My friends and I entered a 48 hour film competition for fun. We came 2nd overall and won best cinema - General

My friends and I entered a 48 hour film competition. The competition organisers set the title, a line of dialogue which we had to use and a prop. Title: Friends With No Benefits Prop: Pillow Dialogue: No money in the world could buy that. [media]http://vimeo.com/95803095[/media] Would be really awesome to get some feedback on this (keeping in mind there was basically 1 day to film and 1 day to edit). Thanks!

(director here) I really enjoyed the thing, going from your original criteria to pillow russian roulette was really clever, and you totally deserved an award for cinematography. if you want constructive criticism, a couple shots were a bit soft focused and I think you could've cut to credits after hoodie's head got blown off. The last 20 second stinger right before the credits seemed unnecessary to me. Those two nitpicks aside, it's really impressive, especially only having two days to work on it, I usually take fucking months to come up with 10 seconds of footage.

I agree about the last 20 seconds. Maybe have his head blow up, show some blood soaking into the pillow so it's clear what happened, and then end it there. I can't believe you got Aaron Paul on such short notice, though! So, how long did it take to find a place to film? Like, the stump flanked by two trees and the clearing and that really green stretch of grass - did it take long to find? Did you have it in mind? Also, I don't think I heard the phrase 'no money etc.' in the film anywhere. Is it in English?

[QUOTE=Krinkels;44900304]I agree about the last 20 seconds. Maybe have his head blow up, show some blood soaking into the pillow so it's clear what happened, and then end it there. I can't believe you got Aaron Paul on such short notice, though! So, how long did it take to find a place to film? Like, the stump flanked by two trees and the clearing and that really green stretch of grass - did it take long to find? Did you have it in mind? Also, I don't think I heard the phrase 'no money etc.' in the film anywhere. Is it in English?[/QUOTE] It's just after the head smash. After driving to a place we knew had lots of cool looking trees and stuff in the forest it took about 20 minutes to find that specific spot. We live on the edge of a national park. I will inform my friend of his likeness to Aaron Paul :v:

The cinematography was pretty darn good, probably could've done with a few more close-ups and more time to build up tension before the head smash, but otherwise it was pretty neat. The sound was a bit off, it was pretty difficult to hear what the characters were saying, I didn't catch the line of dialogue either. And I agree with the others that the last section was sort of unnecessary. But yeah, like I said, overall, pretty flippin neat

Wow that was really good. The way the tone changed then changed again was very well done. Seriously, I'm impressed. How did you come up with the idea?

Oh man that was quality stuff! I how quickly it turned comedic after that dark build and then bam! I jumped out of my seat at that scene haha. That location is beautiful i would kill for something like that where i live I didn't understand the end though how you did another session, it made me expect another twist The look was beautiful though and that focus pull at 1:00 followed by the zoom, perfect suspense building. I'm currently a film student and we had a competition with the same kind of rules They gave us the word "Crack" and 24 hours to make a short that involved the word in anyway possible Here's our one: [video=youtube;dY_mEvEB2yc]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dY_mEvEB2yc[/video] We attempted to make a film that was so stupid it was funny but during editing we ended up adding some super dark music and them voice overs (spoken by yours truly) that just made the whole film take a dark turn. We won best film for ours aswell which was really cool