A Blank Slate is a short student film made as a final project but please don't read student and think 'this is going to be a load of shit.' Give it a watch and please tell me what you think and any constructive criticism that may come to mind. Enjoy!
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You have a cool apartment.
Would really like to see a driving force riding up to the photography. Otherwise, cinematography was impressive. I was pleased with how awkward everything looked,(the wobbly cycle, the tennis scene) but it didn't give me, as a viewer, the actual feeling of awkwardness.
Ah you posted it then, looks good on vimeo
I'm not sure how I felt about it, I mean quality is great, idea is great and so forth.
You are very handsome :3
[QUOTE=PayamT;30100563]I'm not sure how I felt about it, I mean quality is great, idea is great and so forth.
You are very handsome :3[/QUOTE]
Your constructive critisism is very unconventional, care to elaborate?
Also that's not him starring in the film.
[QUOTE=Klammyxxl;30088989]Would really like to see a driving force riding up to the photography. Otherwise, cinematography was impressive. I was pleased with how awkward everything looked,(the wobbly cycle, the tennis scene) but it didn't give me, as a viewer, the actual feeling of awkwardness.[/QUOTE]
Thanks for the criticism, I fully understand what you mean by the driving force to photography. I didn't mention that the project had to be under ten minutes so I guess this is why we struggled to slowly bring it in and bash it out towards the end. Thanks :)
I'm glad the guys on Video Copilot liked it
Bitchin apartment, cool main character. I liked it. In fact, i'll be showing it to some of my friends.
I don't think the really close cut you used to introduce the main characters face was a good choice because it was kind of EH as far as camera angles go, and I guessed it would end up with the camera the first time he opened the drawer, but it was actually a pretty cool movie. Looks very nice, makes sense, I like it.
might want to invest in a stabilisation plugin, mercalli for example
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I made a thingy.
[QUOTE=MedicWine;30145131]Bitchin apartment, cool main character. I liked it. In fact, i'll be showing it to some of my friends.[/QUOTE]
Hey i also created the film with the OP, it was my friends apartment. It's pretty nice. I'm glad you liked it.
[QUOTE=Biscuit-Boy;30145284]I don't think the really close cut you used to introduce the main characters face was a good choice because it was kind of EH as far as camera angles go, and I guessed it would end up with the camera the first time he opened the drawer, but it was actually a pretty cool movie. Looks very nice, makes sense, I like it.[/QUOTE]
So you think maybe a wide shot would be a more appropriate choice, then cut to a close up?
Also what's EH?
[QUOTE=lexus04;30145316]might want to invest in a stabilisation plugin, mercalli for example[/QUOTE]
We tried to stabilise some of the shots ourselves however due to a deadline to meet some shots we just had to let be a little shaky. However obviously we'd be interested in improving our piece, and since you as a viewer noticed that some shots were shaky then other viewers may be distracted by them too. Which ones did you notice in particular?
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I made a thingy.[/QUOTE]
Dude that's a pretty cool poster actually, i appreciate your efforts however the films not really about photography per se. But nice poster none the less. Once again i'm glad you like the film :)
EH is just "eh" or "meh" with caps lock on, ie I didn't like it too much but I don't hate it or what have you. Anyways, I think you should have the close ups of the board, then a backed out shot that fits the whole board with the main characters back while he faces the board, then a closer up shot at a bit of an angle, then pulling the note off and reading it, and then the angle you started with but perhaps still backed up a little bit. As is I just think it's a little too striking of a way to introduce him.
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This is the actual size of the blackboard. We tried to make it look as big as possible, this is probably why you don't see a huge wide of the board. It's deceiving.
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This is the actual size of the blackboard. We tried to make it look as big as possible, this is probably why you don't see a huge wide of the board. It's deceiving.[/QUOTE]
I can see why that wouldn't have worked then, you definitely tricked me into thinking everything was bigger. Still, at the very least back up the close up just a teensy bit. Excellent work either way.
Cheers, we'll consider changing that in another edit. Thanks for feedback!
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Dude that's a pretty cool poster actually, i appreciate your efforts however the films not really about photography per se. But nice poster none the less. Once again i'm glad you like the film :)[/QUOTE]
Well I made it to post on instagram (an iphone app/photography community) and I figured they'd like it for the photography bit at the end, but mostly the artistic aspect of it. It was more of an attention getter seeing as like 75% of my follwers have "i looove photography" in their bio.
[QUOTE=MedicWine;30146551]Well I made it to post on instagram (an iphone app/photography community) and I figured they'd like it for the photography bit at the end, but mostly the artistic aspect of it. It was more of an attention getter seeing as like 75% of my follwers have "i looove photography" in their bio.[/QUOTE]
That sounds pretty cool, i understand what you mean with the whole photography/artistic nature of the piece. Fell free to, the bigger the audience the better in the end. Thanks for the effort! :)
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