “Death’s Gateway”. Legend says that every night before Halloween a demon would appear and kill anybody that has either wandered lost into the village or wanted to see if the myth was true. Many believe that it is true but for those brave souls that ventured into Death’s Gateway no one can explain their disappearances. Many have entered the land in groups or by themselves but no matter how many people enter no one returns. Five teenagers decided to go investigate the abandoned village on October 30, 2010. It was a sunny morning in Austin, Texas where there was only one more day until Halloween arrived. Jason wanted to do something that he always wanted to do. He wanted to go to the abandoned village a mile away from the city to see if the legend is real or if it is just a load of baloney. Of course he would not go alone. When he got to campus he saw his friends sitting along the edge of the enormous fountain on the lawn of the school as always. He walked over to them and was about to open his mouth when his best friend, Zack, spoke first. “Jason what’s up with that smile on your face? It’s creeping me out”. “He probably won the lottery or something”, said Zoey who suddenly lit up “did you?” “Nope I just have this great idea tha-“ ”Another one of your ‘great ideas’”, said Kate” I can’t wait to hear this one.” “Hey! Hear me out,” said Jason, “by the way I already apologized like a thousand times to Mr. Brown for lighting his pants on fire.” Everyone laughed as they recalled that hilarious day. “Well”, said Bill,” don’t keep us in suspense.” “Wow I never knew you were that stupid”, Zoey said. “What? I thought you liked it!” Jason exclaimed, “How about you Kate? You look like the kind of girl that likes taking risks.” “No way am I going through with that plan! Are you nuts!?!” Kate yelled. Everyone was uncomfortable after what Jason said what he wanted to do. He wanted everyone to bring tents and sleeping bags so they could prove that the legend was nothing more that a hoax. Zack sighed and said, “Well it looks like you’ll go even without us so I’ll tag along anyway.” He smiled hesitantly at Bill. “How about you Bill? Want to go?” Everyone stared at him while he thought it over. “Yeah, sure. Why not?” Jason began to feel hopeful. “C’mon ladies! There are three big, strong gentlemen that wouldn’t let a fly harm you two. What’s the worse that could happen?” “Death” the two girls said. Eventually they also agreed and Jason couldn’t wait until school was over. They all agreed to meet in front of the school at eight thirty with all their supplies. Jason arrived first and was waiting impatiently. Eventually they all got there and they were off. A few meters away from the entrance of the village there was a sign that said “dissenters be damned.” They ignored it and continued along the path to the village. There was a gate with chains around it to prevent people to enter it. “Good thing I brought my dad’s pliers,” Zack said. When they broke the chain the gate slowly opened as if to welcome them. “Well let’s start getting ready. Zoey and Kate set up the tents while Bill, Zack and I get the bonfire going.” In the middle of their work a strong gust of wind blew down on them and laid them out flat on their back. “What was that?” asked a frightened Zoey. “I don’t know but that was some strong wind,” said Jason, “It nearly knocked the air out of me.” Bill, in a serious tone, said “Jason I swear if anyone gets hurt on this little trip of yours, you’ll never see the light of day again.” “What a way to treat a friend after he helped you pass for the finals and prevented you from getting kicked out,” Jason said glumly. “I’m just saying that I don’t want anyone to get hurt so from here on out no one ventures off into the village. If you need to use the bathroom or something go with a friend. Do NOT go alone. Understood?” Everyone nodded. “Alright,” Bill said “everyone back to work.” It was eleven thirty and everyone was frightened by then. A series of events had unfolded and left them scared and desperate. Kate tried to leave but everyone told her to not worry for nothing will happen to them. So far they had been wrong. Another strong wind came, five times stronger than the other, and hurled a tree branch that stabbed Zack In the calf. Then the fire went out of control and burned Zoey’s hand badly. They were prepared for incidents but not of this magnitude. With Zack and Zoey injured everyone wanted to bail but Jason wouldn’t allow it. “C’mon guys,” said Jason “we only need to stay here a while longer and then we are done!” Everyone stayed but no one could understand why Jason didn’t want to leave even though everyone else wanted to, but he just kept insisting. As midnight began to near everyone began to get hopeful. Maybe their bad luck has stopped. Then out of nowhere a piercing scream filled the night air. Everyone covered their ears in pain and as suddenly as the noise started it stopped. It was replaced by something that sounded like laughter. Everyone went into one of the closest tent and zipped up the entrance. They heard footsteps that with each passing moment got louder and louder. Then the footsteps stopped in front of the other tent that was empty. Then something growled and they heard it rip apart the spare tent. When it found that it was empty it made a sort of snickering sound and walked slowly towards the only tent remaining. Everyone waited for what seemed to go on forever until they heard the footsteps stop and the heavy breathing from outside stop. Then suddenly a claw came down and while it ripped open the tent it hit Kate on the side of the head. Her body fell forward and everyone was silent. The motionless body suddenly screamed in agony as the monster screamed into the night. Since the monster destroyed the tent they got their first look at the thing. It looked like a man except it was pale white, very tall and had a huge mouth like snake’s do. It stared at the teenagers for a half second and smiled, showing its row of sharp teeth. The second it smiled they ran. Jason picked up Kate and slung her over his shoulders while Bill carried Zack with Zoey at his side. The person just watched them, still smiling. They ran for the gate but the demon ran at an impossible speed and cut them off. When Zack saw this he pulled out a firecracker, lit it and threw at the demon. It looked at it and before it could go after them again the firecrackers exploded and scared the demon so much that it ran somewhere into the village. They took advantage of the situation and ran though the gate and sealed it behind them. They made a pact to never talk about the events that took place ever again. The End btw send feedback first short story and tell me if you guys have any specific genre for stories :)
Its good but stop posting here go to burgervich this thread is dead
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