For reasons unknown the fanfiction fallout equestria has become increasingly popular. And because its been talked about so much I'm going to see how much changes if you replace all the ponies with human words.
I plan on doing all 44 chapters and possibly some side fics.
All of this is WIP so if you have better names/idea please post them.
Chapter one: [url]http://pastebin.com/XyfVvQzf[/url]
Chapter two: [url]http://pastebin.com/UBMjRLFN[/url]
Nice, I see you took my suggestion to fix the names a bit. However, there's more pony shit in there buried deep, like "coat" instead of skin, and "filly" instead of girl (or Femme, in the case of the perk name at the end). Oh, and "Earth people" as a leftover of obnoxious pony race descriptors. Sadly, it looks like this is gonna be harder than it initially seemed if you're going for full removal of ponies, since you'll probably have to actually re-write some elements to remove the factors of pony subspecies and non-pony sentient species.
Even with these weird little hiccups in it though, it already works fine as a non-pony story. Now we just have to wait and see if the various other elements of MLP lore fuck it up.
[QUOTE=TurboSax;42250486]Nice, I see you took my suggestion to fix the names a bit. However, there's more pony shit in there buried deep, like "coat" instead of skin, and "filly" instead of girl (or Femme, in the case of the perk name at the end). Oh, and "Earth people" as a leftover of obnoxious pony race descriptors. Sadly, it looks like this is gonna be harder than it initially seemed if you're going for full removal of ponies, since you'll probably have to actually re-write some elements to remove the factors of pony subspecies and non-pony sentient species.
Even with these weird little hiccups in it though, it already works fine as a non-pony story. Now we just have to wait and see if the various other elements of MLP lore fuck it up.[/QUOTE]
my plan is do the easy stuff first then do the dirty deed of re-writing certian parts to make more sense for magic and magic goddess princesses and hardest of all will be the other species like griffons and the fact that the enclave live on clouds.
[QUOTE=Revolver Osha;42250550]my plan is do the easy stuff first then do the dirty deed of re-writing certian parts to make more sense for magic and magic goddess princesses and hardest of all will be the other species like griffons and the fact that the enclave live on clouds.[/QUOTE]
Well, considering the presence in the official Fallout canon of outlandish/impossible/practically-magical tech like the G.E.C.K. and the existence of radioactive mutation, I think you could easily find ways to supplement those MLP elements with official canon Fallout elements, or with made-up ones.
I suppose you could write off magic as weird tech and/or mutations, goddess princesses as mutants or something similar, and cloud-dwelling Enclave as evil people with seemingly impossible tech similar to the concept of moon-dwelling nazis. In Fallout 3 at least (haven't played 1 & 2 sadly, but I'm pretty sure the Enclave are powerful in those too), the Enclave had an obvious leg-up on the rest of the wasteland in terms of technology and man-power, so assuming they'd find a way to build cloud-dwelling structures using tech from 2077 and earlier, or even newly-invented tech isn't too far-fetched.
I think person would probably work better instead of body to replace pony, and the hoof/feet/hand and leg/arm replacements probably need checking. Plus the guards were galloping, so you might wanna include word replacements for that, trotting & cantering too. Also maybe replace apples for wine? Then they've got a wine cellar at the end because who makes apple cellars anyway. And they can all be alcoholics too.
Good work so far anyway!
Someone needs to post this to an MLP fanfiction forum.
[QUOTE=Fayez;42252635]Someone needs to post this to an MLP fanfiction forum.[/QUOTE]
Bring popcorn, marshmallows etc.
[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/GONBAnN.png[/IMG]
I posted it on the FoE subreddit.
FOE a good piece of fiction. You could probably enjoy it while hating the show itself.
Alot of people worship it so it'll be interesting to see how people flip a shit.
[QUOTE=Rangergxi;42253131]FOE a good piece of fiction. You could probably enjoy it while hating the show itself.
Alot of people worship it so it'll be interesting to see how people flip a shit.[/QUOTE]
I heard it was just a copycat from that Fallout script but with ponification.
Good lord this thread [url]http://www.reddit.com/r/falloutequestria/comments/1ms1x6/ive_started_a_project_deponizing_foe_looking_for/[/url]
Also updated chapter 1 coming soon.
