A friend of mine thinks that she's a fantastic author.
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One of my close friends has written a book of her own! I'm hoping that it turns out well, and I want her to get some constructive criticism from someone other than a friend. I came to Facepunch hoping that she could get some additional assistance. A lot of the time, it's hard to critique a friend's story for fear of insulting them, so I think that having strangers read it will be much better. She's even using it as a blog as well, so her friends (like me :D) can see what's up in her life outside of school.
Here's what has been published so far.
[URL="http://finallyeamfb.webs.com/"]http://finallyeamfb.webs.com/[/URL]
If you can read through the whole thing and then post a comment in the guestbook, it'd be really helpful!
EDIT: She's actually using the webs.com site as both a blog and hosting for her story. Read the posts first, then read the story-- the link is in the sidebar to the left.
I can't understand where to find the book?
Crush her dreams, feel better about yourself!
[QUOTE=KillerKane;20864054]I can't understand where to find the book?[/QUOTE]
[URL="http://finallyeamfb.webs.com/finallybyeamfb.htm"]http://finallyeamfb.webs.com/finallybyeamfb.htm[/URL]
She's the next Stephanie Meyer.
[quote]
“Yes, I do. By the way Ebony, stop speaking business geek-ese. [B]Its stupid[/B] and you know you’re just [/quote]
its stupid what?
I bet she has a little crush on you.
I read the first paragraph. I am incredibly confused here.
Tell her she needs to read some better books if she wants to write better fiction. I mean hell, I copied the story of Metal Gear Solid 3 for my GCSE English coursework and I got an A* :smug:
Good [B]GOD.[/B]
[quote]Finally, as I opened the car door I turned to see the diner we used to meet at all the time.[/quote]
Ow. What?
It would be terrible to put a link to your thread in her guestbook.
[QUOTE=Jobby;20864177]It would be terrible to put a link to your thread in her guestbook.[/QUOTE]
lol thx for the idea
Edit: Btw if you read this whoever the fuck you are girl this is what the true original post said before he edited cause he panicked -
[quote]A somewhat-friend of mine seems to think that she's actually a good author. She's currently working on a "book" called Finally. She always uses an alias online-- Emily Ann Marie Faith Benjamin. Apparently, she's planning to change her name to it later on.
Anyways, she's created a small site and posted both the prologue and the first chapter of her shitty story. She has a tenuous grasp of the English language, but it seems that she doesn't actually know how to write good fiction. The bitch actually managed to work most of her friends into the story, including myself. I told her repeatedly to not include me, but she really doesn't listen. My name IRL is Jake, so she put me in as "Jake Xavier". She's the kind of person who enjoyed the Twilight series, and believes that her entire life is shit, even though she's spoiled. She's obsessed with a guy named David. He's a nice guy, and we share some mutual friends, but she can't shut up about him. From what I've heard, her mom is also a strict Christian. The girl just pisses me off. I can't be a dick, though, since she's friends with my girlfriend.
Here's what has been published so far.
[url]http://finallyeamfb.webs.com/[/url]
If you can read through the whole thing without vomiting, I salute you. Good luck.
EDIT: She's actually using the webs.com site as both a blog and hosting for her story. Read the posts first, then read the story-- the link is in the sidebar to the left[/quote]
I could not read past the first two sentences.
[QUOTE=zin908;20864147]I bet she has a little crush on you.[/QUOTE]
What? No way-- I've already got a girlfriend, and she has a boyfriend!
Piss poor.
a GOOD author is that guy in the TF2 section who wrote WaR FACE
[QUOTE=lettuce_head;20864158]Tell her she needs to read some better books if she wants to write better fiction. I mean hell, I copied the story of Metal Gear Solid 3 for my GCSE English coursework and I got an A* :smug:[/QUOTE]
you serious bro?
This is like a fictionalized autobiography, and it's horrible :v:
EDIT: HEY YOU! READING THIS THREAD. Wanna know what happened without having to read through 17 long, but lulz-worthy pages?
[url=http://www.facepunch.com/showpost.php?p=20872591&postcount=621]READ ME![/url]
[QUOTE=Jobby;20864177]It would be terrible to put a link to your thread in her guestbook.[/QUOTE]
:dance:
You should suck up to her and fuck her.
Oh my. Were the guest book links really necessary? I wanted to get a bunch of critiques and surprise her so that she could improve her story!
[url]http://finallyeamfb.webs.com/apps/guestbook/[/url]
:cawg:
OP: Maybe she won't realize it's you if she's really this horrible at reading and writing.
It doesn't matter about what you think about your work, it's about what others think.
I'll make a flowchart for you.
Does she have nice boobs?
No-->[sp]she's a shit author[/sp]
Yes-->[sp]She's a great author[/sp]
[QUOTE=Musicfreak59;20864248][url]http://finallyeamfb.webs.com/apps/guestbook/[/url]
:cawg:[/QUOTE]
wasn't me officer, I swear
:laugh:
[QUOTE=Jobby;20864177]It would be terrible to put a link to your thread in her guestbook.[/QUOTE]
Too late...
Tell her its good and then tap that, but say it in fancy english.
For example, say "I want to frolic in your meadow".
[QUOTE=lum1naire;20864266]wasn't me officer, I swear[/QUOTE]
What were we talking about again? :3:
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