• Come check out this chiptune!
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So I got bored with FLStudio and transposed an old piano song I made up in the early stages of lessons some years ago, made some left hand V-VII chords and voila! [url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oGMM3XMx9v0[/url] Let me know what you think, positive/constructive feedback as always, and I hope you like it!
I can hear 3 repeating patterns, and your song goes pretty much 1 2 1 3 1 2 1 3 1. 1 is the main pattern and it does sound like something you'd play on a piano. I like how it sounds, it's pretty simple yet catchy. However the beats sound really off, you have a song that starts with a whole old-school feel and suddenly you have those modern beats that kinda ruin the whole thing. You should change them. Then out of nowhere, pattern 2 comes, sounding completely different from the main pattern. And then transitions back to the main pattern. I actually really like that transition, it introduces a bit of variation in your song although I think you should have done more with it. That part is just a bit too short. I'm not sure what was going on with pattern 3. It was kind of a dissonant mess with no real structure, and it was way too short to have any real impact on the rest of the song. I think it'd be better if you removed or changed it. Overall your song sounds pretty nice, but you should change the beats, as they kinda ruin the whole retro feeling. But most importantly, your song is too repetitive. It is essentially the same song played twice with an intro and an ending, the intensity remains monotonous through most of the song, and there is very little variation in the main pattern. Just keep in mind that a song should tell a story. A story needs ups and downs in order to be good and addicting, and that's exactly the same for a song.
[QUOTE=_Kilburn;43054354]I can hear 3 repeating patterns, and your song goes pretty much 1 2 1 3 1 2 1 3 1. 1 is the main pattern and it does sound like something you'd play on a piano. I like how it sounds, it's pretty simple yet catchy. However the beats sound really off, you have a song that starts with a whole old-school feel and suddenly you have those modern beats that kinda ruin the whole thing. You should change them. Then out of nowhere, pattern 2 comes, sounding completely different from the main pattern. And then transitions back to the main pattern. I actually really like that transition, it introduces a bit of variation in your song although I think you should have done more with it. That part is just a bit too short. I'm not sure what was going on with pattern 3. It was kind of a dissonant mess with no real structure, and it was way too short to have any real impact on the rest of the song. I think it'd be better if you removed or changed it. Overall your song sounds pretty nice, but you should change the beats, as they kinda ruin the whole retro feeling. But most importantly, your song is too repetitive. It is essentially the same song played twice with an intro and an ending, the intensity remains monotonous through most of the song, and there is very little variation in the main pattern. Just keep in mind that a song should tell a story. A story needs ups and downs in order to be good and addicting, and that's exactly the same for a song.[/QUOTE] thanks man! i noticed a lot of what you're saying and you're spot on with the three patterns. appreciated and i'm glad you liked it!
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