Topic of Song
 Never Falling In Love Again
 Not Been Able to Call You Mine Again
 Depression
 Beware
 I am going to leave
I want a song with a rhythm of a love and heartbroken
My thought
The feelings that I feel are worthless I am heartbroken like a torned up wall
Oh baby boy why did you this to me I thought you love me now I am heartbroken girl I miss you boy I am leaving without you
Every time I dream you are in my heart
Make you feel better
Thought that I could trust you with my heart
Let me be free
My heart was left stranded with a broken seen
That boy who broke it was my lover
He just left like nothing
When I see you your smile bright up my day
When you are next to me I just feel like holding you down
Baby can you see you were my everything I had no intensions to hurt you or anything
I miss those crazy nights where would oovoo each other
I miss calling you mine
I miss having you around when I am upset and happy
I hate that I can’t kiss you anymore and tell you how much I love you
I tell you that I miss you but you tell me to stop but you know you are my world.
I can’t go a day without thinking about you
I want a love and emotional song but i dont know how to start it.
Babe, you just ain't fuckin' me right.
I just can't stand it, night after night.
Could work for an "I'm leaving" song.
[editline]17th November 2013[/editline]
Though, to be honest, what you have is pretty good as is.
Just end it right there with a gunshot and some lyrics that sound suspiciously like suicidal thoughts.
Perfect for the whole short sighted teen love theme you have going there.
facepunch is an interesting choice to ask tbh
I need help on how to start it I want to fix the lyrics and make it better
[QUOTE=Singing_Girl;42888910]I need help on how to start it I want to fix the lyrics and make it better[/QUOTE]
Okay, like this.
step 1. Burn what you currently have
step 2. don't write stupid heart break songs like Taylor Swift, they're not creative and no one cares.
Step 3. come up with a semi-decent rough idea for a song
step 4. understand how your lyrics have to match the over-all rhythm of the song
step 5. compose music
step 6. write lyrics
torned up wall
u wot
also what is keeping the length of a line relatively consistent
also way to be hipster and use oovoo
are you sure you're from america?? your grasp of english is tenuous at best
-snip- need to rethink before pui is issue
I can just tell you're gonna have a blast here on Facepunch
Why not write something like this? [video=youtube;iY4GqG8BUSc]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iY4GqG8BUSc[/video]
Prolly much more fun
I live in America but I am not from America..but I was born in a Spanish speaking culture im from the Carribean Island..
I once had a girl that was okay
we used to fuck lots every day
then with a skip and a twirl
she ran off with a girl
and now i hear they're both gay
I don't like it when you talk
Cus that just means you're not sucking my cock
i really tried it with you
i swore you were the right chick
after what you put me through
now i think i like dick
emotional love song?
"yo yo yo
i got bitches i got hoes
none of them are wearing clothes
who knows where i could go"
Maybe sing about something different and actually original, than love that a billion other songs already are about?
"emotional song" doesn't mean "i must make it about lost love"
Maybe try telling a story?
Those are the best songs if there are coupled with good rythm.
what are the feelings you feel?
just curious
try this one for an "im leaving" song
goodbye.
cut my life into pieces
this is my last resort
stop writing songs while you're a teenager
they're never good
[QUOTE=PistohlWhip;42897681]try this one for an "im leaving" song
goodbye.[/QUOTE]
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=unRldLdllZ8[/media]
:'(
You need to ask yourself : "Why is this special?" A love story is completely normal, so why is your story special? Poetic words to describe is much appreciated. You can firmly enlighten and let them realize and see it through their POV. You can take a story and then fix it. I can say I'm heartbroken, but does it really matter to anyone if they hear the song? No, but if I go in detail (this is true though, you can make up a story from someone still leaving marks of the person) that she killed my former self, made me into a pile of trash, a listener can inturpit it on their own. She is not a murderer, but what was old me, is dead and I'm worth little to nothing now. You can (and should) make it much more special then "Call me maybe", "Baby" and "Friday/Chinese Food".
[QUOTE=thelurker1234;42899145]stop writing songs while you're a teenager
they're never good[/QUOTE]
my friend wrote songs as a teenager back in 2005 and he's now in a reasonably successful band as the lead singer/writer making a living out of it
[QUOTE=Orkel;42905606]my friend wrote songs as a teenager back in 2005 and he's now in a reasonably successful band as the lead singer/writer making a living out of it[/QUOTE]
Yeah, but did his songs start out with, "I am heartbroken like a torned up wall" ?
you used me like an ash tray heart
case of the punks, right from the start
I feel like a glass shrimp in a pink panty
with a saccharine chaperone
[QUOTE=draugur;42906028]Yeah, but did his songs start out with, "I am heartbroken like a torned up wall" ?[/QUOTE]
It's straight forward, but look at all the popsongs, then this is like the riddle of the year...
why sad song more sad song:
[QUOTE]This is my cool song for sad people
I sing it with all my pride in my heart
In my heart there is a sad feeling
All the time everyday i sad singing
Lonely chords of C, G, and A
Ring like a ding bell in my face
But when you play a chord like Bb sus 69
That is a bad chord
Everyone know of good song
This is one of them I'm sure
If you are sure then let's get married
Marry me juliet you'll never have to be single[/QUOTE]
hope I could help you
The most of a "song" i come up with is just dicking around with an old synth.
Also, love songs are just boring, and overrused.
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