Nerd-core rap video I made - General

I decided to start making nerd-core rap videos. I know this one is not really of professional quality but i think its still funny. Let me know what you think, or ways to improve in the future. [url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hoMfTIpNHpo[/url]

You sound bored.

smexy [editline]06:02PM[/editline] needs mor leg and by leg i mean talent

i have heard this beat before my name is snackpack dam

For some CC you should learn flash or after effects and make a nice little flashy video instead of a slideshow of pictures from around the internet. Don't use that video of you brushing your hair back and just singing into the camera as it's fairly boring and the viewer loses interest minus the fact that you're hot. The rapping lacked enthusiasm, like the poster above said, you sounded bored.

And personally I thought the lyrics were kinda lame :/

Why do you need more than one thread for this?

you should have just made a music video, rather then inserting some random shitty ass pictures.

Is she going to respond or let the thread rack up comments?

Get more breath girl your constant gasping for air ruins the flow. And I don't like rap.

[QUOTE=onox37;18562659]Is she going to respond or let the thread rack up comments?[/QUOTE] just trying to get the views

You need to rap it with more "power", right now it just sounds like you're sitting with a paper reading the lyrics. And you need to get a bigger flow in how you pronounce the words, it get's a bit choppy from time to time and it makes it sound kinda bad. I liked the lyrics though, but you could use a bit tidying up on that front so that there's a more natural flow in what you rap. And yes, you really need to update the video, perhaps draw some cartoony stuff to go along with the lyrics? And then you can mix it up in after effects (there should be a trial version for that). It's a good try nonetheless, but I really think you should do the things I noted and it would be even better. :)

[QUOTE=onox37;18554648]For some CC you should learn flash or after effects and make a nice little flashy video instead of a slideshow of pictures from around the internet. Don't use that video of you brushing your hair back and just singing into the camera as it's fairly boring and the viewer loses interest minus the fact that you're hot. The rapping lacked enthusiasm, like the poster above said, you sounded bored.[/QUOTE] she's really not that hot at all.

not hot k

Put some heart into it.

[QUOTE=TurtlePower;18552470]If you weren't good looking no one would care[/QUOTE] This, sorry to say. [editline]12:40AM[/editline] The Jeeves has spoken.

[QUOTE=Master_Jeeves;18577206]This, sorry to say. [editline]12:40AM[/editline] The Jeeves has spoken.[/QUOTE] Who are you and why do I care that you spoke?

I don't really know why everyone is commenting my appearance, I didn't ask to be rated on that. Thanks for the advice and criticism on the video though, I will try to sound less bored and be more gangsta.

well you did talk about your looks in the song

you really need learn how to rap and not to rhyme.

[QUOTE=Obe1kenobi;18579047][B]I don't really know why everyone is commenting my appearance, I didn't ask to be rated on that.[/B] Thanks for the advice and criticism on the video though, I will try to sound less bored and be more gangsta.[/QUOTE] You do realise you're on the internet right?

Also having a video is a rather visual thing, if you don't look good in it there's a legitimate point of complaint right there.

[QUOTE=Obe1kenobi;18579047]I don't really know why everyone is commenting my appearance, I didn't ask to be rated on that. Thanks for the advice and criticism on the video though, I will try to sound less bored and be more gangsta.[/QUOTE] You should feel flattered, people on the interwebz thing you're hot. :quagmire:

[QUOTE=Master_Jeeves;18607040]You should feel flattered, people on the interwebz thing you're hot. :quagmire:[/QUOTE] Wow, good one.

I don't understand people who listen to nerd core rap or make it. Really? Rap about nerds? Jeez. Actually I don't understand people who like rap anyway, but oh well.

You wouldn't understand, honkey. [editline]03:40PM[/editline] Oh shit my avatar, hhahaaa.

I just took a look at you vids.. is that a piercing under your upper lip??

Some of the rhymes seem off, but it's good nonetheless. Like people said before, add some effects instead of a slideshow. I found myself uninterested with the pictures. Just something to work on.

Hey I'm a nerd I have no life ~PPPWWWWN N0000BS~ fuk yea Im a girl but suck my dick what a great way to write a song.