please, learn more about drawing, perspective, the human body, all that shit before making a comic.
Not yet. All WIP and concept so far. Want to see what people think of the idea and style first, because I don't want it to change too much as I get better.
And yes, I will do my homework. What exactly is wrong with mine as of now so I can fix it?
I think you should practice art before you go on about making something like this. Took me many years before I actually decided to start a webcomic and it paid off.
[editline]6th February 2011[/editline]
And do you think that you are too good for the title webcomic?
I am most certainly not too good for the title. I suck. That's why I am practicing, I guess I was wrong to let Facepunch see what I am working on. I just don't like the word web comic because it brings videogames and room mates to mind. I can call it "I shat on a paper" if you like. At the least I won't be releasing anything real for 6 or 7 months. I still have to write the plot, and flesh out the story for part 1, plenty of time to actually learn to draw.
"Phoenix" not "Pheonix," fyi
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And yes, I will do my homework. What exactly is wrong with mine as of now so I can fix it?[/quote]
[img]http://www.complex.com/assets/images/Entertainment/Features/072009/top40/judge-dredd.jpg[/img]
this is judge dredd, one of my favourite episodes of it too; look at yours and then look at this. Obviously, 2000AD's artists are naturally going to be far better than you are, but there are many lessons to be learned from such a great work of art, and almost all of them apply to what you've done
firstly, your human anatomy is (no offense) horrible. On your concept art, the woman looks like a hunchback with no right hand, and the man sitting on the box looks rather 2 dimensional- these are fundamental basics in the comic i've shown as it displays almost no flaws in anatomy, even when exaddurated to show features that aren't possessed by humans.
The perspectives are also mastered, as the man lying back does not look flattened nor does he seem to be attached invisibly to a cliff like the character you've drawn.
Not only this, but the faces of your characters lack immense amounts of detail; the shapes aren't too bad i suppose but the closeup just looks lazy, and extremely childish; removing any sense of seriousness from the comic as a whole. A lack of shadowing in contrast also removes any tone you were trying to set in the daybreak. In the Judge Dredd comic, shadows are placed underneath and to the sides of facial features to outline the presence of facial lines and emotional expressions; showing his fear and lack of confidence.
Furthermore, even small and seemingly minor parts of your comic such as the text boxes and writing are incredibly bothersome when looking at them. The writing is far too large and spaced apart, and isn't clean whatsoever- and the text boxes look like they were drawn in crayon
The two strips aren't too dissimilar really; if the dredd strip was used on its own it's mystery could still provide the same insight into something else like yours does; and while the story is cliche and probably the worst start for a webcomic ever, i'm not here to criticise you on that.
[QUOTE=Aurabobie;27901604][img_thumb]http://www.complex.com/assets/images/Entertainment/Features/072009/top40/judge-dredd.jpg[/img_thumb]
this is judge dredd, one of my favourite episodes of it too; look at yours and then look at this. Obviously, 2000AD's artists are naturally going to be far better than you are, but there are many lessons to be learned from such a great work of art, and almost all of them apply to what you've done
firstly, your human anatomy is (no offense) horrible. On your concept art, the woman looks like a hunchback with no right hand, and the man sitting on the box looks rather 2 dimensional- these are fundamental basics in the comic i've shown as it displays almost no flaws in anatomy, even when exaddurated to show features that aren't possessed by humans.
The perspectives are also mastered, as the man lying back does not look flattened nor does he seem to be attached invisibly to a cliff like the character you've drawn.
Not only this, but the faces of your characters lack immense amounts of detail; the shapes aren't too bad i suppose but the closeup just looks lazy, and extremely childish; removing any sense of seriousness from the comic as a whole. A lack of shadowing in contrast also removes any tone you were trying to set in the daybreak. In the Judge Dredd comic, shadows are placed underneath and to the sides of facial features to outline the presence of facial lines and emotional expressions; showing his fear and lack of confidence.
Furthermore, even small and seemingly minor parts of your comic such as the text boxes and writing are incredibly bothersome when looking at them. The writing is far too large and spaced apart, and isn't clean whatsoever- and the text boxes look like they were drawn in crayon
The two strips aren't too dissimilar really; if the dredd strip was used on its own it's mystery could still provide the same insight into something else like yours does; and while the story is cliche and probably the worst start for a webcomic ever, i'm not here to criticise you on that.[/QUOTE]
Thanks, I'll work on that. In the mean time, I'll snip what I have.
whelp this was a waste of time.
Not really, I needed the advice. I'm just snipping it so that I can get better before Facepunch rips my self esteem to ribbons.
weeeeeeeeeell.... Nothing is a good idea before you realize it. So I think you should have more to show rather than just a couple of sketches.
I have seen too many people drawing a few concept sketches but never actually make something and sorry but that's what I see here so far
well hopefully in 1 or 2 years you'll be in the position of a lot of people on fp who had a trial by fire and improved
I'm getting a relative of mine to teach me, should be interesting. I'll check back in a year or two. Thanks for the advice
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