Working on a new song (Fruity loops)

[Pampers]

Last thread was posted in Creationism by mistake, so I'm posting it where it belongs.

[url]http://soundcloud.com/frykth/ash-and-death-1[/url]

Still needs a lot of work, but the basic stuff is down.
What do you guys think so far?

[Gen]

I like the sound

[Platinumcs]

Very Opeth-y. Awesome

[Dead Madman]

Reminds me alot of the guitar parts in 28 days later. Very awesome.

Have you been using FL for long? How long did this song take you?

[Pampers]

Thanks alot for the responses!

I've been using FL for around seven years. It's great for making ideas, and "blueprints".
This song took 2-3 hours to get all the basic stuff down. After that I've just gone in and changed some parts, added some basslines, done a little mixing etc. So I'd say 5 hours all together.

[editline]28th December 2011[/editline]

I did a bit more work on it right now;
[url]http://soundcloud.com/frykth/ash-and-death-1[/url]

[Gmod4ever]

I will admit, Plat's saying "Very Opeth-y" convinced me to give it a listen, and I will have to agree with him. Listening to the intro, I was expecting the song to pull a [url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_ijpBdyyRUg&feature=related]The Funeral Portrait[/url] and delve into a bad-ass riff.

While that didn't exactly happen, the part that it did transition to was very interesting. I particularly enjoy when the drumbeat enters the scene around 1:00. That part sounds like something Opeth would do if they were to take on a slightly industrial influence. The riff there is very nice, though. Especially at 1:30, where you get the eighth note kick staying - [b]very[/b] reminiscent of Opeth. I also like the sound of splashes you have going on, making it sound almost like a shaker.

The interlude at 2:00 is beautiful. I really enjoy that guitar tone and the melody it's playing. The power of the piano's chords at 2:20 is very... bleak. Dark and boding. Again, very Opeth-like. If you haven't guessed yet, you're going to be reading Opeth a lot in this post.

The reverse cymbal leading into the pounding eighth-note kicks at 3:15 only further darkens the tone, and I love it. The change in riff at 3:35 is beautifully executed, and the emphasis of those notes (with the melody in the background) has the same power that the piano chords did earlier in the song.

The exit is a beautiful release of the tension that the previous parts were building.

All in all, it's a beautifully dark and moody piece, and I absolutely love it. I could easily sit and listen to an entire album of tracks like this, while sitting on a simple wooden chair in the middle of an empty room, completely expunged of light with the exception of a single candle burning on a simple wooden table an arms' length away from me.

Honestly, the only issue I have is the transition at 0:29 is very jarring. I don't know how you could remedy it, but something needs to be done about that.