These are really old but some of my bests
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[url]http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs9/i/2006/069/4/8/Inner_Depression_by_Pale_Death.jpg[/url]
[url]http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs38/f/2008/356/f/4/Gothic_and_Morbid_by_Pale_Death.jpg[/url][/media]
-=Life in death=-
blackend soul,
markings of failure,
this distant feeling,
awful disgrace,
this is my world,
its red sky and brown sea's,
this is my life,
this dead carcase
I call my body
Yes everythings pretty depressing and morbid but it's just the style I prefer
Filter raped skyline:
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But I like what you did with yourself(?) all over the picture. However, most of you(?) don't have shadows, so that's disappointing.
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[QUOTE=TheDeadHo;19352843]
-=Life in death=-
Blackened soul,
Markings of failure,
This distant feeling,
Awful disgrace,
This is my world,
Its red sky and brown sea's,
This is my life,
This dead carcass
I call my body.[/QUOTE]
There were a couple of spelling errors in your poem, so I fixed them because I felt like it.
Write a more cheerfull poem, something with more meaning. That is how one should start writing poems, and then when getting better at it one can go to the more depressing dark side.
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