[editline]20th September 2013[/editline]
Update 1: [url]http://pastebin.com/XyfVvQzf[/url]
Changed a bunch of things related to arms and legs
Changed coat to skin
Holy fuck the word pony is used a lot in this. I just deleted a lot because guard pony... really?
Changed most mentions of levitation to holding.
Apple cellar is now wine cellar.
Changed most mentions of filly to girl.
A bunch of other stuff.
[QUOTE=Devil Traitor;42253675]I heard it was just a copycat from that Fallout script but with ponification.[/QUOTE]
It's a post-apocalyptic story that has many themes from the Fallout series. But it's about ponies instead.
[QUOTE=QUILTBAG;42257421]It's a post-apocalyptic story that has many themes from the Fallout series. But it's about ponies instead.[/QUOTE]
lol
Doesn't it also contain a fair amount of graphic sex/gore?
shit i hope so
[QUOTE=latin_geek;42261363]Doesn't it also contain a fair amount of graphic sex/gore?[/QUOTE]
I actually read a few of the first chapters. Let's just say I couldn't grasp the idea of "raped zombie ponies" with a straight face.
Interesting...I am really curious to know if ponies are shoehorned in or if the story actually depends on them. I have a feeling it's the former.
[QUOTE=kariko;42262028]Interesting...I am really curious to know if ponies are shoehorned in or if the story actually depends on them. I have a feeling it's the former.[/QUOTE]
Pretty much, bronies shoehorned them into a mature game series to compensate for the fact that they watch a show for 7 year olds.
I've started work on chapter two. Should have a rough draft of it by tomorrow.
You are going to run into trouble in the later stages of the story.
Velvet still sounds too ridiculous a name.
Should be something like Vivian instead.
Still, I'm up and available to help out however I can like I said before.
[QUOTE=Blooper Reel;42278105]Velvet still sounds too ridiculous a name.
Should be something like Vivian instead.
Still, I'm up and available to help out however I can like I said before.[/QUOTE]
I'll try that for chapter two. Speaking of which here's test one of chapter two.
[url]http://pastebin.com/UBMjRLFN[/url]
I'm going to get dumbs for this but whats the point.
Are you actually going to read and change 44 chapters of some pony fanfic. Like are you doing this because its well written and you want to make it accessible to people that aren't into mlp or something.
[QUOTE=RainbowStalin;42278431]I'm going to get dumbs for this but whats the point.
Are you actually going to read and change 44 chapters of some pony fanfic. Like are you doing this because its well written and you want to make it accessible to people that aren't into mlp or something.[/QUOTE]
Its an experiment. See how much of the fic can work without ponies. And I'm probably not doing all 44 chapters.
more like social experiment to see how many megatons of raw unadulterated fandom rage you need to virtually simulate the Hiroshima bomb
I think the problem isn't technicalities like alicorns or cloud ships and shit, but more the whole ministry mares backstory. It sorta depends on the MLP (season 1) canon.
You can always just replace them with your own characters, but the development of the war and the struggle of the six to balance winning the war, ending the war and their own desires including the character development between show canon and celestia stepping off is a huge part of the story.
Someone needs to send this too Kkat.
I really enjoyed the original Fallout Equestria, and reading this, it's really, really interesting. I am going to continue reading your version, just because I want to see how you will adapt the story for the Ministry Mares.
[editline]27th September 2013[/editline]
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My own copy of the books.
[URL="http://facepunch.com/showthread.php?t=1261162&p=42027546&viewfull=1#post42027546"]This was my idea[/URL], you cock :v:
[editline]26th September 2013[/editline]
The subreddit comments are hilarious.
I am mainly following this thread to see if there is any hateful brony backlash.
[sp]jk but seriously this is amazing, keep up the good work, mate![/sp]
[QUOTE=Irespawnoften;42315000][URL="http://facepunch.com/showthread.php?t=1261162&p=42027546&viewfull=1#post42027546"]This was my idea[/URL], you cock :v:
[editline]26th September 2013[/editline]
The subreddit comments are hilarious.[/QUOTE]
I'm more testing that theory. It wasn't anyones idea. I just seem to be the first to try it it seems.
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